CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman
well done; true and thought provoking; no corrections; love the ending; I like anything that ends hopefully :-) interesting how you put this together; appreciate the author notes!
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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well done; true and thought provoking; no corrections; love the ending; I like anything that ends hopefully :-) interesting how you put this together; appreciate the author notes!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Thank you so much for your most generous review and specific comments. And so glad you like the ending, also. If there is no hope, then let's just hang it up!! Ha! - Warmest regards, Sue
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I agree about the hope :-) you are very welcome for the review, blessings, Tricia
Comment from Gert sherwood
Good Evening sixteezkid,
what a great metaphor poem clear as a bell the problems that develop within a family that is split up on account of divorce
Gert
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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Good Evening sixteezkid,
what a great metaphor poem clear as a bell the problems that develop within a family that is split up on account of divorce
Gert
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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Hi Gert, thank you for your great review and comments. I certainly appreciate your reading it. Warmest regards, Sue
Comment from tony bronk
This is quite the metaphor! You're not a simple poet; are you? II enjoy your unique style and your perspective. You seem to reach deep inside of yourself and take a good look. tony
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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This is quite the metaphor! You're not a simple poet; are you? II enjoy your unique style and your perspective. You seem to reach deep inside of yourself and take a good look. tony
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Hi again, Tony! Thanks again for reading my work. I really appreciate your review. Seems if I cannot reach deep down, then I don't have much to say in my poems. Because we all talk all day long and it is very much "on the surface". My personal take on poetry is to go well beyond all that (when we can). Thank you for your kind remarks. Warmest regards, Sue
Comment from starman
Very inventive look at a very grim future. Yes, I guess living on an outpost make one feel a bit safer.... but not much.
:)s
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Very inventive look at a very grim future. Yes, I guess living on an outpost make one feel a bit safer.... but not much.
:)s
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Alas, there is hope! Thanks so much for reading my work. I really appreciate your great review and comments. Warmest regards, Sue
Comment from jlsavell
hello sixteezkid, you know you have a very unusual style of poetry..this is quite powerful and your author's notes serve to make it that much stronger. The metaphor is quite stark and the reality is as sadly imposing. a great write..you know there is another writer you must read..you remind me of him...I'll send you a pm..jlsavell
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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hello sixteezkid, you know you have a very unusual style of poetry..this is quite powerful and your author's notes serve to make it that much stronger. The metaphor is quite stark and the reality is as sadly imposing. a great write..you know there is another writer you must read..you remind me of him...I'll send you a pm..jlsavell
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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jlsavell, thank you so much for taking the time to read this piece. Your remarks are very much appreciated! And thank you for your most generous review. Would love to have your recommendation. I look forward to it. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sixteezkid...this is an original take on the grief of divorce. I saw my daughter go through it and she grieved as much as one would after the death of a loved one. A very clever and imaginative poem....well done...blessings....chey
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Hi Sixteezkid...this is an original take on the grief of divorce. I saw my daughter go through it and she grieved as much as one would after the death of a loved one. A very clever and imaginative poem....well done...blessings....chey
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Chey, thank you for taking your time to review this piece. As it has been many years since my divorce, it has taken that long to be able to actually articulate (with hindsight) what had happened, how we all progressed and that hope is always there. We move on to a new path and grow. This does not diminish the pain, but time and distance gives us another perspective and allows us to move on. The best to you and your family. Thank you for your generous review and all your comments. Warmest regards, Sue
Comment from Hitcher
A very fresh and original look at the devastation of a broken relationship, I liked the notes that accompanied and I loved some of your word choices friend, well done.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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A very fresh and original look at the devastation of a broken relationship, I liked the notes that accompanied and I loved some of your word choices friend, well done.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Hello again, Hitcher. Thanks so much for taking the time to read my work and thanks for your great review and comments. Much appreciated with regards, Sue
Comment from Stuart Ayris
I found this to be an interesting poem and really liked it. Just a couple of points:
1. Not sure what 'scapes' are
2. 'gray arena' - 'grey arena' for the English here!
3. 'dare they claim victory' and 'with its brightness and colour' should probably have a question mark at the end
Good stuff and well done!
Stu
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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I found this to be an interesting poem and really liked it. Just a couple of points:
1. Not sure what 'scapes' are
2. 'gray arena' - 'grey arena' for the English here!
3. 'dare they claim victory' and 'with its brightness and colour' should probably have a question mark at the end
Good stuff and well done!
Stu
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Thanks very much for your review and comments, Stuart. HEY! I'm a Yank, so don't change my gray to your grey! HA!!! Nope....not going to put a question mark in there, either....Would ruin it! Just having a fun banter with you here. Thanks for your comments. Glad you like it. Regards, Sue
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No problems!! Great spirit!! Keep on keeping on as the great Bob says!
Comment from Alexander E Poet
I love the way you penned this one! This is full of truth and wisdom. From start to finish you speak of many things that are of such predominance on our earth in the human condition. I most certainly like the way you wrap up this.There was no error. No typos. Nothing to change. Check out one of mines, I look forward to your next write
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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I love the way you penned this one! This is full of truth and wisdom. From start to finish you speak of many things that are of such predominance on our earth in the human condition. I most certainly like the way you wrap up this.There was no error. No typos. Nothing to change. Check out one of mines, I look forward to your next write
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Brqqklyn, thanks again for reading my work! And for your very generous review. And thank you for your very specific comments. So glad you like it. I am now going to go read some of your work! Sincerely, Sue
Comment from Showboat
Hey Kid,
Very good analogy here, especially if those involved in the divorce still have unresolved feelings. More often than imagined, it's nothing but a profound relief when it finally happens. Most of the suffering went before.
Excellent and thank you for sharing,
Gayle
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Hey Kid,
Very good analogy here, especially if those involved in the divorce still have unresolved feelings. More often than imagined, it's nothing but a profound relief when it finally happens. Most of the suffering went before.
Excellent and thank you for sharing,
Gayle
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Gayle, I wrote this many years after the divorce. Time can only pass before one finally gets a grip on what happened, how things began to progress afterwards and that the hope so longed for does materialize. I really appreciate your taking the time to read my work and thank you for your very generous review. Warmest regards, Sue