All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 " One Pure Note"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Ira White
This certainly fits the category of uplifting. The beginning experiences the low that is brought to great heights by the ending. The irregular lines are sort of like life itself- an irregular experience. I like the occasional rhymes and alliteration. I think they add to the emotion of the piece. Good work! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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This certainly fits the category of uplifting. The beginning experiences the low that is brought to great heights by the ending. The irregular lines are sort of like life itself- an irregular experience. I like the occasional rhymes and alliteration. I think they add to the emotion of the piece. Good work! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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An irregular experience for sure, Ira - simply and well phrased! thank you so much for reading, reviewing etc my piece AND for your wonderful '6'. I'm honored.
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment from fayesh
Wow! This poem was truly exhilarating just like the "pure note" heard on your beach. Congratulations on the win. It was well-deserved.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Wow! This poem was truly exhilarating just like the "pure note" heard on your beach. Congratulations on the win. It was well-deserved.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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thank you so very much fayesh - so much appreciated - and your wonderful '6' made my morning!
blessings
Sharyn
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
I can see why this won the Uplifting Poetry contest. I particularly like the thought that "happiness is not a myth, it's music in the mists and I can find it." Thank you for sharing this lovely idea. Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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I can see why this won the Uplifting Poetry contest. I particularly like the thought that "happiness is not a myth, it's music in the mists and I can find it." Thank you for sharing this lovely idea. Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much Jeanie! :) Sharyn
Comment from Annmuma
I haven't been on fanstory much in the last year; decided to take a minute to see what's out here --- I'm so glad I did! What a beautifully 'mentally' illustrated verse. I could see every item mentioned, not just visually, but physically. I felt the impact of the sight from deepest wounded soul to the soaring heights of hope. Stunning! ann
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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I haven't been on fanstory much in the last year; decided to take a minute to see what's out here --- I'm so glad I did! What a beautifully 'mentally' illustrated verse. I could see every item mentioned, not just visually, but physically. I felt the impact of the sight from deepest wounded soul to the soaring heights of hope. Stunning! ann
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Bless you for reading & enjoying, and yes, for being "uplifted" Ann - I'm VERY honored by your special '6'!
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
What beautiful and poignient pictures you have painted here on your lonely beach. I was right there on the sand, in the same sand-bleached, bone-lonely place. Drawn down into the misery by your words. Then you sang the notes for me. What an inspired vision that brought. I love the juxtaposition of the solo notes-implying the singer is also alone--with the beach walkers state of mind. One in joy, one in sadness, but the joy overwhelms. Bravo dear, a well deserved contest winner--Wendy
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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What beautiful and poignient pictures you have painted here on your lonely beach. I was right there on the sand, in the same sand-bleached, bone-lonely place. Drawn down into the misery by your words. Then you sang the notes for me. What an inspired vision that brought. I love the juxtaposition of the solo notes-implying the singer is also alone--with the beach walkers state of mind. One in joy, one in sadness, but the joy overwhelms. Bravo dear, a well deserved contest winner--Wendy
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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aaah, there you are Wendy ... I think of you each time I do my banana bread for guests! Thank you so much for enjoying my piece and giving me one of your magic sixes - so much appreciated!
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment from dragonpoet
This starts as a poem of loneliness and desolation. But it ends as a poem of found faith and the true meaning of sprituality and love. She finds beauty and not ugliness around her now. You have some good images and sound metaphors. I like the crack of the chandelier for loss of hope and the sound of a finger rimming crystal for hope. It is strange that hope and it's opposite are both found in sounds made from crystal of different kinds.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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This starts as a poem of loneliness and desolation. But it ends as a poem of found faith and the true meaning of sprituality and love. She finds beauty and not ugliness around her now. You have some good images and sound metaphors. I like the crack of the chandelier for loss of hope and the sound of a finger rimming crystal for hope. It is strange that hope and it's opposite are both found in sounds made from crystal of different kinds.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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thx so much dp!
Blessings,
Sharyn
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You're welcome.
Joan
Comment from Oldsteamer
And what would that note be? Perhaps a C.
When your down all you have to do.
Wait.
Some fool like me will show up who is more pitiful or has a laugh for you will come along.
I remember the poor me'. that led to pour me another.
Life's good,
-R -
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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And what would that note be? Perhaps a C.
When your down all you have to do.
Wait.
Some fool like me will show up who is more pitiful or has a laugh for you will come along.
I remember the poor me'. that led to pour me another.
Life's good,
-R -
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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aaah, there you are my dear! Absolutely, a high and pure top "C". I'd sit on my singing teacher's back "porch" - i.e. the rocks overlooking the ocean, and listen to her opera students (who had far better voices than mine) - and I've always remembered those notes floating out over the ocean in the morning air ... :) Sharyn
Comment from kashmayank
This was a worthy contest winner ,a nivce motivational poetry.The way you structured it was nice and the flow of words was smooth
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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This was a worthy contest winner ,a nivce motivational poetry.The way you structured it was nice and the flow of words was smooth
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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thx so much kashmayank - so glad you enjoyed it! :) Sharyn
Comment from honeytree
We feel for those who are hungry
The cold feeling they have no-where to go.
Uplifting ways to help us on earth by God and nature
Can be very special to receive.
Sad ways drift away.
honey tree
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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We feel for those who are hungry
The cold feeling they have no-where to go.
Uplifting ways to help us on earth by God and nature
Can be very special to receive.
Sad ways drift away.
honey tree
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Honeytree, you always give the most beautiful reviews! Thank you so much, my dear, and a specially BIG thank you for your magic '6'!
Blessings,
Sharyn
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I enjoyed what you wrote very much.
Thank you for your words here.I try and do the best.
honey tree
Comment from ~Dovey
The correlation of the two is quite poignant in your piece. I enjoyed the internal rhymes and alliteration sprinkled throughout. Excellent work, and certainly, "uplifting". :) Good luck in this contest.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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The correlation of the two is quite poignant in your piece. I enjoyed the internal rhymes and alliteration sprinkled throughout. Excellent work, and certainly, "uplifting". :) Good luck in this contest.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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thx so much Dovey - I won it! yeah! :) Sharyn
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Congrats! :)