All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "It Makes Me Happy!"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Doubledare1
Ha ha. Cute poem! I love the way you wrote it! ... all the one word lines, colors, pictures, and sounds. You did a really good job at giving it a bouncy happy tone. I really like all you names for blue. My mom would love it since that's her favorite color. Great imagery! Wonderful descriptions. 'God's whole world is pulsing in sunlight.' That's beautiful. The whole poem gives you a happy sunny feeling! Makes ya want ta be out on the beach on a beautiful summer day. Good job!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Ha ha. Cute poem! I love the way you wrote it! ... all the one word lines, colors, pictures, and sounds. You did a really good job at giving it a bouncy happy tone. I really like all you names for blue. My mom would love it since that's her favorite color. Great imagery! Wonderful descriptions. 'God's whole world is pulsing in sunlight.' That's beautiful. The whole poem gives you a happy sunny feeling! Makes ya want ta be out on the beach on a beautiful summer day. Good job!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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WEll do it it - the beach I mean, Doubledare you my dear! (great name you have!)
thanks so much for reading & enjoying - best wishes, Sharyn :)
Comment from mermaids
Your use of words absorb what is around you. The color periwinkle is appealing and I like it's use here in your poem. I also like the variation in your free verse structure, you change to a column of words which adds strength to your feelings. I feel like going outside and absorbing nature with her sights and sounds.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Your use of words absorb what is around you. The color periwinkle is appealing and I like it's use here in your poem. I also like the variation in your free verse structure, you change to a column of words which adds strength to your feelings. I feel like going outside and absorbing nature with her sights and sounds.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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bless you mermaids! :)Sharyn
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Okay, well after really this I feel much happier too. Very expressive, certainly conveys your happiness. Very well written, thanks for sharing, I think you just brightened my day. =}
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Okay, well after really this I feel much happier too. Very expressive, certainly conveys your happiness. Very well written, thanks for sharing, I think you just brightened my day. =}
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Then I've done my job Roxanna - thank you so much! :)Sharyn
Comment from Cumbrianlass
This is a poem to wake up to! We're forecast more snow today, and I'm here reading about all these amazing shades of blue. Oh, Sharyn, I can just see that ocean, rolling on shore, blue as the background of your poem.
I just adore the feeling you put into this verse. It comes through loud and clear.
Yes, this one should certainly be read out loud.
Av
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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This is a poem to wake up to! We're forecast more snow today, and I'm here reading about all these amazing shades of blue. Oh, Sharyn, I can just see that ocean, rolling on shore, blue as the background of your poem.
I just adore the feeling you put into this verse. It comes through loud and clear.
Yes, this one should certainly be read out loud.
Av
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Bless you, Av - thank you so much! Dare we hope your snow will also come with some blue sky? :)s
Comment from Adri7enne
It made me nostalgic for the days, not so very long ago, when I could live in that joyful moment. Maybe it'll give me incentive to find it again.
Well done, v. I'd say you've found the way to happiness - enjoyment of what is. Good writing, girl.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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It made me nostalgic for the days, not so very long ago, when I could live in that joyful moment. Maybe it'll give me incentive to find it again.
Well done, v. I'd say you've found the way to happiness - enjoyment of what is. Good writing, girl.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Find it too, Adrienne - it's often in pure simplicity, I find.
Blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from Norbanus
Delightful how you've shown your wisdom here,
and guided us to search the cheery skies.
a joyous day awaits from thoughts like those,
and leaves ream of pleasure that will last.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Delightful how you've shown your wisdom here,
and guided us to search the cheery skies.
a joyous day awaits from thoughts like those,
and leaves ream of pleasure that will last.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Bless you Nor! :)Sharyn
Comment from Graceland42
You certainly bring to life with these words a happy day and many happy moments. There is so much to enjoy in life, despite life's trials and inconveniences. The earth, the sky the one's near and dear to us. You describe vast joy and gratitude in this write. I like the style, too. Beautiful work!
Warm wishes,
Grace :-)
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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You certainly bring to life with these words a happy day and many happy moments. There is so much to enjoy in life, despite life's trials and inconveniences. The earth, the sky the one's near and dear to us. You describe vast joy and gratitude in this write. I like the style, too. Beautiful work!
Warm wishes,
Grace :-)
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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So glad you enjoyed this one Grace - thank you so much! :)Sharyn
Comment from bayoupoet
This is a beautifully, descriptive and well written free style poem. I love the colors, so often missed because of
our hectic lifestyle. It is a pleasure to read for you.
sandra
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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This is a beautifully, descriptive and well written free style poem. I love the colors, so often missed because of
our hectic lifestyle. It is a pleasure to read for you.
sandra
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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thx so much bayou ... "blue" should vibe well with you, too, hmm? Blessings, Sharyn
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You're very welcome! Yeah blue!
Comment from rjuselius
this is an interesting piece of poetry! it's quite witty and produces a topic unique! funny how we get satisfaction in so little things.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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this is an interesting piece of poetry! it's quite witty and produces a topic unique! funny how we get satisfaction in so little things.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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thx so much rebekka! :)Sharyn
Comment from Hareem.S
A very nice and sweet poem. Little things makes us happy sometimes but we are too caught up in our busy lives to notice them. Enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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A very nice and sweet poem. Little things makes us happy sometimes but we are too caught up in our busy lives to notice them. Enjoyed it.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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thx so much hareem! :)Sharyn