Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Dreamplay"a place to gather my poetic forms
53 total reviews
Comment from mbroyles2
I'm glad I read your explanation at the end. I was like "why is she saying mother moon? She never says that."
Then I read it backwards and of course it makes sense and came out really well.
I love how you use the wizards, elves, and sprites to bring it all alive.
Terrific.
Michael
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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I'm glad I read your explanation at the end. I was like "why is she saying mother moon? She never says that."
Then I read it backwards and of course it makes sense and came out really well.
I love how you use the wizards, elves, and sprites to bring it all alive.
Terrific.
Michael
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Dear Michael,
I thank you so much for reading and leaving me this awesome review for this poem. Actually, if you look at my work on my profile that I had when I was on the site previously (it's under "luna" with a lowercase L), you'll find that I use the phrase Mother Moon quite frequently.
I'm glad you enjoyed this and thanks again for your kind words.
Yours,
Jeni
Comment from Mastery
Very well done palidrome, Jeni. I like the netire presentation especially the phrasing and thought content. Like:
"Sing and giggle, elves and sprites!
Play and fly, fairies and unicorns."
Palidromes are no easy task...(good ones at least) LOL
Blessings, Bob
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Very well done palidrome, Jeni. I like the netire presentation especially the phrasing and thought content. Like:
"Sing and giggle, elves and sprites!
Play and fly, fairies and unicorns."
Palidromes are no easy task...(good ones at least) LOL
Blessings, Bob
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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My friend Bob,
I'm glad that you were moved to read this poem and that you enjoyed it so much. Thanks for letting me know in this kind review. I'll see you next time, my friend!
Yours,
Jeni
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, how perfect is this. It reads so well one way, and then it reads as well the other way. I loved it, and very well written. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Hi there, how perfect is this. It reads so well one way, and then it reads as well the other way. I loved it, and very well written. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Dear Ulla,
Thanks so much, my friend, for choosing to read me poem and leave me this kind review!
Best to you as well.
Yours,
Jeni
Comment from mvbrooks
What an imagination to create such a positive word flow in part one--and then just as smoothly reverse the words in part two. Not sure if this is your first attempt at a palindrome, or it you're more practiced--but this poem is a great example for anyone who wants to explore the format and see a highly successful outcome.
The poem doe not only entertain with it's style, but the content airy and light and encourages one's imagination to take flight.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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What an imagination to create such a positive word flow in part one--and then just as smoothly reverse the words in part two. Not sure if this is your first attempt at a palindrome, or it you're more practiced--but this poem is a great example for anyone who wants to explore the format and see a highly successful outcome.
The poem doe not only entertain with it's style, but the content airy and light and encourages one's imagination to take flight.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Wow, my friend, what an incredible review. I'm so flattered by your kind words.
I have written several other palindromes, but this one was the most fun to write of all.
I'm glad it encouraged your imagination to take flight. If it did that, I consider my work a success.
Always,
Luna
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
And a very well written palindrome poem too, Jeni, it works perfectly both ways.
It's a poem children of all ages will enjoy, from 2 to 92+ I enjoy anything that has anything to do with fairies and wizards. Well done, my friend. xsx Sandra
I hope you are okay, I should imagine this month is not one you like going through. I'll keep you in my prayers.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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And a very well written palindrome poem too, Jeni, it works perfectly both ways.
It's a poem children of all ages will enjoy, from 2 to 92+ I enjoy anything that has anything to do with fairies and wizards. Well done, my friend. xsx Sandra
I hope you are okay, I should imagine this month is not one you like going through. I'll keep you in my prayers.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Dear sandra,
First, I would like to tell you that I'm very moved that you noticed the month and thought of me and my circumstances. His two-year anniversary is this coming Sunday, then his birthday is on March 3. If we can get through that, then we have a new year to adjust to our new normal without our son. Thank you again, I'm touched and appreciate your prayers, my friend.
Second, I appreciate your kind review. I'm happy that you enjoyed the poem, and the 2-92 comment was really encouraging.
Always,
Jeni
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
wizards are fair and mighty wizards don't match. Otherwise it is a great acompolishment for the contest. I try but they just get muddled. Very nicely done
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
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wizards are fair and mighty wizards don't match. Otherwise it is a great acompolishment for the contest. I try but they just get muddled. Very nicely done
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
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Barb, thanks so much for seeing that! I had changed the word to mighty, but went back in to change the font color and one of my changes reverted back to the original! I had proofread (apparently not that carefully, lol) but I didn't catch that one. It's fixed now and I thank you again.
I'm happy you liked this and appreciate your review.
love,
jeni
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If it is for contests they will disqualify you and this one was magnificient
Comment from estory
Nice work in crafting this poem this kind of poetry takes a lot of effort. It really creates a very balanced, twisting effect. I liked the images. they seem to jump around and dance like sprites. A good fun piece. estory
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Nice work in crafting this poem this kind of poetry takes a lot of effort. It really creates a very balanced, twisting effect. I liked the images. they seem to jump around and dance like sprites. A good fun piece. estory
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Hi estory, how are you?
Thanks for choosing to read and review this work. I'm glad that you enjoyed the images and considered it a fun piece. That's what it was designed to be.
Take good care,
Jeni
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we're getting a big storm here in NC so the store where I work was very busy and I had to work the last two days. hope to catch up on replies, do some reviewing in the next couple of days and work on my novel estory
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Yep I heard you're going to be hit by the storm.. Be careful.
Comment from Sis Cat
Oh, a palindrome, I love your dreamy, enchanting mirrored words and images which work their magic on me forward and back.
"Children dream nightly
featherbeds with soft pillows.
Sing and giggle, elves and sprites!
Play and fly, fairies and unicorns."
Your words are well chosen not only to read well backwards, but to paint pictures both times. This shows a lot of creativity and skill. Thank you for sharing your poem about this wonderful world.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
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Oh, a palindrome, I love your dreamy, enchanting mirrored words and images which work their magic on me forward and back.
"Children dream nightly
featherbeds with soft pillows.
Sing and giggle, elves and sprites!
Play and fly, fairies and unicorns."
Your words are well chosen not only to read well backwards, but to paint pictures both times. This shows a lot of creativity and skill. Thank you for sharing your poem about this wonderful world.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
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Sis Cat, good to see you!
I'm so happy that you were able to come with me into this dreamland. I was hoping it would have that effect on someone, and I should have known that it would be you!
Dreamland is indeed a wonderful world, no?
yours,
luna
Comment from Ella25
Dream a dream of dreams. Like a child full of imagination sees things we only dream. It is a beautiful composition, my friend. So cheerful and bright. Well done. Blessings, Ella
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
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Dream a dream of dreams. Like a child full of imagination sees things we only dream. It is a beautiful composition, my friend. So cheerful and bright. Well done. Blessings, Ella
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much, Ella. I'm thrilled that you enjoyed this one. Good to see you!
love,
jeni
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You are welcome, Jeni. Ella
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Palindrome Poem, it works perfectly both ways and was excellently executed. Although it was not impossible to read, it was quite hard to read the yellow on the green, just to let you know.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
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A very well-written Palindrome Poem, it works perfectly both ways and was excellently executed. Although it was not impossible to read, it was quite hard to read the yellow on the green, just to let you know.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
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Sandra, thanks for the kind review, and also the suggestion to change the font. My last reviewer had the same suggestion, so I've changed the font to a blue color. I hope it's easier to read, and I trust that you'll let me know if that is not a better color combination.
Always,
jeni
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The blue works much better, for me anyway. Some reviewer will simply not review when it is hard to read, that's why I mentioned it.
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Thanks much, I'm glad you did mention it!
