senryu (feel of the spring sun)
5-7-5 contest45 total reviews
Comment from jusylee72
Spring sun reawakening. Enjoyed it very much. These short poems are hard to review but I will tell you I understood it. Hibernating face is a great description . Thank you.
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Spring sun reawakening. Enjoyed it very much. These short poems are hard to review but I will tell you I understood it. Hibernating face is a great description . Thank you.
Comment Written 09-May-2016
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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Thanks so much, jusylee, for this great review and your kind comments for my poem. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your comments. Thanks!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A well-written 5-7-5 poem, after the winter we still feel sleepy and cold, then the warmer Spring sun are so inviting it immediately wakes you up and makes you feel alive
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A well-written 5-7-5 poem, after the winter we still feel sleepy and cold, then the warmer Spring sun are so inviting it immediately wakes you up and makes you feel alive
Comment Written 09-May-2016
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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Thanks so much, Sandra, for this great review and your kind comments for my poem. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your comments. Thanks!
Comment from John Parkin
I find it difficult to comment on 5-7-5 poems but I liked yours as it depicted a feeling that a changing season does to almost any living thing in three lines and fourteen words.
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I find it difficult to comment on 5-7-5 poems but I liked yours as it depicted a feeling that a changing season does to almost any living thing in three lines and fourteen words.
Comment Written 09-May-2016
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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Thanks so much, John, for this great review and your kind comments for my poem. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your comments. Thanks!
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Your welcome.
Comment from jonathan1
Wow. almost metaphoric. I loved this piece. It can be hard to convey much with such a short piece. But this is very clever and well crafted
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Wow. almost metaphoric. I loved this piece. It can be hard to convey much with such a short piece. But this is very clever and well crafted
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Comment Written 09-May-2016
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Thanks so much, Jonathan, for this great review and your kind comments for my poem. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your comments. Thanks!
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Anon. Beautiful little piece and a very good contest entry. The only advice I would have is to add a picture because the others I have read today all have one. Having said that, these short forms should be able to speak for themselves without a picture and this one does it beautifully.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers Fez
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reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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G'day Anon. Beautiful little piece and a very good contest entry. The only advice I would have is to add a picture because the others I have read today all have one. Having said that, these short forms should be able to speak for themselves without a picture and this one does it beautifully.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers Fez
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Comment Written 09-May-2016
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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Thank you for your review and comments for my poem. I appreciate your feedback. I couldn't find a photograph good enough, so rather than use just anything, I'd rather go without, and allow the words to form a picture in the reader's mind instead.