CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Gifts from the Gifted"A collection of poetry
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Comment from rama devi
Flawless in rhyme and meter, and good thoughts expressed, though I must confess I found it a bit generalized, which is not necessarily a fault. My personal taste would've been to focalize a specific example and make the artist's effect more tangible. Perhaps this is achieved by the complementary artwork. I just musing on it. The street art is superb. I got an email forward with a bunch of those...truly astonishing.
Anyway, there are no technical flaws in this, and it is a fine five star poem, but for a six star level, I would rather have been shown than told that the artist builds bridges with a subtle language.
Best of luck!~
With loving regards,
rama devi
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009
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Flawless in rhyme and meter, and good thoughts expressed, though I must confess I found it a bit generalized, which is not necessarily a fault. My personal taste would've been to focalize a specific example and make the artist's effect more tangible. Perhaps this is achieved by the complementary artwork. I just musing on it. The street art is superb. I got an email forward with a bunch of those...truly astonishing.
Anyway, there are no technical flaws in this, and it is a fine five star poem, but for a six star level, I would rather have been shown than told that the artist builds bridges with a subtle language.
Best of luck!~
With loving regards,
rama devi
Comment Written 22-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009
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rama devi, I hear you on that. And totally respect that opinion. But, I have already done that with subtle language in other works. So, thought I'd "generalize" on arts as a whole on how artistry in general transcends so much in this life. Thank you for your lovely review. Sue :-))
Comment from moosegal
Beautifully stated that we all have a creative force within us which some embrace and others ignore. I like how you then go on to point out the artist's effect on an audience and vice versa, because it is a dance after all. Teensy point of preference on my part is the word humankind over mankind, but please don't think I didn't adore your poem. Especially with the artwork, it's excellent!
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009
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Beautifully stated that we all have a creative force within us which some embrace and others ignore. I like how you then go on to point out the artist's effect on an audience and vice versa, because it is a dance after all. Teensy point of preference on my part is the word humankind over mankind, but please don't think I didn't adore your poem. Especially with the artwork, it's excellent!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009
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Yes, it is a dance! Sorry, can't use humankind...would throw my iambics off big time! HA! Thanks for your great review. Glad you liked the artwork, also. Sue :-))
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Thank you so much for reminding me that I have much to learn about poetry lingo *blush*. Pardon my comment in that case. Keep up the good works!
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No problem! Thank you for caring enough to want the work to be good and to comment!
Sue
Comment from words
The art work is so intriquing and the perfect fit for this piece!
Loved this line:
By building bridges for mankind;
A common language we can find
It is our common laguage.
Bravo!
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009
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The art work is so intriquing and the perfect fit for this piece!
Loved this line:
By building bridges for mankind;
A common language we can find
It is our common laguage.
Bravo!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009
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words, so glad you like this one. And thanks for highlighting the lines you enjoyed. Always good to know. And thank you for your very generous review. With warmest regards, Sue :-)
Comment from amada
This is a very well written homage to the artists in there. The ones "Who seek to find a voice of their own, to be refined. "
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This is a very well written homage to the artists in there. The ones "Who seek to find a voice of their own, to be refined. "
Comment Written 22-Mar-2009
Comment from Jomo17
Great job of incorporating the theme "The artist's role in life." Your poem is enjoyable to read and flows nicely. I love the picture you chose to go with it. I saw no errors. Good luck in the contest. This a really nice poem.
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Great job of incorporating the theme "The artist's role in life." Your poem is enjoyable to read and flows nicely. I love the picture you chose to go with it. I saw no errors. Good luck in the contest. This a really nice poem.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2009
Comment from NightWriter
"Gifts from the Gifted" is another beautifully written poem that has perfect rhythm and rhyming from beginning to end. Well stated and done. Bravo!
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"Gifts from the Gifted" is another beautifully written poem that has perfect rhythm and rhyming from beginning to end. Well stated and done. Bravo!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2009
Comment from jdrhye
As a fellow artist I so appreciate your words that can give atenth of an artist veiw and depth. This 3D art is great and just really expresses itself has to how an artist perceives creativity. In pastels this art will wash away in time and all the artist hopes to do is create and be appreciated. I think you have given justification to both!!
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As a fellow artist I so appreciate your words that can give atenth of an artist veiw and depth. This 3D art is great and just really expresses itself has to how an artist perceives creativity. In pastels this art will wash away in time and all the artist hopes to do is create and be appreciated. I think you have given justification to both!!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
Comment from Amfunny
Very nicely written and very beautifully expressed. I love the artwork you chose and would love to see it in real life. It is amazing. Just like your poem. Good job.
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Very nicely written and very beautifully expressed. I love the artwork you chose and would love to see it in real life. It is amazing. Just like your poem. Good job.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
Comment from Winslow
Dear Sixteen,
Creative juices flow and mold, the audience in awe beholds, genius at least to you and me, but to others, well they will just laugh and let it be. An artist is one who can beguile, even sell a boldface lie, Jackson Pollack comes readily to mind. (LOL)
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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Dear Sixteen,
Creative juices flow and mold, the audience in awe beholds, genius at least to you and me, but to others, well they will just laugh and let it be. An artist is one who can beguile, even sell a boldface lie, Jackson Pollack comes readily to mind. (LOL)
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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Hey! Don't talk about my beloved Pollock like that!!! Isn't is great to argue about the arts! An artist friend of mine and I argue the merits of Van Gogh. I can't get him to come over to my side. HA!!!! Love your rhyming review!! Thanks so much. Sue :-))
Comment from MJMuraco
Sue, nice work on this. This poem does give the message of the passion we, artists, have. I may not be able to draw but I can be creative in my writing and sometimes the passion is extremely strong. The artwork was incredible. Good Luck with this contest.
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Sue, nice work on this. This poem does give the message of the passion we, artists, have. I may not be able to draw but I can be creative in my writing and sometimes the passion is extremely strong. The artwork was incredible. Good Luck with this contest.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009