A Book of Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "I Am Your Canvas"Assorted poems of love
76 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
--> 'as your pallet' should be 'palette'
--> since you've already 'painted the skin', I wonder if re-painting the cheeks works quite as well...?
I thought this was a clever poem but it seems to change directions at times -- I mean the way the sentences were aimed, if that makes ANY sense at aLLL??
Thanks for sharing! I would the lucky man would approve regardless! *smile*
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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--> 'as your pallet' should be 'palette'
--> since you've already 'painted the skin', I wonder if re-painting the cheeks works quite as well...?
I thought this was a clever poem but it seems to change directions at times -- I mean the way the sentences were aimed, if that makes ANY sense at aLLL??
Thanks for sharing! I would the lucky man would approve regardless! *smile*
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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I will change the word, thank you. The extra paint for the cheeks is to reflect the heat of passion :) Thank you so much for the review.
I will ask that you consider revisiting this and changing the rating when the wording is corrected Robyn..
Always,
Missy
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I have upgraded!
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Thank you :)
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Yes I did find it pleasing. Great artwork you chose to us for this and a great picture you paint also with your words. Love the way you've used the colours of the painting to give us this sensual poem. Very nice.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Yes I did find it pleasing. Great artwork you chose to us for this and a great picture you paint also with your words. Love the way you've used the colours of the painting to give us this sensual poem. Very nice.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Your words in this review make me feel that I am doing something right :) Thank you, Pearl.
Always,
Missy
The 6 is icing on the cake my friend!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-The artwork matches the colorful imagery in your poem.
-I like your poem because it uses so many colors to show your feelings of love.
-I like the opening line because after that the canvas begins to take shape, like a painting.
-A few lines I particularly like are:
* "paint my large brown eyes with the earthiness"
* "sprinkle flecks of gold in my eyes"
-A good ending.
- Just a suggestion, the small size of the font isn't easy to see. I didn't know if you tried a larger size. I like the poem otherwise.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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-The artwork matches the colorful imagery in your poem.
-I like your poem because it uses so many colors to show your feelings of love.
-I like the opening line because after that the canvas begins to take shape, like a painting.
-A few lines I particularly like are:
* "paint my large brown eyes with the earthiness"
* "sprinkle flecks of gold in my eyes"
-A good ending.
- Just a suggestion, the small size of the font isn't easy to see. I didn't know if you tried a larger size. I like the poem otherwise.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Respa1, I tried so many ways to get this shape with a larger size...grrrr. I am so very sorry for the inconvenience hon. I will do better next time, pinky promise :)
Thank you for the splendid review, I honestly appreciate each one.
Always,
Missy
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You are welcome for the review. There wasn't any inconvenience. After thinking about it, I don't think you could have increased the font size, as in the longer lines, it would have wrapped around. I loved the poem.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello :)
Yes, it is pleasing and interesting. I like the black background and the pink font but the font size is too small and very hard to read, I suggest you make it bigger. Good job overall.
~gypsy
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Hello :)
Yes, it is pleasing and interesting. I like the black background and the pink font but the font size is too small and very hard to read, I suggest you make it bigger. Good job overall.
~gypsy
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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I worked for hours trying to get it bigger. Before I threw something I settled on this. Thanks for taking the time to read and review GBR. You know I always appreciate your input my friend.
Missy
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Yes, formatting can be a pain sometimes. No worries, it is find the way it is.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Interesting, and well written poem. Amazing, some times where inspiration for writing comes from, occasionally something as simple as a nice piece of art.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Interesting, and well written poem. Amazing, some times where inspiration for writing comes from, occasionally something as simple as a nice piece of art.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Correct you are Brett :)
Thank you for this encouraging review!
Always,
Missy
Comment from victor 66
Romance is always the sign of an open heart and very hard to resist. If you are a grandmother and still feel this joy, you are to be admired and envied. I did enjoy your poem and it made the day lighter. I wish you well. After thought: One suggestion, if you could make the print of your poems a little larger so us grandfathers could read it with a little more ease, it would be appreciated.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Romance is always the sign of an open heart and very hard to resist. If you are a grandmother and still feel this joy, you are to be admired and envied. I did enjoy your poem and it made the day lighter. I wish you well. After thought: One suggestion, if you could make the print of your poems a little larger so us grandfathers could read it with a little more ease, it would be appreciated.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Next time I promise to make font larger, Victor. My heart and longing is written on this particular canvas :).
Thank you very much for this lovely review.
Always,
Missy
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Thank you, Missy.
Comment from Neonewman
The artwork you have chosen to compliment this piece is as magical as the words you have so well crafted my friend. I enjoyed the mesmerizing effect this piece delivered.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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The artwork you have chosen to compliment this piece is as magical as the words you have so well crafted my friend. I enjoyed the mesmerizing effect this piece delivered.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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That was my reaction to this artwork as well, Steve. But, your review... now that is the magic :)
Thank you.
Always,
Missy
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Awesome!
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Awesome!
Comment from doggymad
Wonderful poetry which carries the inspiring message throughout. It lends the sense of welcome of a blank canvas which allows free rein for creativity.
Perhaps a bit like a blank page for a writer
Freda
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Wonderful poetry which carries the inspiring message throughout. It lends the sense of welcome of a blank canvas which allows free rein for creativity.
Perhaps a bit like a blank page for a writer
Freda
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Hi Freda, thanks for the sweet review. I am delighted!
Always,
Missy
Comment from Jacob Collins
I thought that you used beautiful imagery in this piece, justafan. I thought that your writing was well written and flowed well, I couldn't find anything to critique. Thanks for sharing...Jacob
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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I thought that you used beautiful imagery in this piece, justafan. I thought that your writing was well written and flowed well, I couldn't find anything to critique. Thanks for sharing...Jacob
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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I am very pleased that you enjoyed this work of mine, Jacob. You are a new face for me. I hope I see you again :)
Always,
Missy
Comment from ravenblack
I really like your poem of your lover making you his canvas. The metaphor has been used many times but you make it fresh, your own. I really like the line dealing with heavy black lines on the borders, a plea for permanence, to keep the colors contained. Great poem!
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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I really like your poem of your lover making you his canvas. The metaphor has been used many times but you make it fresh, your own. I really like the line dealing with heavy black lines on the borders, a plea for permanence, to keep the colors contained. Great poem!
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Thank you, Ravenblack for this awesome compliment on my work. I am extremely pleased that you enjoyed it!
Always,
Missy