2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Desolating Grief "A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
67 total reviews
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The poem flows and connects well. The author's notes were great and gave full meaning to this poem.
The author's words are creative, interesting and thought provoking. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Excellent Poem! The poem flows and connects well. The author's notes were great and gave full meaning to this poem.
The author's words are creative, interesting and thought provoking. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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thank you harmony, I appreciate your review
Comment from I am Cat
Wow, that's so sad.
It hurts my heart to see
a photo such as that
your use of red
as a font color
was a stroke of genius
to depict
the fires.
well done, and good luck with the prompt
Cat
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Wow, that's so sad.
It hurts my heart to see
a photo such as that
your use of red
as a font color
was a stroke of genius
to depict
the fires.
well done, and good luck with the prompt
Cat
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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thank you I am cat, I appreciate your review
Comment from Tsul
Short and directly to the point as this form of poetry is meant to be, you offer a poignant view on this particular tragedy. I hope you or your family was not directly affected by this horrendous fire. Beautifully written and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Short and directly to the point as this form of poetry is meant to be, you offer a poignant view on this particular tragedy. I hope you or your family was not directly affected by this horrendous fire. Beautifully written and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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thank you for the review tsul, i appreciate your comments
Comment from Janelle
Difficult genre to write a poem in, but I think you've done a good job on this one. Your writer's notes were excellent. I hadn't heard of these fires, but I know how catastrophic they can be. Here in Australia we have had two apocalyptic fires, where thousands of homes were destroyed and hundreds of people died. The most recent was six years ago, named Black Saturday bush fire. It was horrific.
I have one suggestion, offered with respect and in the spirit of constructive criticism;
'branches pleading to heaven' seems to make more sense. Just my opinion. Good luck in the comp. Regards, Jan
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Difficult genre to write a poem in, but I think you've done a good job on this one. Your writer's notes were excellent. I hadn't heard of these fires, but I know how catastrophic they can be. Here in Australia we have had two apocalyptic fires, where thousands of homes were destroyed and hundreds of people died. The most recent was six years ago, named Black Saturday bush fire. It was horrific.
I have one suggestion, offered with respect and in the spirit of constructive criticism;
'branches pleading to heaven' seems to make more sense. Just my opinion. Good luck in the comp. Regards, Jan
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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thank you, i will take a look, i appreciate your review
Comment from petalangela
Grief burns eith eternal fire your arms reach out to ........ Nothing
You are left alone in your own private hell
What sadness I feel I enacting from these heartfelt words
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Grief burns eith eternal fire your arms reach out to ........ Nothing
You are left alone in your own private hell
What sadness I feel I enacting from these heartfelt words
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Oh, no, don't be sad, it is only a poem. I tank you for your review.
Comment from amahra
What a great title for this contest. Really liked the art work: very simple; liked the very short poem, thought it was a great entry for the Tree-Hugger contest. Good job.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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What a great title for this contest. Really liked the art work: very simple; liked the very short poem, thought it was a great entry for the Tree-Hugger contest. Good job.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
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Thank you amahra, I appreciate the review
Comment from artisart4u
Your haiku about "Desolating Grief" is very nice, it is a desolating grief.
I saw tree hugger and I put that down, I am sorry. Nevertheless, fire hugs.
I just read a poem about trees being cut down and this added to it is horrible, we get oxygen from trees as well as finding way to use them to survive.
You have the right amount of syllables.
Good luck with your haiku.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Your haiku about "Desolating Grief" is very nice, it is a desolating grief.
I saw tree hugger and I put that down, I am sorry. Nevertheless, fire hugs.
I just read a poem about trees being cut down and this added to it is horrible, we get oxygen from trees as well as finding way to use them to survive.
You have the right amount of syllables.
Good luck with your haiku.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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thank you for the 6 stars! Excellent review, I appreciate your feedback
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
Wildfires are scary and I'm glad that the worse thing I have to worry about is a drought in the summer, or a flood in the spring or maybe a blizzard in the winter. I'll take all those things over wildfires. Great job with this friend
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Wildfires are scary and I'm glad that the worse thing I have to worry about is a drought in the summer, or a flood in the spring or maybe a blizzard in the winter. I'll take all those things over wildfires. Great job with this friend
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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thank you experiencing liphe, I appreciate your review
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely with a correct line and syllable count. This is pretty potent in delivery and the notes are very informative, but I wonder if "pleading" was the best word choice. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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This meets the contest requirements nicely with a correct line and syllable count. This is pretty potent in delivery and the notes are very informative, but I wonder if "pleading" was the best word choice. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Thank you Mystic Angel, I appreciate your review
Comment from Janet Foor
What a devastating fire to last 10 days and cause so much destruction and loss of life. Your 5/7/5 poem is well written telling the story succinctly. Well done.
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What a devastating fire to last 10 days and cause so much destruction and loss of life. Your 5/7/5 poem is well written telling the story succinctly. Well done.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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thank you for your review, i appreciate it