Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

What a lovely picture you have painted for us with your words. The rhyming is perfect. The meter is spot on. This is what poetry should be.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016

Thank you, Thomas for such a lovely review. I'm happy that you enjoyed my poem.

I'm sorry this reply to your kind review is so late. I've just returned from Philadelphia dealing with the loss of my dear sister-in-law. I hope you understand.

Again, thank you for the review!

Comment from mbroyles2

Exceptional

How beautiful and full of passion.
I'm sorry for your loss but what a wonderful way to keep his memory alive.
The rhymes were great, the pace terrific.
We can surely see the mystical meadow creatures dance.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016

First, I must thank you for the amazing six-star review! I'm honored. I'm grateful for your condolences.

I'm sorry this reply to your kind review is so late. I've just returned from Philadelphia dealing with the loss of my dear sister-in-law. I hope you understand.

Again, thank you for the review and six stars!

Comment from Lu Saluna

Excellent

Welcome back Luna, I am quite new to FanStory, only a couple months.
I am deeply sorry for the loss of your son. I read what you wrote about Mickey, he sounds like he was simply lovely. Your love for him shows in your writing.
Your Kyrielle Sonnet is magical and mystical. It has a lyrical lilt and bounce that is a joy to read. Mythical creatures and the endless child (Peter) Pan help keep youth inside us alive forever.
Blessings,

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016

Dear Lu, thank you for your condolences. I appreciate your kind words about my son and of course the lovely review.

I'm sorry this reply to your kind review is so late. I've just returned from Philadelphia dealing with the loss of my dear sister-in-law. I hope you understand.

Again, thank you for the review!

Comment from mermaids

Exceptional

I love fantasy poetry and your words take the reader into the forest and dance with the fantasy creatures. I admire your creation of the Kyrielle Sonnet, not an easy poem to creature. There is a musical feel to your words as well. Nothing less than a six.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016

Dear Mermaids, I've got to thank you so much for the lovely six-star review.

I'm sorry this reply to your kind review is so late. I've just returned from Philadelphia dealing with the loss of my dear sister-in-law. I hope you understand.

Again, thank you for the review!

reply by mermaids on 25-Nov-2016

I am sorry for your loss. Elaine

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Hello, Luna. It's so nice to make your acquaintance.
I'm deeply sorry about the loss of your son. It's never easy losing someone you dearly love, much less one of your children.

Your mystical, lyrical, fantasy-fueled poem is beautifully composed. It has a sing-song ambiance to it, and the poem reads as smooth as ice melting then sliding down a frosted window pane when read aloud.

I did notice one small typo which I will point out to you below.
It comes in the second stanza, in the final line of the stanza:

Mystical meadow [creaatures] creatures dance. ... You have included an additional "a" in the word "creatures" here where indicated in red.
No big deal, but I thought you'd like to know.
Great poem, Luna (Jeni), and very well composed.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016

Dear Dean, I believe I've been writing my reviews backwards, for I feel we're already well-acquainted. Thank you so much for your kind condolences, telling me what you liked about the poem. I appreciate that you read it aloud.

Also, thanks for the note about the nit in my poem; it's been fixed.

Looking forward to getting to know you, Dean!

reply by Dean Kuch on 21-Nov-2016

I read everything aloud, Luna. Even my own poetry as I'm working on it.
I gives you a much better "feel" for the sound, I think.
You are wleome,
~Dean :}

Comment from Writer51

Excellent

This poem leaves me with a lilting feeling. I can see these hazy looking characters gently dancing through a meadow. It's a nice poem that gives the reader a chance, if just for a moment, a chance to escape from reality.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016

I'm sorry this reply to your kind review is so late. I've just returned from Philadelphia dealing with the loss of my dear sister-in-law. I hope you understand.

Again, thank you for the review!

Comment from barleygirl

Excellent

First, let me say I was completely mesmerized by reading your profile . . . so very sorry for the death of your Mickey . . . thanks for sharing the circumstances so generously & openly. This poem is so awesome, it inspires me to write something in a similar vein. I love the motif of dancing creatures & your alliteration in "Mystical Meadows". I love the musical details like a pan flute & the way you paint your word scene which is vivid & original.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016

dear barleygirl, thank you so much for your condolences, it really means a lot to me.

As for the poem, I'm thrilled by every word that you wrote, for that is exactly what I was going for.

I'll look up your profile and read some of your writing!

reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016

dear barleygirl, thank you so much for your condolences, it really means a lot to me.

As for the poem, I'm thrilled by every word that you wrote, for that is exactly what I was going for.

I'll look up your profile and read some of your writing!

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

You have elected to follow the rhyming couplet option, apart from the final couplet, throughout this kyrielle sonnet, as do most people. I can't help but feel the the alternate rhyme might work better. I alway feel that the final couplet of the kyriell is left hanging without a rhyme. For me it lacks closure. Please understand this a comment on the form itself and not your rendition of it here which is perfect.

Typo here:
"Mystical meadow crea(a)tures dance.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016

Dear Pantygynt,

First, thank you so much for calling my attention to the typo. Don't ever hesitate to do that, as well as leave your honest opinion of my work. That's what I want. Now you've inspired me to write one using the alternate rhyme.

reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016

Dear Pantygynt,

First, thank you so much for calling my attention to the typo. Don't ever hesitate to do that, as well as leave your honest opinion of my work. That's what I want. Now you've inspired me to write one using the alternate rhyme.

reply by Pantygynt on 16-Nov-2016

I will look out for it.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written Kyrielle sonnet. A very good subject used. The lined flow effortlessly from the one to the other. The repeating lines are strong.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016

I'm flattered to receive this glowing review from a top poet. I'll look your profile up and check out your writing, which I'm sure is magnificent.

Thanks again!

Comment from valmay

Excellent

A beautiful, airy, magical poem. This is the first time I have read this form of Sonnet and it seemed to lend itself to the lightness of the subject, but that was probably just because you are so clever. Lovely. Valmay.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016

Dear Valmay, I'm flattered by your review. I'm happy that you found it airy for that is what I was intending. I'll seek out your work and read some.