More than a shirt
A reason to fight - 300 words49 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
The hell with the rights of illegals. Americans have rights also, especially in America. This is very well written with a smooth flow fo words, making for a very good read.
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The hell with the rights of illegals. Americans have rights also, especially in America. This is very well written with a smooth flow fo words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
Comment from jmdg1954
I understand the gist of the story. But the principal just stood and watched. That part made no sense. Unless I missed something.
Best of luck in the contest. John
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I understand the gist of the story. But the principal just stood and watched. That part made no sense. Unless I missed something.
Best of luck in the contest. John
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
Comment from joann r romei
This was vey well done, Ilike the flash fiction scene giving the reader the intense emotion about honor, no errors noted in the work,xo
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This was vey well done, Ilike the flash fiction scene giving the reader the intense emotion about honor, no errors noted in the work,xo
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Beautiful! You described the pathetic principal well, too. Let's call things what they ARE. Illegal is what many are, and using a different word doesn't change that fact. Not enough of us stand up for our country with pride. We cower beneath unfair cries of "racism" from the PC police, who are WRONG. We are RIGHT. Our forefathers fought to give us this land. We have to fight to keep it. I hope we're up to it.
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Beautiful! You described the pathetic principal well, too. Let's call things what they ARE. Illegal is what many are, and using a different word doesn't change that fact. Not enough of us stand up for our country with pride. We cower beneath unfair cries of "racism" from the PC police, who are WRONG. We are RIGHT. Our forefathers fought to give us this land. We have to fight to keep it. I hope we're up to it.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
Comment from Dean Kuch
Political correctness here in the United States will be the cancer that destroys us. Great story, and unfortunately things like this go on every day.
Nice work, and best of luck to you in the contest!
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Political correctness here in the United States will be the cancer that destroys us. Great story, and unfortunately things like this go on every day.
Nice work, and best of luck to you in the contest!
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
Comment from gypsycaravan
The story was certainly relevant and made me angry over the event all over again, so you provoked emotion. The narrative was descriptive and you finished it off with a satisfying conclusion. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
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The story was certainly relevant and made me angry over the event all over again, so you provoked emotion. The narrative was descriptive and you finished it off with a satisfying conclusion. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
Comment from pafaust
The narrator's pride and mission are commendable. You've done a good job pointing out a frustration that a lot of people feel about the lack of tolerance in the world. The last paragraph brings a feeling of justification that he managed to get a little chunk of his bully's leg.
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The narrator's pride and mission are commendable. You've done a good job pointing out a frustration that a lot of people feel about the lack of tolerance in the world. The last paragraph brings a feeling of justification that he managed to get a little chunk of his bully's leg.
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Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
Comment from GWHARGIS
You are getting a very precious six, mainly because you touched on one of my pet peeves. Tolerance. I am so damned sick of being forced to be tolerant of everything I'm going crazy. I was right there I the dirt, fighting with hi, HOORAH. Great job at getting my emotions up with this one.
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You are getting a very precious six, mainly because you touched on one of my pet peeves. Tolerance. I am so damned sick of being forced to be tolerant of everything I'm going crazy. I was right there I the dirt, fighting with hi, HOORAH. Great job at getting my emotions up with this one.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
Comment from Kingsland
I know you were limited because of the prompt, but this story line begs for more. What is here is good, but I could see this as being a better story with more length for explanation of the competition between the two sides here, this is still a five star piece. But I could see this as a longer story line, as it has peaked my interest... John
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I know you were limited because of the prompt, but this story line begs for more. What is here is good, but I could see this as being a better story with more length for explanation of the competition between the two sides here, this is still a five star piece. But I could see this as a longer story line, as it has peaked my interest... John
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Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
