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Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Reflections Change Upon Entry"possible selections for inclusion in book project
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Comment from nordicgirl
You at your best. I think I really enjoy your work when you are not trying to be clever or witty, although you are certainly both of those. This is honest and I relate to it. I have even been here I think. Plus, it sounds and looks awesome. NG
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You at your best. I think I really enjoy your work when you are not trying to be clever or witty, although you are certainly both of those. This is honest and I relate to it. I have even been here I think. Plus, it sounds and looks awesome. NG
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
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I think you have a handle on where I'm coming from based on what you're saying. That's not the norm, I assure you, but it's most appreciated. This is something I knocked off for the new club thing they have going here. I know exactly what it means. I suppose it's something more for myself really. I'm pleased you got something out of it though. You're always too kind. michael
Comment from Gloria ....
Fabulous free verse, Mav. Just the right amount of internal rhymes and other literary devices to make this a true poetic gem. And, I now know what the new clubs are all about. Great idea and I have joined.
Exceptional.
Ange
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Fabulous free verse, Mav. Just the right amount of internal rhymes and other literary devices to make this a true poetic gem. And, I now know what the new clubs are all about. Great idea and I have joined.
Exceptional.
Ange
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
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You're waaaaaayyyy to kind as always. I figure if no one understands any of it, the least I can do is make it sound decent. LOL
Yes, this IS a club thing. I somehow ended up starting a free verse club. I think maybe it is a great idea. Could be cool to get a bunch of free versers together where we can do our thing without folks brow beating us. HA!
Thanks a million, Ange
Mav
Comment from Jackson77
I did really enjoy it and it that end you reveal the greatest of grand truths that love is blue with you or without you.. No it's not all red and lovely and bliss. Love can be painful when you're in it and more painful without it..Hence blue. Great poem.But I think you know that already.
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I did really enjoy it and it that end you reveal the greatest of grand truths that love is blue with you or without you.. No it's not all red and lovely and bliss. Love can be painful when you're in it and more painful without it..Hence blue. Great poem.But I think you know that already.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
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Love your take on this and that you spent some time considering meaning. Great insights. Thanks a bunch, mike
Comment from lyenochka
This reads so smoothly and beautifully! But there are places I'm not sure if it's a good thing or sad thing, whether this love relationship spoken of in the poem is succeeding or not if a self is absorbent, can it penetrate rock so that there's understanding? And will the purple become blue? I'm left wondering and perhaps that's the goal of the poem.
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This reads so smoothly and beautifully! But there are places I'm not sure if it's a good thing or sad thing, whether this love relationship spoken of in the poem is succeeding or not if a self is absorbent, can it penetrate rock so that there's understanding? And will the purple become blue? I'm left wondering and perhaps that's the goal of the poem.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
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Yes, you are keyed in on the uncertainty perfectly. Always love your reviews. You do read and pay attention. So pleased you enjoyed and found it worthwhile. Thanks a million. mike
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Michael. I like this one so much. Again I'm pretty sure we are twins in some space and time. You welcome your readers with glorious presentation and let the words gooooooooooo! Liked it mate. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
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Hi Michael. I like this one so much. Again I'm pretty sure we are twins in some space and time. You welcome your readers with glorious presentation and let the words gooooooooooo! Liked it mate. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
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Yes, I do find your work EASY for me to follow like my brain is on the same track. Twins. :)) So delighted you liked this. I like this kind of writing that is off the top of my head. It's a particular style actually. You write as quickly as possible without pausing or thinking too much. It's supposed to use different parts of your brain. Surprising results sometimes. Anyway, thanks for a great review. This is for the new Free Verse club thing that Tom started. :)) mike
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Yeah I'm thinking about joining this one but I do not know what that one word means and feel too dumb to ask. :) Kiwi
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you mean "ekphrastic"? Just a fancy word for "writing about a work of art like a picture". It's like you write about a picture so that the writing and the picture go together. It's like they become a new piece sort of. A weird word. :))
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nice.
ok I might take this club on. I guess you would call what I write free style. thanks
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Yes. Free verse all the way. All the cool kids do it. :))
Comment from frierajac
As the reader is a vast expanse that will only absorb your dream, may I ask? Is the ekphrastic challenge different than the other new club or combined by you in this case for free verse? I read it admiring it more than others you have done.
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As the reader is a vast expanse that will only absorb your dream, may I ask? Is the ekphrastic challenge different than the other new club or combined by you in this case for free verse? I read it admiring it more than others you have done.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
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It's different and apart. I wasn't aware of Jax's club at the time. :)) The Picture Me This group has been around awhile, cool club too. Actually, I was just doing this as an experiment to help Tom with formatting, but it turned into a club. LOL
Glad you liked this. Sometimes writing "under the gun" is a great way to draw out emotions in a raw way that you might not normally tap. Anyway, check out the club. You'd be a great addition. Thanks a million, mike
Comment from Liberty Justice
Beautiful Mike. Pray tell how did you get that cursy writing and that particular color. Your poem is so lovely the way you describe your love and that you would not be anybody without this love. You designed the indentations and vivid descriptions to be in awe of the reader. WELL DONE! liberty justice lol
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Beautiful Mike. Pray tell how did you get that cursy writing and that particular color. Your poem is so lovely the way you describe your love and that you would not be anybody without this love. You designed the indentations and vivid descriptions to be in awe of the reader. WELL DONE! liberty justice lol
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Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
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Hi, Liberty
My favorite font. Garamond and click in the italics button. The color is just light violet. It's all in the advanced editor. Black background ... all my favorites. :)) So pleased you enjoyed, thanks a bunch. mike
Comment from Sallyo
feathery gloved clouds... I do love that line. The whole confection is fun to read, and the setting out is the icing on the cake. I'm not the best judge of free verse, but this has enough rhythm (and even some rhyme) for my brain to appreciate it.
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feathery gloved clouds... I do love that line. The whole confection is fun to read, and the setting out is the icing on the cake. I'm not the best judge of free verse, but this has enough rhythm (and even some rhyme) for my brain to appreciate it.
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Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
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Hi, Sally
I'm delighted you enjoyed. Tom just introduced this new "Club" thing and this is the Free Verse club. I dashed this off to see how the club is going to work etc. YES, I try and get rhythm and rhyme into my free verse. It SHOULD be readable and poetic, yes? LOL
Thanks a million, mike
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My take on verse is it ought to be poetical, yes. NOT chopped up prose.
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Yes. :)) So much of it is. Gives us poor free versers a bad name. LOL mike
