Comment from davisr (Rhonda)

Excellent

I feel another good story brewing up here. Sounds like you were off to a good start in life at an early age. I'm guessing you were like, 5, in 1957, right? Well, however old you were, you seemed to be very headstrong. I await eagerly your next installment! Take care,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015

THank you, Rhonda. LOL, I graduated high school in June, 1957. Glad you enjoyed this. Looking forward to having you along. Did you catch my other post on page one?

reply by davisr (Rhonda) on 07-Sep-2015

I'm not sure, I've gotten behind on this site since school started back, and they actually want me to take time out of my busy FS schedule to teach! I slip over and check it out!
Rhonda

Comment from Curly Girly

Excellent

This is another penned / typed chapter, Jay. It read well to me, and I admire your fancy image inserts. Now, we'll have to wait and see what was earned back in 1962. I bet it was shockingly little in comparison to today's figures.

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015

Thanks, Nicole. Yeah, I found out how to do the inserts. I went a little crazy.

Comment from beizanten

Average

intereting and engaging story, interesting characters and their friendship is sweet. Good description of youth today. Interesting how they from air force to writing and other things in search for the right job

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 Comment Written 03-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015

Thanks for reading this, my friend, and for all your kind words. Tell me, what didn't you like about the story?

reply by beizanten on 04-Sep-2015

I am not good at finding faults since I am not that good writer myself for that you need to seek a reviewer with more esperience

Comment from Benjamin Valencia

Excellent

Hi Jay,

Thanks for bringing back to memory lane over my own military experiences with your story. I'm not too sure on the brain image you attached, but I was more focused on the story-telling which I found to be very good. I couldn't find any SPAG and I was looking for the hiccups. The only ones that I feel were the following:

(When I graduated high school, for example, and decided to join the Air Force, he thought it was a grand idea. )...My question is..."for example" why wouldn't you have put it in the beginning of the sentence?

he could have said to me, or Marty, I could have said to him, how much money you got? ((It was a confusing line to me))

So, let me get this correct...It seemed as Marty made more money or made more value of his time in service than the other musketeers considering that he had Betty? This would make a lot of sense: Home is where the heart is versus traveling everywhere. Cheers.

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 Comment Written 03-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015

With Marty, he was stationed in San Antonio while the other two of us were shipped to other places. He had four years to form a relationship with Betty. "For Example" could have been in the middle, even at the end. There's no rule for placement. It sounded best to me where I put it. THANKS, BENJAMIN! I appreciate your reading this.