CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from adewpearl
Sue, breaks one hundred year silence - I like that line - they seem even more magnificent and mysterious after being dormant for so long - red river rages - excellent alliteration and powerful image an excellent volcano haiku Brooke
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Sue, breaks one hundred year silence - I like that line - they seem even more magnificent and mysterious after being dormant for so long - red river rages - excellent alliteration and powerful image an excellent volcano haiku Brooke
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
Comment from Brandenpaul
Wasn't exactly expecting lava to be a river. You present a very strong powerful image with your word choice for this poem on volcanos. strong write-good luck with this entry.
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Wasn't exactly expecting lava to be a river. You present a very strong powerful image with your word choice for this poem on volcanos. strong write-good luck with this entry.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
Comment from prodigal
This haiku reminded me of Mt. St. Helen. This is a very strong entry for the volcano contest. I don't think I have read a better haiku for it. Your syllable count works out, and you conjure a very strong image. Well done- Good luck in the contest.- Sam
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This haiku reminded me of Mt. St. Helen. This is a very strong entry for the volcano contest. I don't think I have read a better haiku for it. Your syllable count works out, and you conjure a very strong image. Well done- Good luck in the contest.- Sam
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is nice. I wish there were some kind of author's note to explain what you mean by red river. However, i like the short but loaded poem. kudos
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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This is nice. I wish there were some kind of author's note to explain what you mean by red river. However, i like the short but loaded poem. kudos
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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The red river is the red hot lava pouring down. I like the way you said it was "loaded". Ha! Kaboom! Thanks much for your very kind review. Sue :-)
Comment from Summer Falls
Red river! Hey I was expecting something different, Sue. The imagery of red lava flowing was a creative twist for this contest entry. Good luck in the contest!
summergirl
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Red river! Hey I was expecting something different, Sue. The imagery of red lava flowing was a creative twist for this contest entry. Good luck in the contest!
summergirl
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
Comment from rmdelta
Sue, this was terrific and a beautiful contest entry. I seldom understand these Hickyup, poems-this one, was not a problem at all. Good luck in the contest, dear friend.
Reggie
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Sue, this was terrific and a beautiful contest entry. I seldom understand these Hickyup, poems-this one, was not a problem at all. Good luck in the contest, dear friend.
Reggie
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
Comment from jeslaf
Sue, your last line ending kicker / satori is very creative and it took a second or two, but I get it--the lava flow--and I love it! :)
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Sue, your last line ending kicker / satori is very creative and it took a second or two, but I get it--the lava flow--and I love it! :)
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
Comment from Domino
Morning, Sue. Please delete the notes as I said none. I know you understandably thought rules were OK, as per my previous contest.
Incredibly powerful imagery as the 'dormant volcano' bursts into life, destroying in its path. Great last line alliteration. So clever to use 'breaking silence' metaphor. Top write!
Good luck n love, Ray xx
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Morning, Sue. Please delete the notes as I said none. I know you understandably thought rules were OK, as per my previous contest.
Incredibly powerful imagery as the 'dormant volcano' bursts into life, destroying in its path. Great last line alliteration. So clever to use 'breaking silence' metaphor. Top write!
Good luck n love, Ray xx
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
Comment from Roisin
Wow! What a fabulous haiku. You've certainly risen to the challenge and painted a wonderful mental picture of a dormant volcano suddenly erupting in a sea of molten lava. Great imagery. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Hugs
Roisin
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Wow! What a fabulous haiku. You've certainly risen to the challenge and painted a wonderful mental picture of a dormant volcano suddenly erupting in a sea of molten lava. Great imagery. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Hugs
Roisin
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
Comment from starkat
Lots of powerful imagery as this dormant volcano comes alive and we see the red river of lava start to flow. Excellent contest entry as you following the basic 5-7-5 format and Ray's rule about using the word "volcano". Since he said...no author's notes whatsoever, he might say something about your author's notes. I'm considering entering the contest, and would like to at least put in 'his notes' what this contest is about like you did. He's such a stickler for his own rules, and I got disaqualified from one of his contests...;)
Anyway...good luck in this contest. Enjoyed your haiku. You got a good one...;0)
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Lots of powerful imagery as this dormant volcano comes alive and we see the red river of lava start to flow. Excellent contest entry as you following the basic 5-7-5 format and Ray's rule about using the word "volcano". Since he said...no author's notes whatsoever, he might say something about your author's notes. I'm considering entering the contest, and would like to at least put in 'his notes' what this contest is about like you did. He's such a stickler for his own rules, and I got disaqualified from one of his contests...;)
Anyway...good luck in this contest. Enjoyed your haiku. You got a good one...;0)
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009