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Court Humour...43 total reviews
Comment from Sam Mendonca
A very well written poem with the usage of some great descriptive and expressive wording from the author.
I like the way you stated your personality and the way that you feel in regards of your writing.
Good for you. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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A very well written poem with the usage of some great descriptive and expressive wording from the author.
I like the way you stated your personality and the way that you feel in regards of your writing.
Good for you. Well done.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Thanks very much Sam. I appreciate your appreciation of my forthright personality.
Some just DON'T get me. I can't change though. Take me, or leave. It's that simple.
Cheers P
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Don't change. I'm the same way. If they don't get it
that's their problem. :-)
Comment from Patti R.
Absolutely fun, yes it is! You have always proclaimed in fine courtly fashion that you cannot help but to rhyme...and that is evident. This one tumbles and cajoles and teases the reader, the meter, the flow, so good...until the last verse. I tripped over the second and fourth lines of the last verse. ass used twice, meter stumbles for me, I tried it several times. What happened there?
Patti
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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Absolutely fun, yes it is! You have always proclaimed in fine courtly fashion that you cannot help but to rhyme...and that is evident. This one tumbles and cajoles and teases the reader, the meter, the flow, so good...until the last verse. I tripped over the second and fourth lines of the last verse. ass used twice, meter stumbles for me, I tried it several times. What happened there?
Patti
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Comment Written 22-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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LOL
Thanks so much and yes that last verse gave me grief...all because I wanted a good rhyme with 'smart ass'...I reworked it three times and now looks like it might need a fourth.
It was supposed to sound similar not look like I repeated a word heaven forbid, I'm a rhymer! LOL
Thanks for the constructive critique, I'm off to rehash that stanza to good old plan E.
Cheers P
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
You've got an in house staff... I'd say you're a young lady that has no trouble expressing herself. Now, I'm not a poet so all the rules go over my head, I'm 86 years old so I just review from the heart and all I can say is go for it girl. God loves you and I do too.
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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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You've got an in house staff... I'd say you're a young lady that has no trouble expressing herself. Now, I'm not a poet so all the rules go over my head, I'm 86 years old so I just review from the heart and all I can say is go for it girl. God loves you and I do too.
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Comment Written 22-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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No staff, that was a joke. Haha
Thanks for your review.
Cheers P