Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Had to read a second time to get the full meaning and jest of the story.
Very well done, gruesome and gory, just like I like it.
Fun to read and a twist as usual.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015

Thanks so much, Barb. I'm very glad that you enjoyed it. I truly am grateful for your encouraging comments. :)

~Dean

Comment from TheSprite

Exceptional

This has GOT to be the most horrid, disgusting piece I have read on FanStory! I could barely get through it because I was cringing on so many levels.

Loved it!

LOL! I love it when writers can tell so much with so few words and so little time. This one is, in my opinion, a keeper! That's my vote for your anthology of horror. ;)

Great title choosing there! Talk about being "someone who's torn it apart!" Love that song too but now I'm gonna be thinking a bit off the wall going forward. Eewww!

Great job!

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015

Ha-ha, thanks so much, Sprite. I generally try and shy away fro gorier stuff. However, I really wanted my readers to hate this Puppeteer character, and have no sympathy when he was gunned down by the dead woman's cop husband.

Thanks for the outstanding feedback and the six stars. All are immensely appreciated! :)

~Dean

Comment from kriver

Excellent

Hi Dean,
You certainly come up with the most macabre stories and pictures too.
It is enough to give a growing man nightmares for weeks.
Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015

Hey, thanks a million for the feedback, Kris. I usually shy away from gore entirely. However, I wanted readers to absolutely loathe this Puppeteer character, and feel no sympathy for him. Do you think I pulled it off (no pun intended, heh-heh)? I guess time will soon tell...

Much obliged. :)

~Dean

reply by kriver on 14-Mar-2015

HI Dean,
Yes, I think you pulled that part off pretty well.
Whose Kris? I'm River LOL I think you have me mixed up with someone else. Hey were you in the Corps? if so when?

reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015

I was in the Corps from Oct. of 1980 to November of 1984. I was a sniper, attached to the Third Marines with a reconnaissance division.

Sorry about the name thing. I probably did get your review mixed up with someone else's, LOL. I'm good for that. :)

Comment from Debra White

Excellent

Hi Dean :)
Thank you for entering the contest with your horrific (in a good way) flash fiction.
Excellently written, very graphic - I was reading it through my fingers!
Good luck in the voting booth... I'm sure this will do very well :)
Kindest regards as always, Debra

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015

Thanks so much, Debra. No matter what happens, I really enjoyed participating in your contest. Hey...we never know unless we try, right?

I appreciate your encouraging comments very much. :)

~Dean

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

Beautifully executed. (No pun intended) The first paragraph is a graphic hooker. (again, no pun meant) I tried to picture a fishing line running from her cuts to his hard-on. I can't imagine! From the ending, I gathered he was a policeman and the victim, his wife.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015

Your assessment would be spot on then, Spit. The cop came home from his beat, saw this Puppeteer dude butchering his old lady, then shot him down like the dog that he was. That's pretty much how you slice it...heh-heh-heh...

Fangs for the spooktacular review, LOL... ~Dean

Comment from acerisestory

Exceptional

Yikes, Dean! I just happened on your gruesome story. I'm afraid to say, "Well written," but it is!

I'm glad the woman pictured isn't mutilated as your words describe her. But, the other picture of the monstrous guy makes up for it, I'm afraid. A macabre tale, indeed. I'm so glad the guy didn't get away.

Well done, my friend! Good luck in the contest. Alana

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015

Thanks so much, Alana. Hopefully it goes over well, but although it has been fairly well received, you just never know how these contests are gonna go.

I'm very glad you enjoyed it, however. I certainly appreciate your encouraging comments and six star rating.

Have a fantastic weekend, Alana. ~Dean

Comment from Sasha

Exceptional

My goodness, this is chalked full of gory and scary imagery. As usual, you meet your awesome standard of superb writing with this one. This is an awesome entry for this contest and I sincerely, yes sincerely, with you all the best.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015

Thanks so much, Sasha. You know, I'm kind of surprised at how well this story has been received, but I'm happily surprised. I just hope it does well. If it does, I'm going to try and do a weekly series of horror shorties, and put them all into a book format of horror flash fiction. We'll see when the dust clears in just a few hours how well it's gonna' do...

Much obliged for the sixer too, my friend. :) ~Dean

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Dean,

Holy moly but you cut to the chase, kill, and gore almost out of the shoot! LOL

Super start to your series, I must say.

Good luck in the contest.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015

Thanks, Jax. I hope to try and do a weekly flash fiction horror story, then place them all into a book format. It all depends on how well it goes.

I appreciate your review, and interest in the series.

Much obliged. :) ~Dean

Comment from Tomes Johnston

Excellent

This is yet another fantastic poem by the author here. I am just back from the Dominican Republic, so I have to get back into the swing if things. Well done.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015

Hey, welcome back, Tomes. I've missed you, mate!

Thanks very much for the review. ~Dean :)

reply by Tomes Johnston on 14-Mar-2015

Thank you. I will have to get back on top again.

Comment from NomaFaith

Exceptional

I love it. You gave Cat Steven's song a whole new meaning. It reminds of a short I did called The Marionette. I don;t know if I have it on here or not. You can look if you like. My favorite lines are, " I yank away then make for the bedroom, knocking over a family photo in the process. I pause -- glancing down. A uniformed policeman is pictured accepting an award.She smiles in the photograph next to him."

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015

Well, I have to give credit to Trimple (Tracey) for coaxing me to change those particular lines, Noma. The edit was based on suggestions she made -- great ones too, I might add -- to enhance the terror of that scene. So, I share the six stars with her, and with gratitude to you.

I'm very happy that you enjoyed this. ~Dean :)