Consider the Oyster
A 20-syllable poem for the contest45 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
Perfection, not unlike my favorite - the pearl. (It's said that"pearls are for tears", which really, when you think about it, makes such sense... lol) These short poems can be marvelous, as yours shows! Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Perfection, not unlike my favorite - the pearl. (It's said that"pearls are for tears", which really, when you think about it, makes such sense... lol) These short poems can be marvelous, as yours shows! Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Many thanks, Dawn. I appreciate your comments about the metaphor and your good luck wishes. All the best, Tony
Comment from CD Richards
I've considered it, and I think it's a mean thing to do so we can have a pretty bauble. Nevertheless, your poem provides a great allegory (or is that analogy)? If only we could adopt that advice more often, how much happier would we be? Still, easier said than done, I think.
An excellent submission for the contest, best of luck with it.
Craig
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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I've considered it, and I think it's a mean thing to do so we can have a pretty bauble. Nevertheless, your poem provides a great allegory (or is that analogy)? If only we could adopt that advice more often, how much happier would we be? Still, easier said than done, I think.
An excellent submission for the contest, best of luck with it.
Craig
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Many thanks, Craig. As always, I appreciate your review and comments. Thanks, too, for the six stars and good luck wishes. All he best, Tony
Comment from Susan Burger
This is a lovely entry for the Short Poem Contest.
I love the flow and rhymes you have created.
Very nicely done.
Good luck in the competition!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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This is a lovely entry for the Short Poem Contest.
I love the flow and rhymes you have created.
Very nicely done.
Good luck in the competition!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Many thanks, Susan. I appreciate your review and comments. Thanks, too, for the good luck wishes. All the best, Tony
Comment from Pamusart
This is a good entry for the contest. Why did you say the ouster is inflamed? Maybe you know something I do not. Maybe a bite? Because I do not understand the reference. If you are talking about a particular oyster it could make sense that this oyster could be sick and inflamed. It is well written and has rhyming. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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This is a good entry for the contest. Why did you say the ouster is inflamed? Maybe you know something I do not. Maybe a bite? Because I do not understand the reference. If you are talking about a particular oyster it could make sense that this oyster could be sick and inflamed. It is well written and has rhyming. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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The oyster is inflamed by an irritant grain of sand inside its shell, around which it secretes layer upon layer of nacre to form a pearl.
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Ok thanks. Everyone does not know that. Maybe a bite?
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Note not bite. Sorry. Damn iphone
Comment from Dean Kuch
A-h-h-hhhhh ... if only we human beings could be more like the persevering, pained, pearl-wrapping oyster, 'ey, Tony?
Alas, we're not-- we're only human.
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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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A-h-h-hhhhh ... if only we human beings could be more like the persevering, pained, pearl-wrapping oyster, 'ey, Tony?
Alas, we're not-- we're only human.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Many thanks, Dean. As always, I appreciate your review and comments. All the best, Tony
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Same to you, Tony.
~Dean