Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

God first aim of connection (God's)

A very deep poem regarding sky/ground, dark/light. Good use of imagery in this poem, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017

Thanks for the heads up, suffering many such pits in my writes, appreciate others as yourself who aid. Good look out.

Comment from Challah1202

Poor

I found this incomprehensible. Science and God are beyond the capacity of human intelligence, but word salad is no better. You must state your proposition with enough clarity for people to engage with your thought.

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 Comment Written 01-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016

I feel you believe it or not this is the beginning genesis and as it no one hear wishes to understand its message. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.

Comment from marion

Excellent

Hi there
A very complex piece of writing. Each sentence couplet makes you ponder and search for explanation. Some this very humble person does not understand. Too complex for enjoyment. However, this does not mark down an excellent work. Artwork exceptional.
Marion

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 Comment Written 01-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016

The piece relates the Genesis account hell doesn't allow to be said, why it hasn't been perceived by religious conceptions. Glad you found depths in spots and your thoughts will aid in revisions so all aspects be captured. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.