Haiku (cardinal's contrast)
The hope found knowing spring is coming44 total reviews
Comment from Starlit Ink
I like the bright color imagery that this haiku gives. It reminds the reader that there is color even in a cold winter. The message in the third line is a lovely appreciation of the meaning of nature. Your haiku is excellent, so best of luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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I like the bright color imagery that this haiku gives. It reminds the reader that there is color even in a cold winter. The message in the third line is a lovely appreciation of the meaning of nature. Your haiku is excellent, so best of luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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:) Thank you so very much for your kind words! Your feedback is so full of wonderful encouragement and I appreciate your time so very much!!
Smiles,
Teresa :)
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is beautifully presented and is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
Excellent alliteration in cardinal's contrast
traditionally haiku only uses caps for proper names, so I would not capitalize cardinal
You create a vivid scene with good appeal to more than one sense
put the final line in present tense - this is customary for haiku and really does add to the poem's sense of immediacy
Brooke
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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Your poem is beautifully presented and is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
Excellent alliteration in cardinal's contrast
traditionally haiku only uses caps for proper names, so I would not capitalize cardinal
You create a vivid scene with good appeal to more than one sense
put the final line in present tense - this is customary for haiku and really does add to the poem's sense of immediacy
Brooke
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Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Brooke, You are always so kind and I can never express how much I truly appreciate your thoughtful feedback. I continue to learn and grow so much from you.
Thank you again.
Smiles,
Teresa
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Teresa - a lovely work on one of my favourite birds. I have cardinals all year round, they nest close to my window and always come to my feeders no matter the snow. A well penned post - nicely done.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Dear Teresa - a lovely work on one of my favourite birds. I have cardinals all year round, they nest close to my window and always come to my feeders no matter the snow. A well penned post - nicely done.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
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Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Maureen, You words and feedback are always full of so much kindness. My schedule takes me away from FS sometimes too often, but I am enjoying being back again. Thank you again for your wonderful encouragement.
Smiles,
Teresa
Comment from Hadria
A super photograph, combined with a perfect haiku, making an indelible image in the mind. Nice use of just the right amount of alliteration. Best wishes, Hadria
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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A super photograph, combined with a perfect haiku, making an indelible image in the mind. Nice use of just the right amount of alliteration. Best wishes, Hadria
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you so very much, I've been away from FS for several months and just felt compelled to pop back over. Maybe it's the hope of Spring that has brought me back.
Thank you again for your very kind words and thoughtful encouragement.
Smiles,
Teresa
