Comment from Slythytove2

Exceptional

Well I did something wrong. I went to the page where someone says they want to become a fan without finishing my review and since I mentioned in my review that I was going to try to get this done. Of course once I push those button I couldn't get back to my review so you may find an other unfinished review.
The book section I just read is great.I await another Chapter(?).

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2013

Thanks for reading and your kind comments. We get so few sixes that I'm always humbled to get one. Regards, Bill

Comment from barkingdog

Exceptional

This is a delightful beginning to what appears to be a wonderful story.
Everything is so visual and your narrator is talking directly to the reader. I plan to follow along.I'm very interested in where this is going with Virgil and Rabbit.

I didn't get many spags. I was too caught up in reading. LOL Here are two:
-boys, my brother John and I.[and me]
-in Japan(,) and we

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2013

Thanks for reading and the wonderful compliment of the six. We don't get many and I'm always humbled to get one. Regards, Bill

Comment from 4tulips

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your story. I thought it was a great beginning of a story for further chapters. It read smooth and was easy to follow visually as I continued to read further. I didn't see any immediate changes needed. Good job.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2013

Thanks for reading and your kind feedback. I'll post another chapter soon.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

I remember Rabbit from before :-)
seasonal names are not traditionally capitalized
I can just imagine your fear at being sent to Father Flanigan LOL
I'm so happy to be reading about Virgil again
I love the way you describe his walk
excellent use of dialect and colloquial speech
I hope you keep the chapters coming
Brooke :-)

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2013

Hi Brooke - thanks for reading. My muse has been absent, so I did return to some previous work. This is being written as fiction, or what my friend Lee calls Humpwhistle - truth wrapped up around little lies. Regards, Bill

reply by adewpearl on 07-Jan-2013

Lordy, don't go getting corrupted by Lee!! LOL

Comment from Adri7enne

Excellent

Ah, what a nice story this is aiming to be. I can feel the affection building between Bill and old Virgil, right from the start. You are immersing us in a tale of the old south - a gentle tale by all appearances.
Good show, Bill. It's cold here. Snow and wind and furnaces on full blast. Good to read a tale of a southern family.
Well done. I enjoyed the first chapter.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2013

Thanks Adri - my muse was on vacation, but I hope to get back. Sorry it's cold there. I'm actually getting ready to go hit some golf balls. Still cool, but should be low fifties. Bill

Comment from c_lucas

Exceptional

This has the makings of a very good read. You were in West Central Georgia and I was in Augusta,Georgia. I left at the end of 1960. Thank you for writing about Rabbit adventure.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2013

Thanks for reading Charlie, the kind comments and the compliment of a six. I appreciate them all! Bill

reply by c_lucas on 06-Jan-2013

I fell in love with the "Rebbit" stories the first time you posted one. You earned the sixer.

Comment from Beverley101

Excellent

Excellent work. I can see old Virge and Rabbit and that's what you want to do - bring the characters alive. Your southern dialogue rings true as well, although I'm no judge of southern talk. Watch your commas - you don't always need them. Ex: 'My grandfather could plow with them, but they played with him.' You don't need a comma before 'but'. A good read.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2013

Thanks for reading, the kind words and the spot. I'll circle back around for that. Regards, Bill

Comment from Shirley B

Exceptional

Dear Bill, this took me back to another time and place. It was a simpler time it was called childhood. I knew when I started reading this it was based on a true story. I am hooked already. I will be a loyal reader. You use some great imagery here. It takes me back to a time I can remember. Some people might not ever know about. Its good to think back sometimes. Great write. Thanks for sharing, Shirley

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2013

Shirley - you thank me for writing. I thank you for the big smile your brought my way. Always warmest regards, Bill

Comment from Alecia Saldana7

Excellent

A sweet feel of calmness gave back my true belonging of me. Sometimes I try to be something other than me. This hope of creating small into large. Now pleasent ways of your childhood give for me my small beauty

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2013

Thanks for reading and I appreciate the feedback. Bill

Comment from PoeticXscape

Excellent

aww this is an enchanting little tale. I have a rabbit, she is quite old now but she is so sweet. Thank you for sharing and keep up the good work.

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 Comment Written 06-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2013

Thanks for reading and your kind comments. Bill