A Requiem
In ballad measure52 total reviews
Comment from Mary Wakeford
Wow!!! Amazing read and the thought of life and love, death and taking advantage of every breath. This is quite remarkable in depth and content, and the red background and white lettering gives it almost an urgency that should not go unnoticed. Quite an enjoyable and thought provoking read. Superb! Bravo!
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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Wow!!! Amazing read and the thought of life and love, death and taking advantage of every breath. This is quite remarkable in depth and content, and the red background and white lettering gives it almost an urgency that should not go unnoticed. Quite an enjoyable and thought provoking read. Superb! Bravo!
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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Thanks so much, Mary, for your review of A Requiem and gift of six stars. Much appreciated! I'm delighted that you enjoyed it and found meaning in it. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Lisa Deverick
I am so pleased that I had a six star to present to you. This poem is utterly amazing. I wish I had written it- for if I had, I would ask my sons to read it at my own funeral. It is profound and I think you are a talented writer. Well done!
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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I am so pleased that I had a six star to present to you. This poem is utterly amazing. I wish I had written it- for if I had, I would ask my sons to read it at my own funeral. It is profound and I think you are a talented writer. Well done!
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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What a lovely review, Lisa! Thank you so much! The six stars much appreciated, too. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Gloria ....
This is quite different from your usual offerings, Tony. Perhaps it's the form. Course me being a big fan of ballad measure might be the other reason the premise seems leaner.
I did stumble on the line:
Then go out and live your life as it seems one syllable short to me.
Suggestion: Then out you go and live your life,
Even though that changes the meaning ever so slightly.
Which reminds me I have some gardening that needs tending as well.
Great job.
Gloria
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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This is quite different from your usual offerings, Tony. Perhaps it's the form. Course me being a big fan of ballad measure might be the other reason the premise seems leaner.
I did stumble on the line:
Then go out and live your life as it seems one syllable short to me.
Suggestion: Then out you go and live your life,
Even though that changes the meaning ever so slightly.
Which reminds me I have some gardening that needs tending as well.
Great job.
Gloria
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Thanks, Gloria. Yes - on re-reading, I see that the rhythm of both the last two verses is a bit of a dogs' breakfast. Will have another look at them this evening! Happy gardening. Tony
Comment from I am Cat
Another stellar poem, deserving accolades! I love your mind, Tony... The way you think about things, is so refreshing, or perhaps it just reminds me of myself sometimes.. LOL (well, I'm refreshing as well) ;)
I adore birds... I've even had a few pets who look much like this one... without the LSD flashback edges ;) and I found this just quite wonderfully whimsical.
I adore it... and that mind.... may I have it when you're finished with it? ;)
great job...
now...go out and live your life,
and free yourself from care.
You once were earth, again will be.
Enjoy your breath of air! ;)
Cat
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Another stellar poem, deserving accolades! I love your mind, Tony... The way you think about things, is so refreshing, or perhaps it just reminds me of myself sometimes.. LOL (well, I'm refreshing as well) ;)
I adore birds... I've even had a few pets who look much like this one... without the LSD flashback edges ;) and I found this just quite wonderfully whimsical.
I adore it... and that mind.... may I have it when you're finished with it? ;)
great job...
now...go out and live your life,
and free yourself from care.
You once were earth, again will be.
Enjoy your breath of air! ;)
Cat
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Delighted to let you have my mind, piece by piece, in poems. The vehicle that carries it is, however, unfit to drive. Must go now and do a spot of gardening in the sunshine and endure the racket of those infernal parakeets!
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lol... Well, you could have the flash flooding we're having... carry on! ;)
Comment from Liberty Justice
WHOA Five 5 stars. This poem flows with spirutual hope and dawns a reality that "you once were earth again you'll be. Very heartfelt and verses flow. Check mine out now also dear poet. Good luck. liberty justice
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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WHOA Five 5 stars. This poem flows with spirutual hope and dawns a reality that "you once were earth again you'll be. Very heartfelt and verses flow. Check mine out now also dear poet. Good luck. liberty justice
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Many thanks, LJ. Glad you found spiritual hope in my poem. Tony.
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Hi check mine out also
and Good luck contest
today. liberty justice
Comment from His Grayness
Nothing short of "ABSOLUTELY SPLENDID"!!!. Beautifully packaged in color and related artwork. wonderful lines of wisdom, very well delivered with excellent poetic precision! Thanks for a very special and uplifting read! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Nothing short of "ABSOLUTELY SPLENDID"!!!. Beautifully packaged in color and related artwork. wonderful lines of wisdom, very well delivered with excellent poetic precision! Thanks for a very special and uplifting read! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Good to hear from you, Vance. Very many thanks both for your kind review and six stars. I'm delighted that this resonated with you. Tony
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You certainly earned those stars Tony, as USUAL for you fine works! Vance
Comment from Taffspride
This is so beautiful, as I read your lovely words I am sitting on my lanai listening to the birds. Who are singing so joyously that they gave your poem life.
I read it aloud and it simply flowed.
Thank you for sharing
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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This is so beautiful, as I read your lovely words I am sitting on my lanai listening to the birds. Who are singing so joyously that they gave your poem life.
I read it aloud and it simply flowed.
Thank you for sharing
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Very many thanks, Ann, both for the review and six stars. I'm delighted that this resonated with you. Tony
Comment from Wabigoon
Tony--
Whole lot of things I like in this poem. Like this:
Forever frugal with his love,
he locked it into words.
Oh, do not make the same mistake,
You've written a kind of Ozymandias it seems to me. It is, at once sad, brave and, in it's way, true. I just finished arguing, or replying to a response to a response to a review in which I claimed we poets, artists, in general, do some very real work. The same kind that auto-mechanics do, only with words. Trouble is the work we do with words in the Garden is claimed by the CEO. The CEO, proclaims only He can work in that fashion with words, touch that magical quality in them that makes them Words. I disagree, therefore I disagree in some measure with your poem. I think we are not given the respect we are due, instead considered "mere" singers of songs. The hammer is lost, the nail is lost, the creation that flows from the poem is lost, the "tool," not unlike Prospero's wand is thrown overboard all in an effort to fit in, be ephemeral like we are told we are. The "work" of the arts is not ephemeral, reality is based upon it, therefore I refuse to follow your argument to its conclusion. Sure, lonely, sure sailing your ship alone, but doing really hard work upon which the "ephemeral" reality of all these other folks is based. That is brave and takes true strength.
Best
Wabigoon
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Tony--
Whole lot of things I like in this poem. Like this:
Forever frugal with his love,
he locked it into words.
Oh, do not make the same mistake,
You've written a kind of Ozymandias it seems to me. It is, at once sad, brave and, in it's way, true. I just finished arguing, or replying to a response to a response to a review in which I claimed we poets, artists, in general, do some very real work. The same kind that auto-mechanics do, only with words. Trouble is the work we do with words in the Garden is claimed by the CEO. The CEO, proclaims only He can work in that fashion with words, touch that magical quality in them that makes them Words. I disagree, therefore I disagree in some measure with your poem. I think we are not given the respect we are due, instead considered "mere" singers of songs. The hammer is lost, the nail is lost, the creation that flows from the poem is lost, the "tool," not unlike Prospero's wand is thrown overboard all in an effort to fit in, be ephemeral like we are told we are. The "work" of the arts is not ephemeral, reality is based upon it, therefore I refuse to follow your argument to its conclusion. Sure, lonely, sure sailing your ship alone, but doing really hard work upon which the "ephemeral" reality of all these other folks is based. That is brave and takes true strength.
Best
Wabigoon
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Many thanks for this interesting review, Wabigoon. I agree with your central premise about the critical importance of writers and of poets, in particular. At their finest they throw light upon the dull routine of life and elevate one's perception. I had intended this more as an argument for seizing the day and making the most of life. However, I can see that I have also suggested that penning ones thoughts is a waste of time and effort. I may look again at the wording of some parts to redress the balance.
Comment from damommy
You have a very good, important message in a poem that is beautifully written. The meter and rhyme are right on.
What a lovely thing piece to leave behind for others to read.
Beautiful. 8-)
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reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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You have a very good, important message in a poem that is beautifully written. The meter and rhyme are right on.
What a lovely thing piece to leave behind for others to read.
Beautiful. 8-)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Very many thanks, Damommy, both for this very kind review. I'm delighted that my poem resonated with you. Tony
Comment from djeckert
Wow, a most beautiful write for sure. I loved every word of it. You said so much, and so gloriously. God Bless you and your writing... a most definite treat.
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Wow, a most beautiful write for sure. I loved every word of it. You said so much, and so gloriously. God Bless you and your writing... a most definite treat.
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Very many thanks, DJ, both for the review and six stars. I'm delighted that this resonated with you. Tony
