This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Up at the Manor House"Veronica is sent back again
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Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Sandra. Normally I don't read books on FanStory, but know that this is your forte and wanted to peek in to see what you were up to. This chapter is very enjoyable, written well and interesting. It intrigues the reader. You write with flowing ease, able to describe clearly the scene and what's going on. Use of dialect of characters is well done. Nice job here. Marilyn
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2017
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Hi Sandra. Normally I don't read books on FanStory, but know that this is your forte and wanted to peek in to see what you were up to. This chapter is very enjoyable, written well and interesting. It intrigues the reader. You write with flowing ease, able to describe clearly the scene and what's going on. Use of dialect of characters is well done. Nice job here. Marilyn
Comment Written 19-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much, Marilyn. I am a poet by nature, and never thought I'd write a novel. but when I posted, what was to be a short story, the reviewers made me keep on going and it ended up from being a 3000-word story, to 770000, words. This one is the sequel. It's been such a fun ride. I'm grateful to you for having a look, that is so kind of you. Thanks again, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
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It's fun to see where life takes us and your short story led you to become a novelist. We go with the flow as touted back in the 60's.
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
This flowed really well, Sandra. I particularly liked the way you handled her pondering on which Sir John this was. Easy refresher on the characters and time line without bogging down the narrative. I am not a fan of attics, too dusty too many spiders, but can't wait to see what you have stored in yours. - Wendy
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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2017
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This flowed really well, Sandra. I particularly liked the way you handled her pondering on which Sir John this was. Easy refresher on the characters and time line without bogging down the narrative. I am not a fan of attics, too dusty too many spiders, but can't wait to see what you have stored in yours. - Wendy
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Comment Written 19-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much, Wendy, I'm really pleased you liked the way I brought in the characters from the first book without over doing it. :) Sandra xx
Comment from royowen
Upon being approached by an unpleasant man seeking out Daveth's missing father, the man told them, a Sir John was seeking out the spouse of Daveth's mother, when she goes to investigate, discovers it the other Sir John's grandfather. And investigates...Well done Sandra, getting into the nitty gritty of the story, connections, well done, great weaving, blessings, Roy
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Upon being approached by an unpleasant man seeking out Daveth's missing father, the man told them, a Sir John was seeking out the spouse of Daveth's mother, when she goes to investigate, discovers it the other Sir John's grandfather. And investigates...Well done Sandra, getting into the nitty gritty of the story, connections, well done, great weaving, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 19-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much, my dear friend. I think Veronica will have her work cut out this time! I'm so pleased you are joining me in this adventure, Roy. Thank you!! :) Sandra xxx
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Welcome Sandra
