Free Verse Collection
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Comment from Susan X Smith
As usual, your writing is quite elegant. I especially liked the last verse, although it did mystify. What was the penitence about, I wondered. Was it just part of a general regret? Anyway, I enjoyed reading this one.
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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As usual, your writing is quite elegant. I especially liked the last verse, although it did mystify. What was the penitence about, I wondered. Was it just part of a general regret? Anyway, I enjoyed reading this one.
Comment Written 07-May-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind words, Susan, and for the sixth star. Greatly appreciated. I changed that last line several times. Apart from being a time for joy at the Advent season, Rose Sunday is also a time of repentance. However, as your comment suggests, it doesn't really fit with the tone of the poem, so I've altered it again. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from pome lover
Lovely, lovely, lovely!
You are a gifted poet - your words bring a smile of appreciation to the reader's face - at least to mine. You also taught me something. I was not familiar with Gaudete Sunday.
Thank you for a most enjoyable read.
pome lover
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Lovely, lovely, lovely!
You are a gifted poet - your words bring a smile of appreciation to the reader's face - at least to mine. You also taught me something. I was not familiar with Gaudete Sunday.
Thank you for a most enjoyable read.
pome lover
Comment Written 07-May-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind words, pome lover, and for the sixth star. Greatly appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
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you are most welcome.
Comment from Mistydawn
What a beautifully written poem about childhood memories and family traditions. Your great word choice, description paints a vivid picture in the reader's mind. Nicely done. Good luck with your contest.
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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What a beautifully written poem about childhood memories and family traditions. Your great word choice, description paints a vivid picture in the reader's mind. Nicely done. Good luck with your contest.
Comment Written 07-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Thank you for your very kind words and complimentary review, Dawn. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Visionary memoir! Excellent free verse with biographical experience shared, with free flow of thoughts, good word visuals and imagery; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this; keep posting. Good luck. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Visionary memoir! Excellent free verse with biographical experience shared, with free flow of thoughts, good word visuals and imagery; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this; keep posting. Good luck. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 07-May-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thank you so much for your review and good luck wishes, Alcreator. Appreciated, as always. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
Excellent free verse poem. "I see the lithesome hips of roses..." beautiful!. The carefully and melodic choice of words, the flow, and cadence make this free verse a pleasure to read aloud.
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Excellent free verse poem. "I see the lithesome hips of roses..." beautiful!. The carefully and melodic choice of words, the flow, and cadence make this free verse a pleasure to read aloud.
Comment Written 07-May-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind words, Marjon. Appreciated, as always. Best wishes, Tony
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Welcome!
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Welcome!
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good Morning, Tony!
All out of sixes, but this offering deserves those stars and more.
Admittedly, I grew up in the Catholic faith, yet I do not know of "Rose Sunday."
The following stanza is particularly moving for both its emotive and visual imagery:
I see the lithesome hips of rose,
a blackbird poised
on rusted rail of iron
entwined with old man's beard,
and bones long gone.
The church bell chimes.
I grew up across from a two-hundred-year old cemetery. I cannot begin to remember the number of hours I spent there - walking among its pathways and contemplating about the lives once lived: on chiselled names of those
who passed this way before...
A moving offering, Tony...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
The church bell chimes.
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Good Morning, Tony!
All out of sixes, but this offering deserves those stars and more.
Admittedly, I grew up in the Catholic faith, yet I do not know of "Rose Sunday."
The following stanza is particularly moving for both its emotive and visual imagery:
I see the lithesome hips of rose,
a blackbird poised
on rusted rail of iron
entwined with old man's beard,
and bones long gone.
The church bell chimes.
I grew up across from a two-hundred-year old cemetery. I cannot begin to remember the number of hours I spent there - walking among its pathways and contemplating about the lives once lived: on chiselled names of those
who passed this way before...
A moving offering, Tony...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
The church bell chimes.
Comment Written 07-May-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind words, Diane. We lived a couple of hundred yards from this cemetery. It was part of my childhood, even before my grandparents were laid to rest there. Best wishes, Tony
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Beautiful poem, Tony, as was "Wonder Lost." You have an incredible gift of expression.
Wishing you a beautiful weekend...
diane
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You, too, Diane. Many thanks.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your contest entry. You are a fantastic author. I remember your wonderful novel, that I can't wait for your next one, but you are not proving yourself a poet. Wow!! Good luck with the contest.
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reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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I enjoyed reading your contest entry. You are a fantastic author. I remember your wonderful novel, that I can't wait for your next one, but you are not proving yourself a poet. Wow!! Good luck with the contest.
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Comment Written 07-May-2020
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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Thanks for your kind words, Barbara. I've spent a lot of time revising and editing my novel but am giving it a rest for a while, hoping to come back to the task with a fresh eye.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A beautiful offering for the contest, Tony, that gives the reader a taste of the nostalgia that you feel with your 'of' phrases rather than the modern take (hips of rose, rail of iron) and a feel for the forgiveness you come here sinking through personification and metaphor... well done, sir! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
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reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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A beautiful offering for the contest, Tony, that gives the reader a taste of the nostalgia that you feel with your 'of' phrases rather than the modern take (hips of rose, rail of iron) and a feel for the forgiveness you come here sinking through personification and metaphor... well done, sir! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
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Comment Written 07-May-2020
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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Thanks so much for your kind words and good luck wishes, Yvette.