Life, Love, and Other Disasters
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "River gods"A collection of poems on these themes
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Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Steve,
Here in the Houston area we had terrible flooding, so I could relate to this poem.
Your descriptions are impeccable and really draw the reader in. I liked every stanza, but I think the 5th one is my favorite. Marvelous personification.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Hi Steve,
Here in the Houston area we had terrible flooding, so I could relate to this poem.
Your descriptions are impeccable and really draw the reader in. I liked every stanza, but I think the 5th one is my favorite. Marvelous personification.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Lou, thanks for the kind words.
Hard to know if the world's weather is truly going to the dogs or if we only notice it more. Yhis poem reflects on an incident from my childhood, so we know the weather could be bad back then, too.
Steve
Comment from Dean Kuch
Excellent free verse entry, Steve. Eloquently worded, it is a poem that screams "ACTION!" It reminded me of a time in my states storied history when in January of 1937 one of the largest floods in American history inundated the Ohio River Valley. Scores of cities and towns along the Ohio and its tributaries were affected. Farmlands were devastated, crops and livestock were decimated.
Louisville and Southern Indiana were among those most devastated. Torrential rain together with some sleet and freezing rain fell from January 9 to January 23--an entire two weeks!--raising the Ohio River to its highest recorded level. On January 23 the river at Louisville crested at 51.1 feet, and eventually reached 57.15 feet above flood stage on the upper gauge.
I wish you the very best of luck with this. I feel this will be a hard one to beat!
~Dean
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Excellent free verse entry, Steve. Eloquently worded, it is a poem that screams "ACTION!" It reminded me of a time in my states storied history when in January of 1937 one of the largest floods in American history inundated the Ohio River Valley. Scores of cities and towns along the Ohio and its tributaries were affected. Farmlands were devastated, crops and livestock were decimated.
Louisville and Southern Indiana were among those most devastated. Torrential rain together with some sleet and freezing rain fell from January 9 to January 23--an entire two weeks!--raising the Ohio River to its highest recorded level. On January 23 the river at Louisville crested at 51.1 feet, and eventually reached 57.15 feet above flood stage on the upper gauge.
I wish you the very best of luck with this. I feel this will be a hard one to beat!
~Dean
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Thanks, Dean.
As you know I don't often venture into free verse so I was feeling my way with this. I am pleased with the outcome. A winner? let's see what the judges come up with.
Steve
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You are more than welcome, Steve. You're right about those judges. You just never know what's going to sway them in your direction. If we did, we'd all be winners.
~Dean :}
Comment from dmt1967
This is a good poem. I like the fact it was smooth and not jerky when read aloud as so many free verse poems tend to be. This one told a story as well. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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This is a good poem. I like the fact it was smooth and not jerky when read aloud as so many free verse poems tend to be. This one told a story as well. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from krys123
Steve;
-is very well written, emblematic and annotated piece of poetry that was also extremely vivid in a demonstrative way and extremely and exponentially expressive in ways that describe the horrific power of water.
- The aspects of your imagery of this water's rage Is written very well and the reading is very fluid, clear and easy.
-And magnificent imagination which is truly inventive and ingeniously creative where the manifestations of your sought process, throughout the writing, Is a reader intently glued to each word that is written.
-Good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always, Steve.
Alex
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Steve;
-is very well written, emblematic and annotated piece of poetry that was also extremely vivid in a demonstrative way and extremely and exponentially expressive in ways that describe the horrific power of water.
- The aspects of your imagery of this water's rage Is written very well and the reading is very fluid, clear and easy.
-And magnificent imagination which is truly inventive and ingeniously creative where the manifestations of your sought process, throughout the writing, Is a reader intently glued to each word that is written.
-Good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always, Steve.
Alex
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Alex, thanks for reading and reviewing my poem so thoroughly.
Steve
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You are so sincerely welcome, Steve
Comment from christianpowers
This was awesome.
I read a lot of supposed free verse poetry on this site, but this one shows you have a genuine knack for it. Few people do, I think. When I've tried it I often fail, although sometimes I do get lucky and come up with a line or three that I find worthy.
This was very well done, and in my opinion, certainly qualifies as free verse poetry. Great job, and good luck in the contest.
Christian
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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This was awesome.
I read a lot of supposed free verse poetry on this site, but this one shows you have a genuine knack for it. Few people do, I think. When I've tried it I often fail, although sometimes I do get lucky and come up with a line or three that I find worthy.
This was very well done, and in my opinion, certainly qualifies as free verse poetry. Great job, and good luck in the contest.
Christian
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Christian, thanks for the great review.
I have always shied away from free verse, thinking like you, that I couldn't do it well. Hoever, I do enjoy stretching my wings and I took a punt on this one for the contest - it is pleasing to get some affirmation that others like the result.
Steve
Comment from scd41
The scenes of flooding in rivers have been vividly and interestingly narrated in the free verse. It was just an encounter lasting three days for you but I have seen much worse floods year after year marooning thousands of people and making them homeless. The river gods remain untouched by ravages of floods.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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The scenes of flooding in rivers have been vividly and interestingly narrated in the free verse. It was just an encounter lasting three days for you but I have seen much worse floods year after year marooning thousands of people and making them homeless. The river gods remain untouched by ravages of floods.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from dragonpoet
This is full of sound, images and emotions of a long flooding rain. It tells of the pain and destruction the river gods cause and don't seem to care about.
I like the metaphor of a storm sounding like a battle between the violent river gods and the ones protecting the earth.
The artowrk seems to show the aftermath.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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This is full of sound, images and emotions of a long flooding rain. It tells of the pain and destruction the river gods cause and don't seem to care about.
I like the metaphor of a storm sounding like a battle between the violent river gods and the ones protecting the earth.
The artowrk seems to show the aftermath.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Joan, thanks for the kind words.
Steve
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Anytime, Steve.
Joan
Comment from royowen
A beautifully written free verse entry in this competition, the language is emotively delivered and poignantly succinct in its projection into stark but beautiful imagery that wends its sad and weary way through the flowingly descriptive narrative, well done, great entry in this comp. Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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A beautifully written free verse entry in this competition, the language is emotively delivered and poignantly succinct in its projection into stark but beautiful imagery that wends its sad and weary way through the flowingly descriptive narrative, well done, great entry in this comp. Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Roy, thanks for the kind words.
Steve
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Most welcome
Comment from robina1978
An excellent photo of this wild river that streams wild., And complements your poem perfectly. It is a well written free verse, where you describe a river going wild and outside its banks. You truly pictured this. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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An excellent photo of this wild river that streams wild., And complements your poem perfectly. It is a well written free verse, where you describe a river going wild and outside its banks. You truly pictured this. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Thank you very much.
Steve
Comment from Delahay
This very eloquently tells a tale of the many faces of a river as it swells or runs peacefully in accordance with the whims of nature. And the livestock can get a cool drink or suffer tragedy depending on the river's mood.
I believe you have a typo. You have "My 'downstram' neigbour spreads forth". I believe you mean 'downstream'.
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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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This very eloquently tells a tale of the many faces of a river as it swells or runs peacefully in accordance with the whims of nature. And the livestock can get a cool drink or suffer tragedy depending on the river's mood.
I believe you have a typo. You have "My 'downstram' neigbour spreads forth". I believe you mean 'downstream'.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Thanks for your review and the sharp eye for typo - now fixed.
Steve