Seeing Behind the Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "The Whoop-Whooop Guy"A book of poems on people.
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Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Sounds like I would have been annoyed after the first couple of minutes. No one asked him to stop? I think I would have. Your words certain;y do paint a pretty bad picture. Take care, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015
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Sounds like I would have been annoyed after the first couple of minutes. No one asked him to stop? I think I would have. Your words certain;y do paint a pretty bad picture. Take care, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 09-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015
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Thank you Debbie:)
Comment from Michelle Joy
I love the fact you don't present an imagine so that the reader can form one in his or her own head. This was a very creative poem and I love your style, especially the repetition and your excellent use of parentheses. It was an easy, clear read that flowed very nicely.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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I love the fact you don't present an imagine so that the reader can form one in his or her own head. This was a very creative poem and I love your style, especially the repetition and your excellent use of parentheses. It was an easy, clear read that flowed very nicely.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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thank you Michelle:)
Comment from inside echo
Lol, goodness, he sounds like quite the annoying sight and sound. My mind sure cant picture this guy.. just out of curiosity, did he have a nearly bald head or longish hair. Well written. What a character he is. Well done.
tgc
echo
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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Lol, goodness, he sounds like quite the annoying sight and sound. My mind sure cant picture this guy.. just out of curiosity, did he have a nearly bald head or longish hair. Well written. What a character he is. Well done.
tgc
echo
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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I didn't pay much attention to his hair I guess. I think just below the ears. Other than seeing his tats and clothes, he didn't get my attention except to annoy me lol. thanks echo:) h
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You are welcome.
Comment from Dean Kuch
I've gone to all different types of bars. As a member of a dart team, the only place one can compete is in a tavern, a club, or a sports bar. I drink coffee. I'm always and forever the designated driver on any such outing.
That being said, I could easily picture the sort of obnoxious, moronic, brain-dead beefcake you made mention of here, Teresa, and have seen my fair share of them. They turn my stomach every time with their, "Hey! Look at me, aren't I something? Aren't I fabulous, wouldn't you like to be me!?" demeanor. It isn't just the guys, however. There are many women who act just as idiotic.
Me? I play darts. It's the only reason I go. Well that, and to be with friends. I went to HOOTERS recently for a poetry slam. That was...interesting.
Great work.
No artwork or photos required...
~Dean
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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I've gone to all different types of bars. As a member of a dart team, the only place one can compete is in a tavern, a club, or a sports bar. I drink coffee. I'm always and forever the designated driver on any such outing.
That being said, I could easily picture the sort of obnoxious, moronic, brain-dead beefcake you made mention of here, Teresa, and have seen my fair share of them. They turn my stomach every time with their, "Hey! Look at me, aren't I something? Aren't I fabulous, wouldn't you like to be me!?" demeanor. It isn't just the guys, however. There are many women who act just as idiotic.
Me? I play darts. It's the only reason I go. Well that, and to be with friends. I went to HOOTERS recently for a poetry slam. That was...interesting.
Great work.
No artwork or photos required...
~Dean
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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You got it exactly right. We don't drink either, just go once in awhile to dance. not often, we have to travel 100 miles. thanks for the great review Dean:)
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Always a pleasure, Teresa. :)
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Tab,
you have such a unique take on things you observe... yes, you have fresh different that is very visual... and I applaud you for that.
Enjoyed the journey with your words... thought I was going to find Mick Jagger at the end of them... smile))))))))).
With our thoughts we create,
the whoop in our whooop,
James vx's.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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Hi Tab,
you have such a unique take on things you observe... yes, you have fresh different that is very visual... and I applaud you for that.
Enjoyed the journey with your words... thought I was going to find Mick Jagger at the end of them... smile))))))))).
With our thoughts we create,
the whoop in our whooop,
James vx's.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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lol. thanks James:)
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Teresa...
_ My goodness--your description is really great.
_ I can picture him in all his 'Whoop Whoop-Woo Woo' glory!
_ Pity the person he took home (if he did), what a night of strutting they must have had!
_ Good job.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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Hi, Teresa...
_ My goodness--your description is really great.
_ I can picture him in all his 'Whoop Whoop-Woo Woo' glory!
_ Pity the person he took home (if he did), what a night of strutting they must have had!
_ Good job.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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lol. thanks Jax:)
Comment from rjuselius
haha. lol. this is an entertaining, lighthearted and fun entry dear teresa! looking for a one night stand can actually be more work than looking for a relationship.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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haha. lol. this is an entertaining, lighthearted and fun entry dear teresa! looking for a one night stand can actually be more work than looking for a relationship.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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lol. thanks rebekka:)
Comment from Linda Kay
I like line adds a layer to the mental image of this guy as you read the poem. Everyone might imagine him
A little differently, but your words create a definite unforgettable character.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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I like line adds a layer to the mental image of this guy as you read the poem. Everyone might imagine him
A little differently, but your words create a definite unforgettable character.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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thanks. appreciate the review:)
Comment from petalangela
Before I read the authors notes I became irritated by this idiot,
Your words must him down to a fine art. Either that or your grrrrr. Factor reached me
Very good write thank you for irritating me too. What a friend for if not share you feelings
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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Before I read the authors notes I became irritated by this idiot,
Your words must him down to a fine art. Either that or your grrrrr. Factor reached me
Very good write thank you for irritating me too. What a friend for if not share you feelings
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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lol. thanks petal:)
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Teresa
I've come across a few of those myself. Up-staging everyone's social event. You certainly painted quite an image with your descriptive language ... I love the "whoop whooop, woo-woo-wooo-wooo ... hahah! I would never have thought how to put that in words. :)) A fun read, yet I can feel your frustration.
A great visual in the first verse, and all audial in the second. Such a great sum up in the third verse:
"He was seen (scene?)
and loudly heard,
his voice still echoes in my head."
Even your concluding verse provides the ultimate image ... "strut, strut, strutting."
Excellent form, interesting, humorous and entertaining. Well done. Lovi xoxo
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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Hi Teresa
I've come across a few of those myself. Up-staging everyone's social event. You certainly painted quite an image with your descriptive language ... I love the "whoop whooop, woo-woo-wooo-wooo ... hahah! I would never have thought how to put that in words. :)) A fun read, yet I can feel your frustration.
A great visual in the first verse, and all audial in the second. Such a great sum up in the third verse:
"He was seen (scene?)
and loudly heard,
his voice still echoes in my head."
Even your concluding verse provides the ultimate image ... "strut, strut, strutting."
Excellent form, interesting, humorous and entertaining. Well done. Lovi xoxo
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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thank you for the awesome review Lovi:)