To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "Exotic "Poems by Michael
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Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A very well written free verse, my friend. All of the stanzas are wonderful, but I especially like:
eternal quenched thirst encores oasis
rapture desert from dry land if you don't
mind control
Good write. Take care~Debbie
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A very well written free verse, my friend. All of the stanzas are wonderful, but I especially like:
eternal quenched thirst encores oasis
rapture desert from dry land if you don't
mind control
Good write. Take care~Debbie
Comment Written 24-Jun-2016
Comment from l.raven
HI Michael, exotic and very sensual...one of the things I miss about getting older....your just to tired to go dancing...something I always loved doing... very romantic...very nicely written...picture says it all...love the music...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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HI Michael, exotic and very sensual...one of the things I miss about getting older....your just to tired to go dancing...something I always loved doing... very romantic...very nicely written...picture says it all...love the music...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 12-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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really.....I had noticed. Just got up...I promise it wont happen again....love to you....Michael
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I was just trying to say that I missed not dancing...I did it a lot growing up...nothing more was meant by it...just that I like to dance...love you too
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I know exactly what you're doing....I'm smarter than you-
Comment from P1
love the song you have chosen to accompany this
excellent poem. you have made it exotic and erotic
without having to put a rating on it. i really enjoyed
reading it and it was a pleasure to review
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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love the song you have chosen to accompany this
excellent poem. you have made it exotic and erotic
without having to put a rating on it. i really enjoyed
reading it and it was a pleasure to review
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Well Paige you won....after tango we rumba....-smile- ahhaha...thank you Dear Sweet Feminine persuasion. you sure look splendid this evening...may I...? love to you...Michael
Comment from Gert sherwood
Not only Exotic poem but very fast what I call speedy poetry in motion especially- when
Spartacus confident gladiator
count on coming sooner than later
amorousness teases temptations kiss
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Not only Exotic poem but very fast what I call speedy poetry in motion especially- when
Spartacus confident gladiator
count on coming sooner than later
amorousness teases temptations kiss
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Thanks Gert...-smile-...appreciate it...love to you. Michael
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You are welcome Michael,
Gert
Comment from RiseRutland
I'm likely unqualified to review/rate your work as it's in a genre I'm completely unfamiliar with. I was honestly lost and didn't understand what the point of the piece was. Again, my fault, not yours.
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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I'm likely unqualified to review/rate your work as it's in a genre I'm completely unfamiliar with. I was honestly lost and didn't understand what the point of the piece was. Again, my fault, not yours.
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Comment Written 11-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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yes indeed you are much much better at reviewing your own culpability. please keep your shadow from my sunshine. Sincerely yours-
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I'm so sorry. I shouldn't have offered a rating and certainly had no intention of raining on your parade.
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go sink into the dark shadow...-smile-
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I'm so sorry. I'm new to the site and have now realized that I shouldn't even review something that I don't follow. My sincerest apologies.
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you've given two reviews both one star....what do you follow...?
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Trust me, I'm changing my ways. Again, I'm new to the site so not sure what I might follow yet. I mostly write poetry but have recently started writing short stories. I'm such a novice that it was totally unfair of me to rate your work; I just didn't realize that at the time. Again, my sincerest apologies for my error.
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-handwave-
Comment from papa55mike
Wow, I love the total package. Well written with a video and a song. I haven't figured that out and probably won't. I'm technology challenged.
Have a great day and God bless
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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Wow, I love the total package. Well written with a video and a song. I haven't figured that out and probably won't. I'm technology challenged.
Have a great day and God bless
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Comment Written 11-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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yea hey Papa...whats up....yea, well "wow" of course....Ol' Rec's known for his "swoon" poetry...what elses is new...?...haha....thanks man...mucho appreciation...this ones been a blast...big love all around. Michael
Comment from lfemine
This has some very nice imagery and passion but I found it difficult to understand. There seems to be too much description and not enough communication of what you are trying to say.
One thing I'm always revising is making sure the reader will get what I'm saying. At times, I've had criticism of my poems for lack of understanding. Often, WE understand it but others do not. So I would advise keeping your audience more in mind. It's something I had to practise, a viewpoint thing.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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This has some very nice imagery and passion but I found it difficult to understand. There seems to be too much description and not enough communication of what you are trying to say.
One thing I'm always revising is making sure the reader will get what I'm saying. At times, I've had criticism of my poems for lack of understanding. Often, WE understand it but others do not. So I would advise keeping your audience more in mind. It's something I had to practise, a viewpoint thing.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Yea well you'd have to have been there.....so I understand your nievity. Check please....
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Yes, I WASN'T there but what I'm trying to say is a piece of writing should always have a message to the reader and I don't see that. Maybe others do.
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Louie Louie....smile
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Thank you
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always my pleasure to dance...-smile-
