Silver Threads
A (modified) Shakespearean sonnet of cursed enchantment94 total reviews
Comment from sunnilicious
This contest is still going on.... The artwork is scary. Well, you are quite creative. Good vivid imagery through descriptive words and rhymes. Nice flow of structured sentences too, but ouch... What an ending? Errhhh!
Excellent work.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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This contest is still going on.... The artwork is scary. Well, you are quite creative. Good vivid imagery through descriptive words and rhymes. Nice flow of structured sentences too, but ouch... What an ending? Errhhh!
Excellent work.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much sunni! That artwork has been driving me crazy for ages! GRRR! :)S
Comment from Dawn Munro
Of course I pronounced cursed as two syllables - it's Shakespearean, after all! :) (And wonderful - good grief, talk about being on the same wavelength! Almost scary! LOL) This is a dark, but very lovely sonnet, Sharyn. I simply love the metaphor and the thought of binding him "by cursed silver thread, to lie with me, in ocean's blackest bed." (shiver)
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Of course I pronounced cursed as two syllables - it's Shakespearean, after all! :) (And wonderful - good grief, talk about being on the same wavelength! Almost scary! LOL) This is a dark, but very lovely sonnet, Sharyn. I simply love the metaphor and the thought of binding him "by cursed silver thread, to lie with me, in ocean's blackest bed." (shiver)
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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AAAh, now you see why my comment!! Scary, hmmm????
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Yes, I see why, definitely. It is odd, and it's not the first time, but you are the only one, I think that it happens with, except between Lorri and myself. (My best friend of many years.) Just as I am about to call her...you know, of course. The phone rings and it's her OR other, even more pronounced things (which I won't go into just now. :)
Comment from justchillin
What a super job. A perfect sonnet, could have been written by Shakespeare himself !!! Seriously good. Excellent story within this poem. Hell hath no fury, comes to mind
Great description and alliteration.
last two lines said all. Well done and good luck x
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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What a super job. A perfect sonnet, could have been written by Shakespeare himself !!! Seriously good. Excellent story within this poem. Hell hath no fury, comes to mind
Great description and alliteration.
last two lines said all. Well done and good luck x
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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thx so much for your wonderful six on this one my dear! So much appreciated! :)Sharyn
Comment from MoonMuse
This is great. The story here is wonderfully expressed. I absolutely love the ending couplet. Great job on the form. Lots of luck for the contest!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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This is great. The story here is wonderfully expressed. I absolutely love the ending couplet. Great job on the form. Lots of luck for the contest!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Thx so much MM! (What a gorgeous name you have!)
:)Sharyn
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Aw! Thank you much for the compliment! :)
Comment from Vampires kiss
Hey this is a great poem!! It flows nicely and gets to the point quick...the cheating idiot had to be a man lol. Any way this is a awesome poem with a kick butt picture! Great job, keep up the awesome writing!!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Hey this is a great poem!! It flows nicely and gets to the point quick...the cheating idiot had to be a man lol. Any way this is a awesome poem with a kick butt picture! Great job, keep up the awesome writing!!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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thx so much Vk! :))S
Comment from Kiki12
Oooh, nicely done, I can feel her bitterness and anger seeping through the page. No doubt the scoundrel will end up in the ocean's bed as fish food. Love the rhythm of this verse- especially this one line that is just music:
I did swear that you and I
could fly to scorching glory of the sun.--> I love that line
this is beautifully written chickie, an excellent sonnet with an enchanting (perfect word, by the way) tale to tell.
xo
kiki
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Oooh, nicely done, I can feel her bitterness and anger seeping through the page. No doubt the scoundrel will end up in the ocean's bed as fish food. Love the rhythm of this verse- especially this one line that is just music:
I did swear that you and I
could fly to scorching glory of the sun.--> I love that line
this is beautifully written chickie, an excellent sonnet with an enchanting (perfect word, by the way) tale to tell.
xo
kiki
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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GRRRRRRRRRRRRRR! I have fun with this one kiki - thanks so much dear! :)S
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sharyn,
You have written a lovely sonnet. I reserved a spot for this contest but have no idea what to write about. Your rhyming is strong, the flow is easy, good alliteration throughout and the theme is superb. Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Hi Sharyn,
You have written a lovely sonnet. I reserved a spot for this contest but have no idea what to write about. Your rhyming is strong, the flow is easy, good alliteration throughout and the theme is superb. Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Thx Chey - this pic has been in the back of my mind for a while but I, too, didn't have a clue what to write about ... yesterday was the day, apparently!
Comment from Jade Lawson
Good luck about this contest. I really liked the expressions filled with emotions and mystery thoroughly your lines. Then I enjoyed the beauty of the sun, wind, sky and ocean that you put into this. great poem with and a fantastic layout.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Good luck about this contest. I really liked the expressions filled with emotions and mystery thoroughly your lines. Then I enjoyed the beauty of the sun, wind, sky and ocean that you put into this. great poem with and a fantastic layout.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Bless you Angel - so glad you enjoyed this one! :)S
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Sharyn, what a tale. So, I take it she died first and fell to the bottom of the sea and then, because of his sleeping with the captain's daughter, she somehow bound him with the silver thread and keeps him down below with her.
But maybe I'm not supposed to overthink this and just go with the flow and the style. Can't help it, however, I'm very literal. Nicely done, Lou
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Hi Sharyn, what a tale. So, I take it she died first and fell to the bottom of the sea and then, because of his sleeping with the captain's daughter, she somehow bound him with the silver thread and keeps him down below with her.
But maybe I'm not supposed to overthink this and just go with the flow and the style. Can't help it, however, I'm very literal. Nicely done, Lou
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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think silver thread and think magic/ lightning Lou - she called down upon him the curses of storms - her silver thread of bliss lashed the lightning down upon him and zzzzzzzzzzzap! Howzzat?
:)))
big hugs
Sharyn
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Yikes! This one gets weirder and weirder. Love your imagination.
Comment from hurkad
This is a beautiful sonnet..
The poem really goes well with the picture given..love your creativity. All the best for the contest..you are definitely going to be a strong contender!!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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This is a beautiful sonnet..
The poem really goes well with the picture given..love your creativity. All the best for the contest..you are definitely going to be a strong contender!!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much my dear! :)Sharyn
