Behold This Child
For my godson's christening65 total reviews
Comment from mrsmajor
A wonderful poem in tribute to the Christening of your Godson...perhaps a simple variety of your usual work, but one that was well written with word appropriate and enjoyable...Rhymed quatrain verses are always pleasant to the ear.
Thanks so much for sharing this with us, and Congratulations for taking on this Blessed responsibility.
Big Hugs,
Victoria
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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A wonderful poem in tribute to the Christening of your Godson...perhaps a simple variety of your usual work, but one that was well written with word appropriate and enjoyable...Rhymed quatrain verses are always pleasant to the ear.
Thanks so much for sharing this with us, and Congratulations for taking on this Blessed responsibility.
Big Hugs,
Victoria
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much, Victoria, for your great review and kind words.
You're very welcome, it was my pleasure!
Comment from boxergirl
I think this is a wonderful poem for the christening. I liked the change in stanza beginnings of "Behold this child and We hold this child" - both different purposes. One to show what he will face as he goes through life and the other to show our hope for his life to be filled with love along the way.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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I think this is a wonderful poem for the christening. I liked the change in stanza beginnings of "Behold this child and We hold this child" - both different purposes. One to show what he will face as he goes through life and the other to show our hope for his life to be filled with love along the way.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, boxergirl! I didn't want to repeat the same line, but I wanted it to match. I appreciate your great review!
David
Comment from Connie C
As someone who is about to become a grandmother for the first time, I was very touched by your poem. I wish I had written it myself for when he arrives! I love how you convey the message that we give them nurturing and guidance. Very nice!
Connie
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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As someone who is about to become a grandmother for the first time, I was very touched by your poem. I wish I had written it myself for when he arrives! I love how you convey the message that we give them nurturing and guidance. Very nice!
Connie
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, Connie, and congratulations on become a grandmother! I really appreciate it, and I know you can write one just as appropriate for your occasion.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very nicely done, even if not your usual style. It has universal appeal, for we all can relate to the truths in it. I never liked babies much. Give me a kid after he/she is potty trained, speaking in sentences, and coordinated. My own kid bored me silly till she was over 2 or so, but of course I loved her and did all the motherly things with her. Just not much fun at that age. :)
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Very nicely done, even if not your usual style. It has universal appeal, for we all can relate to the truths in it. I never liked babies much. Give me a kid after he/she is potty trained, speaking in sentences, and coordinated. My own kid bored me silly till she was over 2 or so, but of course I loved her and did all the motherly things with her. Just not much fun at that age. :)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, my friend. I don't have a lot of experience with them myself, but I think I know what you mean.
Comment from musesinspire
This has such a beautiful rhythm and cadence to it! I love the fact that you voice a great deal of what I always thought each time I held one of my newborns for the first time.
Wonderful. Truly wonderful!
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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This has such a beautiful rhythm and cadence to it! I love the fact that you voice a great deal of what I always thought each time I held one of my newborns for the first time.
Wonderful. Truly wonderful!
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Thank you, musesinspire. Your comments are so positive, I was wondering where it fell short with you such that you docked a star. I appreciate your review. David
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Dang it! That wasn't supposed to happen! The system timed out and I guess I mis-hit the stars when I had to redo the review. I'm sorry!
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No worries. I was just wondering since it was such an enthusiastic review.
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Again, I'm really sorry! *glares at FanStory servers* It really is wonderful. :-)
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Thank you. Please don't worry about it. Since this poem is for my best friend, his wife, and their baby, I just want to make sure it's worthy of the occasion. :-) David
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good internal rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with light/sight...cage/rage. Good alliteration with we/were...where/will. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good internal rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with light/sight...cage/rage. Good alliteration with we/were...where/will. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much, RR.
Comment from Orphan33
Beautiful. What a touching tribute, and a great poem. Well done my friend. Life is so precious. The image of this child reminds me of times not so long ago when my own children were so very small.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Beautiful. What a touching tribute, and a great poem. Well done my friend. Life is so precious. The image of this child reminds me of times not so long ago when my own children were so very small.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, Orphan, for that wonderful six-star rating and for your great review. I appreciate it very much! David
Comment from Jean Lutz
Although I will turn 74 in just a few days, I still sometimes do nanny care. This little fellow looks about the same age as one I currently care for. Each day I am blessed, I pray the Lord will bless the work of my heart and hands. Your words and the picture work in harmony to show the love.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Although I will turn 74 in just a few days, I still sometimes do nanny care. This little fellow looks about the same age as one I currently care for. Each day I am blessed, I pray the Lord will bless the work of my heart and hands. Your words and the picture work in harmony to show the love.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, Jean, for your wonderful review. I'll bet you're a great nanny, too! :) David
Comment from lakeport
Behold this child, indeed that's a beautiful smiling child,
a beautiful expresseed story poem.I enjoyed reading it,God bless you. Lakeport,
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Behold this child, indeed that's a beautiful smiling child,
a beautiful expresseed story poem.I enjoyed reading it,God bless you. Lakeport,
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much, lakeport!
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your welcome.lakeport.
Comment from ennahanid
...and what a beautiful child it is. What an honor for you to be asked to be godfather to this dear little fellow and your words I am sure will be gratefully and well received - Thank you this read today - Dinah
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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...and what a beautiful child it is. What an honor for you to be asked to be godfather to this dear little fellow and your words I am sure will be gratefully and well received - Thank you this read today - Dinah
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, Dinah, for your excellent review. My friend and his wife are delighted with it, and will be framing it for his room.