All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Butterfly Blue"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Peter Mansson
Sharyn, I really admired the innocuous butterfly as metaphor for pondering the imponderables. Even the caption "Butterfly Blue" has a lovely tonality about it,and would make a great name for a fashion label, movie title etc.. I always enjoy the rhythm you create in free verse with clever use of random and internal rhyme. Nice write, cheers Peter
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Sharyn, I really admired the innocuous butterfly as metaphor for pondering the imponderables. Even the caption "Butterfly Blue" has a lovely tonality about it,and would make a great name for a fashion label, movie title etc.. I always enjoy the rhythm you create in free verse with clever use of random and internal rhyme. Nice write, cheers Peter
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Bless you for noticing, Peter. I think free verse is my favorite form to write.
:)S
Comment from N.K. Wagner
We either create our own fantasy or allow someone else to do it for us. I subscribe to the idea that we do it over until we get it right, then become one with the universe. (Maybe we make a new star?) Hey, what do I know? Well posed questions, Sharyn. :D Nancy
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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We either create our own fantasy or allow someone else to do it for us. I subscribe to the idea that we do it over until we get it right, then become one with the universe. (Maybe we make a new star?) Hey, what do I know? Well posed questions, Sharyn. :D Nancy
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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thx so much Nancy! :)s
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Sharyn,
I personally know there is more behind the scenes and so do you. I love your visual as I do the question asked, will there just be a flash? Will your loved ones be there to greet you? Or do we dissipate into energy to be reabsorbed. Have you ever wondered that deja-vu is just a past life experience and we are here to remember what we already know. A poem full of the unanswerable, but we'll all find out sooner or later, hopefully later. Take care my smiling friend.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Hi Sharyn,
I personally know there is more behind the scenes and so do you. I love your visual as I do the question asked, will there just be a flash? Will your loved ones be there to greet you? Or do we dissipate into energy to be reabsorbed. Have you ever wondered that deja-vu is just a past life experience and we are here to remember what we already know. A poem full of the unanswerable, but we'll all find out sooner or later, hopefully later. Take care my smiling friend.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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thx so much James! :)S
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
In my case, I trust God to send Angels to take me to where He intends for my soul to go. I love that blue butterfly artwork. I think mankind has been pondering "what next" for a long, long time. But, this poem ponders that question in a most fascinating way. Enjoyed!
btw: This made me think I better go on a diet:
do I float like fairy light to heights of blissful limbo
and sit in glory?
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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In my case, I trust God to send Angels to take me to where He intends for my soul to go. I love that blue butterfly artwork. I think mankind has been pondering "what next" for a long, long time. But, this poem ponders that question in a most fascinating way. Enjoyed!
btw: This made me think I better go on a diet:
do I float like fairy light to heights of blissful limbo
and sit in glory?
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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well you could always stick around and float around your swimming pool dear - on a BIG floatie mat! that way, you keep your options open, too! :))))
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ROFLOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Comment from OLA THOMAS
Definitely, hard questions to convincingly answer. A muse that every man carries in his ever busy mind. Good outpour of puzzle here. I really like the string in ...'and what do I do, drifting in space
with a smile on my face, racing to nowhere
for no reason
except that my season
is over,'
ola thomas
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Definitely, hard questions to convincingly answer. A muse that every man carries in his ever busy mind. Good outpour of puzzle here. I really like the string in ...'and what do I do, drifting in space
with a smile on my face, racing to nowhere
for no reason
except that my season
is over,'
ola thomas
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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thank you so much Ola - how ARE you? settled into your new home? :)Sharyn
Comment from Dawn Munro
Sharyn, this is so very lovely. "...life and death are one butterfly breath apart...but when my heart stops beating do I float like fairy light to heights of blissful limbo and sit in glory? Is that the story?"
Sigh. That is a question I think all humankind asks at one time or another, even ones with the strongest of faith...
Your internal rhyme adds so much to an already beautiful free verse. Nicely done, my friend.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Sharyn, this is so very lovely. "...life and death are one butterfly breath apart...but when my heart stops beating do I float like fairy light to heights of blissful limbo and sit in glory? Is that the story?"
Sigh. That is a question I think all humankind asks at one time or another, even ones with the strongest of faith...
Your internal rhyme adds so much to an already beautiful free verse. Nicely done, my friend.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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thx so much Dawn! :)S
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My pleasure. :)
Comment from Nebukadneser
What a marvelous brilliant, profound poem this is. It brings to mind Shakespeare's To be or not to be out of Hamlet.
is anyone keeping the score?
and if so, what for? is there more?
or ...
do we all vanish
into ephemeral
butterfly blue?
Profound question beautifully put as the breath of a butterfly.
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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What a marvelous brilliant, profound poem this is. It brings to mind Shakespeare's To be or not to be out of Hamlet.
is anyone keeping the score?
and if so, what for? is there more?
or ...
do we all vanish
into ephemeral
butterfly blue?
Profound question beautifully put as the breath of a butterfly.
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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thx so much Nebukadneser! :))Sharyn
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, visionary, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the thoughts of the afterlife. i enjoyed reading it and love the picture. i know you know my beliefs on it. To be absent from the body is to be present with the Lord.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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this is very well written, visionary, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the thoughts of the afterlife. i enjoyed reading it and love the picture. i know you know my beliefs on it. To be absent from the body is to be present with the Lord.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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love that sweets! :)Sharyn
Comment from fairy77
Loved it and I'm just on a few times a week.Enjoyed your poem and I hope you don't stay butterfly blue:)Lovely display.I love your works and it's perfect as usual:)beth fairy77.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Loved it and I'm just on a few times a week.Enjoyed your poem and I hope you don't stay butterfly blue:)Lovely display.I love your works and it's perfect as usual:)beth fairy77.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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thanks Beth! only a few times a week now? what's up? :)S
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your thought-provoking questions and your addition of rhymes to add more intensity. I particularly like your original "butterfly breath" image and reinforcing, striking artwork. Cheers- Joan
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I admired your thought-provoking questions and your addition of rhymes to add more intensity. I particularly like your original "butterfly breath" image and reinforcing, striking artwork. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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thank you so much Joan! :)Sharyn