Rain, Rain Go Away
A day from rain to clear skies75 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
What a transformation in weather in a short period of time. I can picture the crystalline air after the downpour, and the stars would show up very well - exhilarating. Beautiful poem.
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What a transformation in weather in a short period of time. I can picture the crystalline air after the downpour, and the stars would show up very well - exhilarating. Beautiful poem.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Do you mean blinded by Lightning or lighting here as (lightning) would fit much better I think. You certainly brought the storm with your words here, love Dolly x
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Do you mean blinded by Lightning or lighting here as (lightning) would fit much better I think. You certainly brought the storm with your words here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
Comment from jenintorre
I enjoyed reading your poem. I think you used the six words very wisely. Very well chosen artwork. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen
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I enjoyed reading your poem. I think you used the six words very wisely. Very well chosen artwork. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
A good use of all the required words for the contest and many starting with the same letter in a line. Really well done and even fun. I hope you do well in the contest.
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A good use of all the required words for the contest and many starting with the same letter in a line. Really well done and even fun. I hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
Comment from kiwisteveh
You have presented a picture of these events, but for me it is too blurry to bring it to life in my imagination and it seems you have just forged ahead with using the required words without giving real context - why is she sipping soda in the rain, what is the building, what exhibition, is it an art gallery, how did she stare at the stars if she was inside a building, and why is her daunting day done?
'lighting' - did you mean lightning?
Steve
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You have presented a picture of these events, but for me it is too blurry to bring it to life in my imagination and it seems you have just forged ahead with using the required words without giving real context - why is she sipping soda in the rain, what is the building, what exhibition, is it an art gallery, how did she stare at the stars if she was inside a building, and why is her daunting day done?
'lighting' - did you mean lightning?
Steve
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
Comment from Goodadvicechan
This poem meets the requirement of the contest but it does nothing to everyone.
It does not deliver any constructive message. It is silly to go out in such a weather. Sipping the soda does not give people courage to risk their health of running under heavy rain and Lighting.
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This poem meets the requirement of the contest but it does nothing to everyone.
It does not deliver any constructive message. It is silly to go out in such a weather. Sipping the soda does not give people courage to risk their health of running under heavy rain and Lighting.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
Comment from DonandVicki
A very good use of the word prompts for this contest. You added another surreal dimension to this poem with the image which complements your poem well.
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A very good use of the word prompts for this contest. You added another surreal dimension to this poem with the image which complements your poem well.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
Comment from Carol Clark2
You've done a great job working in this seemingly unrelated group of words. I like the way you've used alliteration throughout the poem. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
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You've done a great job working in this seemingly unrelated group of words. I like the way you've used alliteration throughout the poem. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Rain, Rain Go Away', is a well-written piece. Short succinct and thought-provoking-provoking. Woven though each line are the golden threads of truth. Good luck with the contest!
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'Rain, Rain Go Away', is a well-written piece. Short succinct and thought-provoking-provoking. Woven though each line are the golden threads of truth. Good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
Comment from RetroStarfish
This poem works for me. It has flow, is lyrical and, it uses all the words in the contest too. Wonderful alliteration and imagery: "Sipped her soda... ran in the rain..."
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This poem works for me. It has flow, is lyrical and, it uses all the words in the contest too. Wonderful alliteration and imagery: "Sipped her soda... ran in the rain..."
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021