Evening Stroll
The wonders of discovery on a evening walk47 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Very well done Jim.
"Though I squeezed my eyes for every last ray
this maiden, so fair, smiled a bit, my jaw dropped
as her hair shimmered in the moonlit forest canopy."
There are a couple of times a day when our world around us is the sharpest in focus I believe. :) Bob
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Very well done Jim.
"Though I squeezed my eyes for every last ray
this maiden, so fair, smiled a bit, my jaw dropped
as her hair shimmered in the moonlit forest canopy."
There are a couple of times a day when our world around us is the sharpest in focus I believe. :) Bob
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Bob, I trust you are doing well, Jim
Comment from The_Boy_Whodunnit
At first sight the structure looked a little odd having not seen this form before, but when reading it made perfect sense. I like the repetition, I think you used it well, and although the form doesn't require a line length I think you have it right and all the lines flow in a similar way which I think helps build the flow of the words. I like poems that use images of nature like this, and you've used some good and imaginative ones in this
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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At first sight the structure looked a little odd having not seen this form before, but when reading it made perfect sense. I like the repetition, I think you used it well, and although the form doesn't require a line length I think you have it right and all the lines flow in a similar way which I think helps build the flow of the words. I like poems that use images of nature like this, and you've used some good and imaginative ones in this
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Smiling back! Thank you..
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
A very lovely poem of magical imagery and such well-chosen descriptive words. The art you selected is so elegant and it mirrors the exquisiteness of Nature. I enjoyed reading your poem. :)Ralf
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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A very lovely poem of magical imagery and such well-chosen descriptive words. The art you selected is so elegant and it mirrors the exquisiteness of Nature. I enjoyed reading your poem. :)Ralf
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Ralf, I appreciate your comments may your day be filled with sunshine!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and
presentation, JLR.
-A well written poem with
effective imagery and rhyme.
-You paint a vivid word
picture with the images,
beginning with the first line.
-I like the concluding verse, too.
-Well done.
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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-Nice artwork and
presentation, JLR.
-A well written poem with
effective imagery and rhyme.
-You paint a vivid word
picture with the images,
beginning with the first line.
-I like the concluding verse, too.
-Well done.
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Smiling back! Thank you..
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You are welcome😊
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Yours is the second Trimeric I've read this morning, and I think it's a lovely style. I enjoyed reading yours with the imagery of the sun's rays showering the mountain tops, and your squeezing your eyes to get that very last ray before it sunk out of sight. Well done, a super poem and a pleasure to read. :)) Sandra
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Yours is the second Trimeric I've read this morning, and I think it's a lovely style. I enjoyed reading yours with the imagery of the sun's rays showering the mountain tops, and your squeezing your eyes to get that very last ray before it sunk out of sight. Well done, a super poem and a pleasure to read. :)) Sandra
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Sandra, thank you! Smiling back! Thank you..
Comment from royowen
You've done a great job with this trimeric Jim, even in my advancing years I still appreciate a beautiful woman. This is a super job, my friend, you are a skilled artisan, and this is proof. Well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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You've done a great job with this trimeric Jim, even in my advancing years I still appreciate a beautiful woman. This is a super job, my friend, you are a skilled artisan, and this is proof. Well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Bless you in all things wonderful, my friend!
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Well done
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The evening sun is always welcome, those last rays before night descends and doubts the light, I enjoyed your stroll and the sweet smelling flowers too, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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The evening sun is always welcome, those last rays before night descends and doubts the light, I enjoyed your stroll and the sweet smelling flowers too, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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Thank you Dolly, have a great afternoon!