The Little Dog That Wouldn't Let Go
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "My Forebears Starting Poor & Reprise"Subtitle: God Never Lets Go!
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Comment from BethShelby
I'm glad you are writing you memories because I do love reading the non-fiction biographical stories. Thesse are something members of your family will cherish in years to come. Since you are from a different part of the world from me, I'm amazed to find things are much the same everywhere but still we all have our unique experiences.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2013
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I'm glad you are writing you memories because I do love reading the non-fiction biographical stories. Thesse are something members of your family will cherish in years to come. Since you are from a different part of the world from me, I'm amazed to find things are much the same everywhere but still we all have our unique experiences.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2013
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Beth thanks but I need to tell you and you will see later on if you hang around my family will not be interested in some of my story as they will be the subject down the road a tad I have told my sis in law I am doing this and maybe she will look in but that might be the limit hehe. Thanks for your review you will see in the other response I maybe reversing the order of the chapters seeing some wanted more background to my early days.
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Chapter 2 and Chapter 12 have both just had updates and edits if interested thanks
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have done another big edti and addition to Chapter 1 and created a new Chapter four moving the old one forward, if you wanna check them thanks.
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Beth here we are way back in my book I think you might have disappeared not long after this in August 2013, will see.
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I went to your portfolio and bookcased it to go back and read. I see I once new you were from a different part of the world but I've forgotten. Where are you from?
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Down Under Australia Sis. Thanks for the pickup. I am looking to see how far back you reviewed. Be good if you could get through it just sorry the rewards are all gone. I had several goes at full book promotions but it was wasted.
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One of my daughter got to visit there. I thought I wasn't going to her her back. She loved it and almost married a boy from there.
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Ah well we gain em and lose em. Hehe!
Comment from Norbanus
I love stories of the memories from very early childhood. Sometimes we don't get it just right but the recollections are delightful. The simple clear language makes for an easy and interesting read. The 'telling' style is completely appropriate for reflection on thoughts brought forth from a child's early memories.
The focus on early childhood leaves the impression that there is more of the story to come. Maybe the second segment will fill in the blanks.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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I love stories of the memories from very early childhood. Sometimes we don't get it just right but the recollections are delightful. The simple clear language makes for an easy and interesting read. The 'telling' style is completely appropriate for reflection on thoughts brought forth from a child's early memories.
The focus on early childhood leaves the impression that there is more of the story to come. Maybe the second segment will fill in the blanks.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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Hi thanks for the review. Officially the Second chapter was on my Medical problems but I decided to move Chapter 3 back up to 2 as it is about my School Days and perhaps some of these gaps you are wondering about will be filled in there. Stick with me if you will thanks. I think I mentioned to you about the loos of a lot of work I did last night when the puter crashed hope to get on to that today. Fortunately I do have the "guts " of the chapter but I had done quite a lot of improvements in the piece I lost last night! Thanks again for your review.
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Hi again I have now moved the Chapter to over to it's proper place as Chaoter 3 and my Medical dramas will come in as Chapter 2. real soon.
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Chapter 2 and Chapter 12 have both just had updates and edits if interested thanks
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have done another big edti and addition to Chapter 1 and created a new Chapter four moving the old one forward, if you wanna check them thanks.
Comment from EMB
First of all, everyone's ancestors were cavemen at some point, right? :) This was a wonderful piece about looking back, remembering important moments of years past. :)
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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First of all, everyone's ancestors were cavemen at some point, right? :) This was a wonderful piece about looking back, remembering important moments of years past. :)
Comment Written 22-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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Thanks Edward I started a New Chapter last night then my puter Crashed hope to get things going again today. Appreciate the review.
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H8in Edward I now have moved the Chapter 3 that crashed before over to it;'s correct place as Chapoter 3. From some advice I had and some questions about different things I felt I did need to put in the Medical stuff which I had thought might bore everyone. Stick around ok!
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Chapter 2 and Chapter 12 have both just had updates and edits if interested thanks
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have done another big edti and addition to Chapter 1 and created a new Chapter four moving the old one forward, if you wanna check them thanks.
Comment from emjaihammond
I enjoyed reading your story. I love the true stories people share with us more than just a little. This is well done. I'll be watching to see if there is more.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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I enjoyed reading your story. I love the true stories people share with us more than just a little. This is well done. I'll be watching to see if there is more.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thanks very much nice to have you on board. I mentioned to my Endocrinologist some time ago that my book would probably not get published until after I was dead. He said "get it finished and you will live longer hehe." I will have to be working hard on it to keep ahead of the readers.
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Hi again I just finished Chapter one...there was more added since you looked yesterday thanks.
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Thanks I'll be sure to look in.
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Chapter 2 and Chapter 12 have both just had updates and edits if interested thanks
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have done another big edti and addition to Chapter 1 and created a new Chapter four moving the old one forward, if you wanna check them thanks.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Ah memories of things past we treasure, out humble beginnings and the present state of affairs soothed by music. Loneliness or joy..I cannot discern it. The piece has its moments but the jump from the past to 2011 is quite abrupt.
The language used is simple and straightforward yet the word 'obviating' sticks out like a sore thumb. There are no physical details of anyone or anything anywhere...a shame indeed as this piece could have been a gem.
Regards:
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Ah memories of things past we treasure, out humble beginnings and the present state of affairs soothed by music. Loneliness or joy..I cannot discern it. The piece has its moments but the jump from the past to 2011 is quite abrupt.
The language used is simple and straightforward yet the word 'obviating' sticks out like a sore thumb. There are no physical details of anyone or anything anywhere...a shame indeed as this piece could have been a gem.
Regards:
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thanks Stephen I guess it was a "Tangent man thing" if you see in my profile my Sister in law warned me against going off on Tangents thanks for reminding me. I might go back later and embellish the beginning a bit more. Appreciate your advice. and review.
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Dear S: My editor caught me many times rambling. You learn to pare things down and employ smooth transitions. Keep writing.
I made up a sign: 'Edite, Editte, Edit'
Cheers: Steve
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Hi Thanks I appreciate your help. Thisa is very early days and we are editing as we go. I guess this is why I wanted to put it in here to get the kind of help you are all giving me. This is my very first 'book' ok.
Just an aside you are the only reviewer that took up on my slight "Tangent" hehe stick with me ok! Thanks.
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Hi again I just finished Chapter one...there was more added since you looked yesterday thanks. I have not changed anything yet we may do that later on.
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Hi again I have decided to simplify that "obviated word. I appreciated what you said about all the other simple wording and that clanger in there. Watch for the change and I have done more work, now ok!
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Chapter 2 and Chapter 12 have both just had updates and edits if interested thanks
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have done another big edti and addition to Chapter 1 and created a new Chapter four moving the old one forward, if you wanna check them thanks. Keep quoting your ediit eddit eedit saying mate.
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Dear Sankey: Glad to hear from you again. Yes editing is a pain we as writers must endure like a perpetual cold. As for myself. I'm writing 100 short poems on America. Do drop by sometime. Thanks.
With Respect: Steve C
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Get to yours eventually Mikey reminded me I needed to add a Political chapter in m book too hehe working on it now have to move chapters forward again Groan!
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This was an extremely interesting trip down memory lane. The author lets the reader into the inner sanctum of his thoughts and feelings with this post. I was number ten out of eleven, so I know all too well what it means to share. It was a big old house though, and we didn't have to move. I have done nothing but move ever since I left home. I am in the process of buying a house at the minute, so hopefully my travels are nearing an end.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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This was an extremely interesting trip down memory lane. The author lets the reader into the inner sanctum of his thoughts and feelings with this post. I was number ten out of eleven, so I know all too well what it means to share. It was a big old house though, and we didn't have to move. I have done nothing but move ever since I left home. I am in the process of buying a house at the minute, so hopefully my travels are nearing an end.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Hi friend one of the newer reviewers hehe poetry there.. got a bit of a shock about the "Tangent" I did with coming up to closer to the present. but He/or she is the only one that has commented on that so maybe it was not so bad?? Thanks for the excellent review.
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Hi again I just finished Chapter one...there was more added since you looked yesterday thanks.
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Chapter 2 and Chapter 12 have both just had updates and edits if interested thanks
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have done another big edti and addition to Chapter 1 and created a new Chapter four moving the old one forward, if you wanna check them thanks.
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OK. I will.
Comment from Zue65
This is of course the first piece of your work and you started with the introduction of your family, the setting of course, where your family lived then, describing the size of your house and where your siblings sleep. Looking forward for the next chapter of course. God bless.
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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This is of course the first piece of your work and you started with the introduction of your family, the setting of course, where your family lived then, describing the size of your house and where your siblings sleep. Looking forward for the next chapter of course. God bless.
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Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thanks appreciate the review I followed the suggestion from Fanstory people to do the first chapter. (This only part of it yet) Only one of the reviewers got a bit of a shock when I bumped up to closer to now in the bit about being reminded of the old days from a current piece of music I weas "grabbing" off a cassette. Thanks again.
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Hi again I just finished Chapter one...there was more added since you looked yesterday thanks.
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Hi there I apprecioate all the heklp I am getting from all over. Since I write to you before Chapter 2 has been moved to it's right fuol place as Chapter 3 and the real Chaoter 2 will be on my Medical history that my Isster particularly does not care for but probably better she doesn't read this book because she will come in for a serve down the road anyway. Keep coming back ok!
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Chapter 2 and Chapter 12 have both just had updates and edits if interested thanks
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have done another big edti and addition to Chapter 1 and created a new Chapter four moving the old one forward, if you wanna check them thanks.