Get Well, Brooke!
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Comment from Jacob Collins
I thought that there was an excellent use of imagery in your writing, visionary. Your writing flowed well and was cleverly constructed. I particularly liked the last night: I'll fiercely love the sunlight...and I'll dance...An excellent piece, good luck in the contest...Jacob
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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I thought that there was an excellent use of imagery in your writing, visionary. Your writing flowed well and was cleverly constructed. I particularly liked the last night: I'll fiercely love the sunlight...and I'll dance...An excellent piece, good luck in the contest...Jacob
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Thank you Jacob! :)Sharyn
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully as the rhyme scheme, meter, and syllable count are well done. Your turn in the third stanza is excellent and turns the reader's thoughts to the capricious nature of fate. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you for sharing it.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully as the rhyme scheme, meter, and syllable count are well done. Your turn in the third stanza is excellent and turns the reader's thoughts to the capricious nature of fate. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Thank you very much Angel! :)Sharyn
Comment from rjuselius
This is a truly beautiful tribute to Brooke who has been a beacon in our lives. Your poem is exquisite and I applaud your delicate touch.
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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This is a truly beautiful tribute to Brooke who has been a beacon in our lives. Your poem is exquisite and I applaud your delicate touch.
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for your lovely reading/ appreciation, Rebekka, and for your gift of stars. Brooke has indeed been a beacon in all our lives.
:)Sharyn
Comment from LIJ Red
A sonnet with iambic pentameter and volta and all that, and a chilling thought in it's message. An excellent contest entry and contribution to the get well book.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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A sonnet with iambic pentameter and volta and all that, and a chilling thought in it's message. An excellent contest entry and contribution to the get well book.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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But also a timely reminder, LJ, yes? Thank you :)Sharyn
Comment from sibhus
What a beautifully written poem. Chance so easily turns our world to shade. But let us hope that Brooke has many more days to dance in the sunshine, and to rain sunshine upon as all with her verse. Here's to hoping a speedy recovery for Brooke.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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What a beautifully written poem. Chance so easily turns our world to shade. But let us hope that Brooke has many more days to dance in the sunshine, and to rain sunshine upon as all with her verse. Here's to hoping a speedy recovery for Brooke.
Comment Written 31-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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I so hope so sibhus! :)Sharyn
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Sharyn...
_ Super dedication to Brooke.
_ This is just a great ending to your sonnet...
and time of shadow's end are ruled by chance,
I'll fiercely love the sunlight ... and I'll dance ...
_ Well composed and presented.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Hi, Sharyn...
_ Super dedication to Brooke.
_ This is just a great ending to your sonnet...
and time of shadow's end are ruled by chance,
I'll fiercely love the sunlight ... and I'll dance ...
_ Well composed and presented.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 31-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Bless you Jax! :)Sharyn
Comment from Lulube
Great contest entry with this one. Brooke will definitely appreciate you writing this one. You're so inspirational, enthusiastic and soluble.I love the art you choose for this one and all the other great poems I've read of yours.
well penned
lulube
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Great contest entry with this one. Brooke will definitely appreciate you writing this one. You're so inspirational, enthusiastic and soluble.I love the art you choose for this one and all the other great poems I've read of yours.
well penned
lulube
Comment Written 31-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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THERE you are Lu - thank you so much for your six stars. Brooke is such a special inspiration on this site.
Big hugs,
Sharyn
Comment from inside echo
A beautifully written poem and dedication for your friend. So very well written, It is enjoyable to read. I hope she gets well soon. I love your choice of art. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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A beautifully written poem and dedication for your friend. So very well written, It is enjoyable to read. I hope she gets well soon. I love your choice of art. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 31-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Thx so much echo! :)Sharyn
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You are welcome.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A very colorful photo and presentation to go with your poem.
-The sonnet is written well and follows all the guidelines required.
-I like the following lines because they come from the heart:
"a future comfortably warm; divine
with poetry of dandelions, prayer"
-The final quatrain expresses so well "caprice of fate"
-A very nice tribute to Brooke.
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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-A very colorful photo and presentation to go with your poem.
-The sonnet is written well and follows all the guidelines required.
-I like the following lines because they come from the heart:
"a future comfortably warm; divine
with poetry of dandelions, prayer"
-The final quatrain expresses so well "caprice of fate"
-A very nice tribute to Brooke.
Comment Written 31-May-2015
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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Thank you so much respa :)Sharyn
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Antoine Charlemaine
The slow, insidious, inexorable march of time towards...the end. You grasp this truth saliently, Sharyn. I don't quite share your view that 'knowing date and time of shadow's end are ruled by chance', however, there is no questioning that our days are numbered and that we should make the most of every opportunity...'make hay while the sun shines'.
Very nicely and eloquently expressed.
Anthony
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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The slow, insidious, inexorable march of time towards...the end. You grasp this truth saliently, Sharyn. I don't quite share your view that 'knowing date and time of shadow's end are ruled by chance', however, there is no questioning that our days are numbered and that we should make the most of every opportunity...'make hay while the sun shines'.
Very nicely and eloquently expressed.
Anthony
Comment Written 31-May-2015
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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Aaah there you are my dear - thank you for your lovely sixer! So ... who or what rules YOUR number of days?? Or shouldn't I ask??? Thank you so much for your lovely six :)Sharyn
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Of course you should ask! It is simply my faith in God - that higher power who holds life and death in his hands. I am on this planet for as long as he wants me to be here - not a day less or more. "Our times are in his hands", the psalmist wrote. It is rather comforting, I reckon. :)
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I reckon it would be Antoine - I just have hard coming to terms with the 'bad things happen to good people' thing ...