Luna's Form Poetry
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Comment from Jackarrie
Hi
I believe this poem certainly fits the title of fantasy poetry.
I really enjoyed reading it, it has fantastic imagery in it. The artwork is brilliant and so unusual.
Well done
Mary
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Hi
I believe this poem certainly fits the title of fantasy poetry.
I really enjoyed reading it, it has fantastic imagery in it. The artwork is brilliant and so unusual.
Well done
Mary
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Mary!
I'm glad you found some imagery in the poem and enjoyed reading it. Thanks for your support.
Comment from johnwilson
This is an excellent poem that runs so smoothly using such dreamy words (picture was a beautiful accompaniment to the piece). I loved the last two stanzas the best because they spoke with such original thoughts. Only one small error," Each one of the angelic sounds were"- was instead of were. Well done!
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This is an excellent poem that runs so smoothly using such dreamy words (picture was a beautiful accompaniment to the piece). I loved the last two stanzas the best because they spoke with such original thoughts. Only one small error," Each one of the angelic sounds were"- was instead of were. Well done!
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Thanks!
Comment from tfawcus
I liked your use of the envelope rhyme scheme in Verses 1, 2 and 4, with variations from it in Verses 3 and 5.
Lovely poetic phrases throughout produce a dreamy atmosphere.
Just one minor grammatical slip to amend:
"Each one of the angelic sounds
were (was) lyrical and flowery." [each one...was]
I especially liked:
"maids spinning wheels of poetry
spoke in a dream vernacular."
A most enjoyable read. Many thanks for sharing it.
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I liked your use of the envelope rhyme scheme in Verses 1, 2 and 4, with variations from it in Verses 3 and 5.
Lovely poetic phrases throughout produce a dreamy atmosphere.
Just one minor grammatical slip to amend:
"Each one of the angelic sounds
were (was) lyrical and flowery." [each one...was]
I especially liked:
"maids spinning wheels of poetry
spoke in a dream vernacular."
A most enjoyable read. Many thanks for sharing it.
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Thanks!
Comment from Cindy Warren
I wish I would have dreams like that! Imagine the poetry I could write when I woke up. Most of the time I dream about work and I wake up feeling like I worked all night. Love the picture.
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I wish I would have dreams like that! Imagine the poetry I could write when I woke up. Most of the time I dream about work and I wake up feeling like I worked all night. Love the picture.
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Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was well written. Wonderful imagery. My only thought is in the first stanza you introduce a rhyme scheme. But that is ignored in the second stanza. I would recommend that you either rhyme - and keep the pattern - or don't rhyme. But a wonderful poem with terrific imagery. Well done.
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I thought this was well written. Wonderful imagery. My only thought is in the first stanza you introduce a rhyme scheme. But that is ignored in the second stanza. I would recommend that you either rhyme - and keep the pattern - or don't rhyme. But a wonderful poem with terrific imagery. Well done.
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Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Such a beautiful poem as always Luna! I love the dreamy quality your poems have so often. I really cannot pick out a favourite part of this brilliant poem, it is exceptional from start to finish and such a pleasure to read.Divine. Kind regards, Meia :)
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Such a beautiful poem as always Luna! I love the dreamy quality your poems have so often. I really cannot pick out a favourite part of this brilliant poem, it is exceptional from start to finish and such a pleasure to read.Divine. Kind regards, Meia :)
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