All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 44 "Bites of Delight"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from jjstar
Yes, even though I complain bitterly about the physical changes aging has brought about, yes, though I feel a little battered and tattered, I appreciate some aspects...mainly knowing that the universe has a way of working things out, even though some problems appear to be insurmountable. If someone offered me a million dollars to go back to being 20 years old, I'd pass..ahahaha
I found it especially amusing that you brought up the point about seeing the reflection of your mother. Nearly every night as I plead with my 20 year old to make good decisions..like not driving 90 miles to a party on New Year's Eve, I hear the voice of my mother saying that very same thing so many years ago...
Well done! :)
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
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Yes, even though I complain bitterly about the physical changes aging has brought about, yes, though I feel a little battered and tattered, I appreciate some aspects...mainly knowing that the universe has a way of working things out, even though some problems appear to be insurmountable. If someone offered me a million dollars to go back to being 20 years old, I'd pass..ahahaha
I found it especially amusing that you brought up the point about seeing the reflection of your mother. Nearly every night as I plead with my 20 year old to make good decisions..like not driving 90 miles to a party on New Year's Eve, I hear the voice of my mother saying that very same thing so many years ago...
Well done! :)
Comment Written 02-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
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oh we have similar mirrors jj - just this morning I was my 16 year old's son worst enemy for not dropping him off to surf at Ho'okipa all by himself when the waves are huge! "you worry too much" ... yep ... hello mom ... :)Sharyn
Comment from BigPoppaJrock
I like how you brought the humor in at the end with creamy bits of delight. Life too quick and to quote a cliche it seems like it happens in a blink of an eye. Very good poem thanks for sharing.
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I like how you brought the humor in at the end with creamy bits of delight. Life too quick and to quote a cliche it seems like it happens in a blink of an eye. Very good poem thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
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thx so much - again - BPJ!
Comment from nomi338
Growing older is chock full of surprises, most of them pleasant. You begin to notice how much you have in common with your parents, how much you agree with things they told you years ago. You are constantly amazed at how hard it is to get your kids to learn from your accounts of mistakes you made as they are intent on making many of those same mistakes. It gets to a point that you are surprised when you wake up and are able to get out of bed under your own power and realize that God has granted you another day. Let us bow our heads and give thanks. Your are surprised to hear that some ball player is retiring after twelve years of playing and you remember when he was afresh faced rookie. I could go on but you already know. Excellent poem.
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Growing older is chock full of surprises, most of them pleasant. You begin to notice how much you have in common with your parents, how much you agree with things they told you years ago. You are constantly amazed at how hard it is to get your kids to learn from your accounts of mistakes you made as they are intent on making many of those same mistakes. It gets to a point that you are surprised when you wake up and are able to get out of bed under your own power and realize that God has granted you another day. Let us bow our heads and give thanks. Your are surprised to hear that some ball player is retiring after twelve years of playing and you remember when he was afresh faced rookie. I could go on but you already know. Excellent poem.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
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oh yes - all too familiar territory nomi! :) Sharyn
Comment from misscookie
I love the words to your poem in some ways it's sad but true.
You had my attention from thr e first l;ine to the last. for I can truly relate.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
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I love the words to your poem in some ways it's sad but true.
You had my attention from thr e first l;ine to the last. for I can truly relate.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
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thx so much misscookie! :) Sharyn
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Your very welcome, until next time.
Comment from ruzu27
I like your humorous free verse and can relate very well. It is so good to know one is not alone, that others feel alike. I'll remember your poem during the year and do as you suggest:
you'll agree
feasting on life now
savoring
each flavor
in small
dreamy
exquisitely creamy
bites
of
delight
Thank you for sharing and good luck for the contest.
:) Ruth
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
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I like your humorous free verse and can relate very well. It is so good to know one is not alone, that others feel alike. I'll remember your poem during the year and do as you suggest:
you'll agree
feasting on life now
savoring
each flavor
in small
dreamy
exquisitely creamy
bites
of
delight
Thank you for sharing and good luck for the contest.
:) Ruth
Comment Written 02-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
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thank you so much, Ruth :)
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You are most welcome!
Comment from Sandisan
aha...yes growing older does have it's perks. I love how you write about yourself, your son...I have felt that way myself with my children. One minute you are ten wanting to do as the adults do..then you are the adult! It goes by too fast,,good writing.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
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aha...yes growing older does have it's perks. I love how you write about yourself, your son...I have felt that way myself with my children. One minute you are ten wanting to do as the adults do..then you are the adult! It goes by too fast,,good writing.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
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thanks so much Sandisan! :)
Comment from sicknormalboy
Nicely done, the end is fantastic, feasting on life now
savoring each flavor in small dreamy exquisitely creamy bites of delight, excellent. It nicely went from long lines to short with ease.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
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Nicely done, the end is fantastic, feasting on life now
savoring each flavor in small dreamy exquisitely creamy bites of delight, excellent. It nicely went from long lines to short with ease.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
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thx so much sickie! :)
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Yay a nickname! lol most people try and shorten it to sickboy, but I like yours better. thanks again.
Comment from Bryana
It's very true, as time goes by you get a little battered and tattered, but getting older has it's rewards as well. You get discounts!!! LOL
I liked your poem very much, it certainly made me think about old age.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
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It's very true, as time goes by you get a little battered and tattered, but getting older has it's rewards as well. You get discounts!!! LOL
I liked your poem very much, it certainly made me think about old age.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
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thx Bryana!
Comment from vasquezsavage
Very nice indeed. Very well-written. Not much to have issue with. Nice flow and imagery is good. Like the way you structured it. It added to the message. A classic piece. Wish I had a six to give it. vs
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
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Very nice indeed. Very well-written. Not much to have issue with. Nice flow and imagery is good. Like the way you structured it. It added to the message. A classic piece. Wish I had a six to give it. vs
Comment Written 02-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
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thx so much vs!
Comment from oNray
I enjoyed this as it is easy for me to relate toooo- We have a lot of weight slowing us down, but we do have wonderful memories, and fing happyness in family and friends
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I enjoyed this as it is easy for me to relate toooo- We have a lot of weight slowing us down, but we do have wonderful memories, and fing happyness in family and friends
Comment Written 01-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
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thx so much oNray! :) Sharyn