Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "In Dreams"a place to gather my poetic forms
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Comment from Thomas Bowling
A very good poem. I read recently that scientists have had some success with a device that allows you to control your dreams. The could direct them live a movie.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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A very good poem. I read recently that scientists have had some success with a device that allows you to control your dreams. The could direct them live a movie.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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Thanks for the kind and interesting review, Tom. Where could I read about this device do you happen to still have the link?
I'd be most appreciative.
luna
Comment from nancyrabbrose
I can just imagine you riding on the "winged horse" with Mickey. God bless both of you. I am so sorry for your loss. Thank you for the courage to come back to our community, to express yourself through your art. The poem is exquisite. Truly a great work of art.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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I can just imagine you riding on the "winged horse" with Mickey. God bless both of you. I am so sorry for your loss. Thank you for the courage to come back to our community, to express yourself through your art. The poem is exquisite. Truly a great work of art.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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Dear Nancy,
Thanks and extra special much for this extra special six-star rating. I'm thrilled! I take your condolences to heart and welcome your personal confidence. It's a toss-up as to whether it's courage or necessity!
Thank you again, dear friend.
"To the Moon and Back!"
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of the poem reminisces preoccupations in dreams and their diverse nature.
The work highlights special sights, beauty, horse ride on wings and funtime with gay.
The work earns its texture through the use of onomatopoeia,alliteration. metaphor and rhymes.
Excellent work! Bravo !
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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The objective correlative of the poem reminisces preoccupations in dreams and their diverse nature.
The work highlights special sights, beauty, horse ride on wings and funtime with gay.
The work earns its texture through the use of onomatopoeia,alliteration. metaphor and rhymes.
Excellent work! Bravo !
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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Lloyd,
I thank you for this kind and informative review.
To the Moon and Back!
luna
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Welcome Back!
Remain Blessed!
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
A well written piece you have crafted here. Flows really well throughout and the repeated refrain at the culmination of each verse works well.
Nice to see the true meaning of 'gay' in usage once again too...
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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Hi there,
A well written piece you have crafted here. Flows really well throughout and the repeated refrain at the culmination of each verse works well.
Nice to see the true meaning of 'gay' in usage once again too...
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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Thanks for all your kind words...if it were my 'druthers, I'd like to see no other meaning of the word"gay." I love that word, always have.
Comment from papa55mike
This is a wonderfully written poem about the memories we keep in a special place in our hearts. Healing comes from writing, it's painful though. Keep them coming.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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This is a wonderfully written poem about the memories we keep in a special place in our hearts. Healing comes from writing, it's painful though. Keep them coming.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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I'm happy that you enjoyed this poem and got the point of it. Thanks for the kind review!
Comment from tfawcus
It's a while since I've read a Monotetra. It's an interesting form, with its haunting echo in the last line of each stanza. Yours are especially effective in the second and third: "we have to weep, we have to weep" and "Oh, rest unkind, oh, rest unkind!" though I suggest punctuating the latter "Oh, rest unkind! Oh, rest unkind!"
You've composed a fine poem here with steady rhythm and some inventive rhyming.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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It's a while since I've read a Monotetra. It's an interesting form, with its haunting echo in the last line of each stanza. Yours are especially effective in the second and third: "we have to weep, we have to weep" and "Oh, rest unkind, oh, rest unkind!" though I suggest punctuating the latter "Oh, rest unkind! Oh, rest unkind!"
You've composed a fine poem here with steady rhythm and some inventive rhyming.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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Thank you so very much. I'm glad that you enjoyed the poem, the rhyming, and rhythm. When I complete my answers for my reviews I'll take a look at the line in that poem. Thanks for the suggestion.
L
Comment from quicksandyamurray
This is very cool. It touches on all the things our mind tries to come to grips with or would rather dwell on. It captures the feel of each visionary pattern we dream. I really like the contrast between the second and third stanzas. from moonbeams to the boogeyman. great piece, and for your dreams I pray for great peace.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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This is very cool. It touches on all the things our mind tries to come to grips with or would rather dwell on. It captures the feel of each visionary pattern we dream. I really like the contrast between the second and third stanzas. from moonbeams to the boogeyman. great piece, and for your dreams I pray for great peace.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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I thank you for your gracious and detailed review of this poem, and wish you a Happy Thanksgiving.
Comment from sanejane
There's a lovely ethereal quality to your poems, and this one is no exception.
I have one suggestion, this line:
during the night, during the night.
The meter would be improved if you could maybe changed it to:
throughout the night, throughout the night.
It's a beautiful poem; the quadruple rhymes and repetition in the last line of each stanza adds to that dreamlike mood.
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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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There's a lovely ethereal quality to your poems, and this one is no exception.
I have one suggestion, this line:
during the night, during the night.
The meter would be improved if you could maybe changed it to:
throughout the night, throughout the night.
It's a beautiful poem; the quadruple rhymes and repetition in the last line of each stanza adds to that dreamlike mood.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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Dear sanejane,
Thank you for the lovely review.
I appreciate your kind words, and also your important suggestion. I'm going to make the change for it will greatly improve the work... Its wonderful to be back amongst others who will help me learn and refine my work.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Monotetra, I am not very familiar with this format, but it seems you done a great job with this poem. The rhymes are excellent and the lines flow fluently from the one to the next.
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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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A very well-written Monotetra, I am not very familiar with this format, but it seems you done a great job with this poem. The rhymes are excellent and the lines flow fluently from the one to the next.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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Dear Sandra, I'm happy that you enjoyed my poem. Thank you for this review and happy holidays.