Points of Light
Triolet47 total reviews
Comment from tfawcus
A splendid response to the picture challenge. Well chosen repeating lines in your Triolet make this a much more fluid example of the form than is usual.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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A splendid response to the picture challenge. Well chosen repeating lines in your Triolet make this a much more fluid example of the form than is usual.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Thank you, Tony. I worried about those repeating lines being too obvious so your comments are encouraging. Thank you for stopping by to read and review.
Debi
Comment from Craigitar
Very well written! I enjoyed the triolet scheme and it lent itself nicely to your poetic thoughts. Night doesn't mean the dying of the light, only the opportunity for many more suns to shine. Good job with this!
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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Very well written! I enjoyed the triolet scheme and it lent itself nicely to your poetic thoughts. Night doesn't mean the dying of the light, only the opportunity for many more suns to shine. Good job with this!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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Hi Craigitar,
Thank you for the great review and your insights on the theme.
Debi
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Triolet and an excellent interpretation of the pix this challenge. You made use of excellent rhyming words and the lines flow easily fromt the one to the following.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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A very well-written Triolet and an excellent interpretation of the pix this challenge. You made use of excellent rhyming words and the lines flow easily fromt the one to the following.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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Hi Sandra,
Thank you for the encouraging analysis and kind comments.
Debi
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
I have really enjoyed reading the "Match Stix" event poems and the Pix This Challenge. What a fun group this must be! I loved your response to the photo. "Shadows seek to veil the night." I liked that line! Well done!
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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I have really enjoyed reading the "Match Stix" event poems and the Pix This Challenge. What a fun group this must be! I loved your response to the photo. "Shadows seek to veil the night." I liked that line! Well done!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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Hi Cindy,
Thank you for the great review and for pointing out the line you liked.
Debi
Comment from poetwatch
I find your poem interesting, for it has me thinking. I believe I see through the veil of night. I read your poem like when shadows dim our light that we cannot see one must not give up but strive forward and " Soft points of light shall glow more bright." I like you poem, for words can describe, yet they can also lead the reader into more perceptive thoughts. Anyway, this is what I think.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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I find your poem interesting, for it has me thinking. I believe I see through the veil of night. I read your poem like when shadows dim our light that we cannot see one must not give up but strive forward and " Soft points of light shall glow more bright." I like you poem, for words can describe, yet they can also lead the reader into more perceptive thoughts. Anyway, this is what I think.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Hi Poetwatch,
Wow what a great compliment, both the six stars and the comments about how this verse set you thinking. I appreciate the thoughtful review. Thank you for sharing.
Debi
Comment from tmoler
It's a nice read and when read does not seem repetitiousness.
It's has a nice flow and essence to it. Although I did notice that some lines are repeated.
But I really liked it.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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It's a nice read and when read does not seem repetitiousness.
It's has a nice flow and essence to it. Although I did notice that some lines are repeated.
But I really liked it.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Thank you for the kind review. The Triolet form requires repetition -- line one is also line four and seven, line two is also line eight. I appreciate the comment that it didn't seem too repetitious because with this form it can be hard to make all those repeating lines blend in when you only have eight lines total. Thank you!
Comment from royowen
I look forward to the time when all shadow will be invaded by the light, and all those cbwebbed shadowy places will be drowned by the light. Beautifully written response to the prompt, articulte and sweetly rhymed in abaa and abab rhymed quatrains, well done, blessings, Roy
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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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I look forward to the time when all shadow will be invaded by the light, and all those cbwebbed shadowy places will be drowned by the light. Beautifully written response to the prompt, articulte and sweetly rhymed in abaa and abab rhymed quatrains, well done, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 20-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Hi Roy,
I appreciate your insights on light being victorious, and the kind comments about the writing.
Debi
