Reap What You Sow
A legend is born.54 total reviews
Comment from Carole Rosa
To the author of "Reap What You Sow". I expected an entirely different type prose. Even as I read the beginning and middle, I assumed it would be different. When I got to the end, I thought to myself, what did I just read? The presentation was appropriate. To me, it's worth five stars for your ability. Carole
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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To the author of "Reap What You Sow". I expected an entirely different type prose. Even as I read the beginning and middle, I assumed it would be different. When I got to the end, I thought to myself, what did I just read? The presentation was appropriate. To me, it's worth five stars for your ability. Carole
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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I'm thrilled that you enjoyed my prose. Thank you for the excellent review.
Comment from Selina Stambi
High drama, lots of tension - entirely in single-syllable words - well done!
I wonder if this could blossom into a longer tale?
Best wishes for the contest, mystery writer!
Sonali :)
shouts and grunts bounce (off the) walls near my place in the ... 'of' is not necessary here
I've (eaten) of their flesh for the first time. Now
"(')Ware the ire of Vamp!"
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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High drama, lots of tension - entirely in single-syllable words - well done!
I wonder if this could blossom into a longer tale?
Best wishes for the contest, mystery writer!
Sonali :)
shouts and grunts bounce (off the) walls near my place in the ... 'of' is not necessary here
I've (eaten) of their flesh for the first time. Now
"(')Ware the ire of Vamp!"
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review. I've made a few of the changes you suggested.
Comment from pfwelder
Truly captivating. Your writing style is outstanding. I sensed the emotions he was going through and the regret of his assailant. It is amazing how powerful your story is when it so short. Love the art work you choose also. The few lines under it leads right into the story. Kept my attention all the way.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Truly captivating. Your writing style is outstanding. I sensed the emotions he was going through and the regret of his assailant. It is amazing how powerful your story is when it so short. Love the art work you choose also. The few lines under it leads right into the story. Kept my attention all the way.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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I'm thrilled that you lived it. Thank you for the exceptional review.
Comment from sibhus
This is really good. Maybe even more so since the requirements call for single syllables, it gives a harsh excitement that feels really in the moment and creates an intensity that makes for an excellent read. A great entry for the contest and good luck.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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This is really good. Maybe even more so since the requirements call for single syllables, it gives a harsh excitement that feels really in the moment and creates an intensity that makes for an excellent read. A great entry for the contest and good luck.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review.
Comment from lancellot
Very interesting. Not bad at all, and you did it all with one syllable words. I tip my imaginary hat, this is well written and exciting, just as a short fiction should be.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Very interesting. Not bad at all, and you did it all with one syllable words. I tip my imaginary hat, this is well written and exciting, just as a short fiction should be.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review. It is much appreciated.
Comment from gurdeepgandhi
a very nice story by you an emotional vamp. i must say you tries to bind the two different creature with your thought, that line "You could have made me your friend. We could have lived in peace, but you need the beast. Your kind needs the hunt. I live off blood; you live off hate." clearly emphasis that what one party thinks to react or oppose to another party's action which they knew is going to be deadly. a very nice work. keep it up.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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a very nice story by you an emotional vamp. i must say you tries to bind the two different creature with your thought, that line "You could have made me your friend. We could have lived in peace, but you need the beast. Your kind needs the hunt. I live off blood; you live off hate." clearly emphasis that what one party thinks to react or oppose to another party's action which they knew is going to be deadly. a very nice work. keep it up.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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I'm glad you found the opposing ideas compelling. Thanks for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this single syllable story about the boy who was turned into a killer through the people that hunted him. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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this is an excellent write, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this single syllable story about the boy who was turned into a killer through the people that hunted him. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review.
Comment from James Dooney
And it is so true that we do indeed reap what it is that we sew huh. You have captured this very ideal well here my friend. Keep it up.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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And it is so true that we do indeed reap what it is that we sew huh. You have captured this very ideal well here my friend. Keep it up.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thanks James. I'm glad you liked it. Thank you for the excellent review.
Comment from TonyD
Much too short. You had me gripped from start to finish and was sorry when the last words "Ware the ire of Vamp!" were read. I actually felt the fear of the hunted and then the resolve to fight or die.
Well done!
TonyD
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Much too short. You had me gripped from start to finish and was sorry when the last words "Ware the ire of Vamp!" were read. I actually felt the fear of the hunted and then the resolve to fight or die.
Well done!
TonyD
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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That is a great compliment and much appreciated.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements well and tells a compelling story in the single beats allotted. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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This meets the contest requirements well and tells a compelling story in the single beats allotted. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review, it is much appreciated.