All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Puzzling Pieces"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Sharyn, a beautiful work to read - you have just astounding me with this one - exceptional work from beginning to end..I loved your ability to stand and share your truths:)
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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Hi Sharyn, a beautiful work to read - you have just astounding me with this one - exceptional work from beginning to end..I loved your ability to stand and share your truths:)
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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oh I'm so delighted you liked this one! Thank you so much for that lovely SIX!!! YEAH!!!
:) Sharyn
Comment from Titanx9
Sharyn, this is truly a remarkable read. It seems that we don't understand how all the puzzle pieces fit until we've almost through life's metamorphoses, or near the winter of our years. Life's an amazing thing because every generation believes it is unique in the way it loves and lives, but like King Solomon near his end, will each wonder about the pieces of the puzzle? Or will they ponder whether it was all a matter of vanity. Perhaps, sex and procreation are really the mission for all mankind, and we are foolish to wish for something outside those parameters.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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Sharyn, this is truly a remarkable read. It seems that we don't understand how all the puzzle pieces fit until we've almost through life's metamorphoses, or near the winter of our years. Life's an amazing thing because every generation believes it is unique in the way it loves and lives, but like King Solomon near his end, will each wonder about the pieces of the puzzle? Or will they ponder whether it was all a matter of vanity. Perhaps, sex and procreation are really the mission for all mankind, and we are foolish to wish for something outside those parameters.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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Very well said, Dossie - life certainly makes you wonder, doesn't it? I'm so glad you liked this one! :)Sharyn
Comment from Dave Russell
Wow...what an exceptional piece. It takes no small measure of courage to put yourself onto paper without reservation. This reads with a completely natural flow and it really pretty incredible. Always thought that you were a very special lady. Nice to see that my judgment is still intact.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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Wow...what an exceptional piece. It takes no small measure of courage to put yourself onto paper without reservation. This reads with a completely natural flow and it really pretty incredible. Always thought that you were a very special lady. Nice to see that my judgment is still intact.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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ooooh thank you so much for the lovely sixer and for the even lovelier compliments Dave - now I'm going to have trouble fitting thru the door (no, not because of the chocolate - I now have a swelled head, courtesy of you).
:)Sharyn
Comment from Dawn Munro
Ah Sharyn, this is very poignant, deep and profound - and the ending makes me well up. I liked all of it, but the conclusion, oh it is BRILLIANT! A wonderful free verse, full of imagery and very thought-provoking. I was sad for you with - "River carries me in the accepted life direction of all living things without engaging my heart." I think we've all been through times like that, and it's hard to realize those were wasted moments as our time shortens - I wish there was some magic cure for all the questions we have so that no more of our time is spent puzzled, but then, some of that widens our perceptions and hearts, yes? A wonderful glimpse into who you are, my friend, and a stunning piece of writing.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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Ah Sharyn, this is very poignant, deep and profound - and the ending makes me well up. I liked all of it, but the conclusion, oh it is BRILLIANT! A wonderful free verse, full of imagery and very thought-provoking. I was sad for you with - "River carries me in the accepted life direction of all living things without engaging my heart." I think we've all been through times like that, and it's hard to realize those were wasted moments as our time shortens - I wish there was some magic cure for all the questions we have so that no more of our time is spent puzzled, but then, some of that widens our perceptions and hearts, yes? A wonderful glimpse into who you are, my friend, and a stunning piece of writing.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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I'm so glad you liked this one Dawn! Writing is all about "laying it on the line", isn't it?
Blessings,
Sharyn
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Sometimes, yes, I guess...at least if it's non-fiction. But you're right; even with fiction, it has to be real, so yes, it is about 'laying it on the line.' Although... my Advertising program at college taught me some neat 'gimmicks'/tricks/hooks - LOL - no wonder I don't have a shopping problem! I know most of the secrets...LOL.
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by "laying it on the line" I guess I mean "writing with honesty" - when I'm writing I can usually tell if something sounds phoney :))
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Of course. I knew what you meant. But do we often run across that on FanStory? I mean, sometimes people can be rushed, distracted, or just plain tired and not writing at their best, but mostly I think people here are honest - give it their best try - only a few (like anywhere) are the wolf in sheep's clothing. (And sometimes they are so good at it, you never know you've been a victim.)
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absolutely! and thank God for mute buttons when needed! :)))))))))))))))))
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Yes.
Comment from donnadiann
Descriptive walk back through the years. Very bold emotional tones throughout about those mentioned in the poem. Lots of effective alliterations. Very romantically and girlishly toned:)
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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Descriptive walk back through the years. Very bold emotional tones throughout about those mentioned in the poem. Lots of effective alliterations. Very romantically and girlishly toned:)
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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thx so much donna! :)Sharyn
Comment from emjaihammond
This piece is nicely thought through and organized in the telling of your story. It's an interesting idea and the read is smooth and held the readers interest beginning to end. I very much like the addition of the picture used.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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This piece is nicely thought through and organized in the telling of your story. It's an interesting idea and the read is smooth and held the readers interest beginning to end. I very much like the addition of the picture used.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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thx so much mj! :)Sharyn
Comment from Gregory K Shipman
How many here will look at this as poetry or prose or simply a beautifully written exercise... I see it as a series of curtains and I appreciate the fact you, Sharyn, have allowed me to stand outside your life and watch... mesmerized... as you, one by one, pull each curtain back to reveal whatever it is I'll see... because each visitor will see something slightly different. Slightly different because we will look with eyes that have seen our individual lives and we will compare... we can't help it.
You have blessed me with a look in, not only the window of your life, but the window of your soul.
greg
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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How many here will look at this as poetry or prose or simply a beautifully written exercise... I see it as a series of curtains and I appreciate the fact you, Sharyn, have allowed me to stand outside your life and watch... mesmerized... as you, one by one, pull each curtain back to reveal whatever it is I'll see... because each visitor will see something slightly different. Slightly different because we will look with eyes that have seen our individual lives and we will compare... we can't help it.
You have blessed me with a look in, not only the window of your life, but the window of your soul.
greg
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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You really are gorgeous Greg - it's people like you who keep me writing truth. I loved this review (and the six didn't hurt either). You may look at the window of my soul any time, my dear - because it's always a lovely exchange.
hugs
Sharyn
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I appreciate you with all my little heart that used to be there... and with your permission I'll seek out the window, peer with constant pleasure into your soul... and groove on it like it's always sunrise
Comment from cupa tea
what an intriguing poem! I'm sure it's meant to make one think about life...I love the image you put with it...I think that sure helps with the understanding....
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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what an intriguing poem! I'm sure it's meant to make one think about life...I love the image you put with it...I think that sure helps with the understanding....
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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absolutely - you've got the idea my dear (and what a fabulous name! I'm an Early Grey addict).
:)Sharyn
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Different stages of man, here only three phases of living is exalted, each step of living like the beginning, the middle and the end has diverse appreciation with distinct identities, naturally conveyed the conviction, I liked. 11/214
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Different stages of man, here only three phases of living is exalted, each step of living like the beginning, the middle and the end has diverse appreciation with distinct identities, naturally conveyed the conviction, I liked. 11/214
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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:) Thx Al! :)))S
Comment from LeMuseNoir
This piece evokes for me not poetry, exactly, but soliloquy - there is a wonderful playwright by the name of Jane Martin. She wrote an exquisitely diverse series of monologues for women called "Talking With" - Your piece has a very similar sensibility and depth and I think would be very at home among the rest- if you haven't read it - you really should I'm certain you would connect to it. Meanwhile - wonderful piece- proving that the line between poetry and theatre is always a very thin and very blurry one.
LMN
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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This piece evokes for me not poetry, exactly, but soliloquy - there is a wonderful playwright by the name of Jane Martin. She wrote an exquisitely diverse series of monologues for women called "Talking With" - Your piece has a very similar sensibility and depth and I think would be very at home among the rest- if you haven't read it - you really should I'm certain you would connect to it. Meanwhile - wonderful piece- proving that the line between poetry and theatre is always a very thin and very blurry one.
LMN
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Bless you for suggesting - I'll go find her LMN - because (I THINK you know) I've written a couple of monologue shows and I LOVE to read others' monologue pieces! Script is actually my first love - I'm only writing poetry at the moment because I'm procrastinating about finishing it! Thank you so much for your lovely six! :)Sharyn
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You are more than welcome - do check out the script - also there's a great playwright by the name of Don Nigro - check out his monologue "Squirrels" - strange and hilarious.