Paper Dolls and Toy Soldiers
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Comment from Dean Kuch
Nice free verse depicting a day in the life of a kid playing army, Michael.
At least, I think that's what this poem is about.
I'm really not too sure.
~Dean
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Nice free verse depicting a day in the life of a kid playing army, Michael.
At least, I think that's what this poem is about.
I'm really not too sure.
~Dean
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
Comment from Miss Sherry
This is the first of your works I have read, but hope not the last. You have a certain way of wording that really pulls your poem together. Darn spell check, I love Old English! Very good job and quite compelling.
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This is the first of your works I have read, but hope not the last. You have a certain way of wording that really pulls your poem together. Darn spell check, I love Old English! Very good job and quite compelling.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
Comment from Insider98
Well, this is what I call a cute story. A kid imagining playing soldier, returning home. A very solid free verse piece!!! Excellent job! Cheers
Insider98
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Well, this is what I call a cute story. A kid imagining playing soldier, returning home. A very solid free verse piece!!! Excellent job! Cheers
Insider98
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
Comment from LIJ Red
Ignore me if this is part of the speaker's persona...just trivia---the exploding Ford was the Pinto, and derringdo (is rejected by spellcheck!) The Gremlin grew into the Pacer with one short door...by AMC...excellent free verse of a young warrior's mission...
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Ignore me if this is part of the speaker's persona...just trivia---the exploding Ford was the Pinto, and derringdo (is rejected by spellcheck!) The Gremlin grew into the Pacer with one short door...by AMC...excellent free verse of a young warrior's mission...
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Yeah. I had one of those Pintos. HA! Talk about derring-do! It's olde English and correct. But spellcheck and too many people question it, so I just give up and go with "daring do". :))
Glad you liked this. I don't think I've changed much except for the blazing speed. :)) mike
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a lovely story of a child playing soldiers, and realistically, too! I loved the
'de-liced' part, lol, you never think of soldiers having that, but I bet it's quite common when you think of where they go and how long it is between showers. Hmm. A bit pongy too! Great poem, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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What a lovely story of a child playing soldiers, and realistically, too! I loved the
'de-liced' part, lol, you never think of soldiers having that, but I bet it's quite common when you think of where they go and how long it is between showers. Hmm. A bit pongy too! Great poem, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Hi, Sandra
Happy New Year and congrats on a great 2018! Glad you liked this. Not too far from where my old brain is currently at! LOL
Thanks a million. mike
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Happy New Year to you as well, Mike. My brain too!
Comment from Rhonda Skinner
There's nothing like a young boy's imagination. I especially like the bit about the Gremlin and "I zig and zag at breakneck speed bedazzling the shadows with my resolve". But "daring do" is actually spelt "derring-do" (from Old English). I really enjoyed the chapter. Thanks for sharing it.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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There's nothing like a young boy's imagination. I especially like the bit about the Gremlin and "I zig and zag at breakneck speed bedazzling the shadows with my resolve". But "daring do" is actually spelt "derring-do" (from Old English). I really enjoyed the chapter. Thanks for sharing it.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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I keep telling everyone that, Rhonda, including spellcheck. HA! "Derring-do". But I get so much flak, I just go with the course of least resistance. Yes, you and I are correct. :))
Glad you enjoyed this. Thanks so much. mike
Comment from country ranch writer
Having fun is what a boy does playing soldier games and hiding comes naturally too. The enemy is near yet so far away one must hold the fort for one more day. Time to go home.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Having fun is what a boy does playing soldier games and hiding comes naturally too. The enemy is near yet so far away one must hold the fort for one more day. Time to go home.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Happy New Year, my dear friend. Yes, I remember those days well and I'm not so sure they're over for me. LOL
Thanks a million! mike
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boys will always be boys hehe
Comment from Earl Corp
I'm confused. Was this a kid playing soldier, a soldier who was killed in combat, or a dream by someone with PTSD? I guess the picture led me to believe one thing but the words said something else.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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I'm confused. Was this a kid playing soldier, a soldier who was killed in combat, or a dream by someone with PTSD? I guess the picture led me to believe one thing but the words said something else.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Just a kid. LOL
BUT, I love your imaginative takes on it. Wow. How cool. I like where it took you though it tells me I may need to look at it and see where i went wrong. Sometimes things are clear in the poets brain ... but they don't make it to the paper like they think. Thanks for your candid thoughts. Very helpful. :)) mike
Comment from AdaJulie
Probably my old eyes, but the font is a little hard for mr to see. But the rest of the poem as story is told is simply brilliant. Very much enjoyed. Very good.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Probably my old eyes, but the font is a little hard for mr to see. But the rest of the poem as story is told is simply brilliant. Very much enjoyed. Very good.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Sorry it was a difficult read. I guess it's the cursive. Glad you enjoyed it though. I'll stick with easier to read fonts in the future. Thanks for pointing it out. :)) mike
Comment from nordicgirl
Oh, Michael, it's been so long since I've read a nice long poem of yours. This is so warm and captures the imagination of a child like only you can do. The ending is just delightful. NG
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Oh, Michael, it's been so long since I've read a nice long poem of yours. This is so warm and captures the imagination of a child like only you can do. The ending is just delightful. NG
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019