Our marriage
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "How it started..."Short book about how our marriage started.
55 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I like the way you set the stage for describing your attraction to and ultimate relationship with Robert in the future chapter(s). You did a good job of providing us with a context and giving us a clear impression of who you were and why. -Joan
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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I like the way you set the stage for describing your attraction to and ultimate relationship with Robert in the future chapter(s). You did a good job of providing us with a context and giving us a clear impression of who you were and why. -Joan
Comment Written 15-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. Warmly and take care, Ine
Comment from TammyGail
I enjoyed this story about you and your husband meeting
It was well written and interesting
Great imagery used ..
Can't wait for the next chapter
Thanks for sharing it was a pleasure
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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I enjoyed this story about you and your husband meeting
It was well written and interesting
Great imagery used ..
Can't wait for the next chapter
Thanks for sharing it was a pleasure
Comment Written 15-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. Warmly and take care, Ine
Comment from psalmist
I thought you did an excellent job with the background of your early adult life. All in all, it sounds like you had fun, which is what youth is all about. I wish I had been able to travel when I was younger. Linda
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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I thought you did an excellent job with the background of your early adult life. All in all, it sounds like you had fun, which is what youth is all about. I wish I had been able to travel when I was younger. Linda
Comment Written 15-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. Warmly and take care, Ine
Comment from Linda England Bonam
Very well done, Robina. I really enjoyed this first part and look forward to the next. You did a good job of making sure you held the reader's attention.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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Very well done, Robina. I really enjoyed this first part and look forward to the next. You did a good job of making sure you held the reader's attention.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. Warmly and take care, Ine
Comment from rchitwood
Very good story though I believe something happen to the top part of the story.It came up then just got erased. I am reading the bottom under the photo unless you just wrote half a story.What I read is very creative and I am interested in what happens with the Italian fellow.Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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Very good story though I believe something happen to the top part of the story.It came up then just got erased. I am reading the bottom under the photo unless you just wrote half a story.What I read is very creative and I am interested in what happens with the Italian fellow.Blessings Rita
Comment Written 15-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. Warmly and take care, Ine
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
A good story of your life
when younger... Robina...
but needs a little tweaking here and there...
Just ignore if not in agreement with any suggestions, my friend.
and,had a vivid - space after comma
I got stuck with - as you've used "stuck" again in this sentence, might you consider..
I got stranded..
I wanted someone who did not all I might like?? confused here.
Fortunately(,) she would not - add comma
decided to go to a museum[.](,) [A](a)n Italian guy joined me. - this needs to be a run-on sentence - thus change period for comma and small "a"
Look forward to the next chapter.
Margaret
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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A good story of your life
when younger... Robina...
but needs a little tweaking here and there...
Just ignore if not in agreement with any suggestions, my friend.
and,had a vivid - space after comma
I got stuck with - as you've used "stuck" again in this sentence, might you consider..
I got stranded..
I wanted someone who did not all I might like?? confused here.
Fortunately(,) she would not - add comma
decided to go to a museum[.](,) [A](a)n Italian guy joined me. - this needs to be a run-on sentence - thus change period for comma and small "a"
Look forward to the next chapter.
Margaret
Comment Written 15-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. Warmly and take care, Ine
Comment from PoetlikePoe
this is very interesting...
brings back lots of memories, like last weekend
i'm still on the edge of breaking those habbits
i'm very interested in hearing more about your life
i enjoyed reading this, keep it coming!!
-mitch
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2011
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this is very interesting...
brings back lots of memories, like last weekend
i'm still on the edge of breaking those habbits
i'm very interested in hearing more about your life
i enjoyed reading this, keep it coming!!
-mitch
Comment Written 15-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. Warmly and take care, Ine
Comment from Lovinia
An interesting beginning to a biographical story. A good description of who your were and the code you followed. A little dose of rebellion. I liked "My mother once told me the house was not just a hotel." "I like culture and picked a Greek isle with hardly any. " .... so I would at least not have to eat alone.", "This really meant that I had no interest whatsoever. He did not know this of course. These little quips, almost spoken as an 'aside' add flair and interest and offer an insight into your personality.
One suggestion for change:
*"who did not all I might like" - this need tweaking Une, doesn't make sense in English.
You have built the intrigue and the readers is left looking for more information ... and wants to read the next chapter. Well done. I enjoyed the read and the picture is just great.
Warm Regards - :) Lovinia xoxo
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2011
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An interesting beginning to a biographical story. A good description of who your were and the code you followed. A little dose of rebellion. I liked "My mother once told me the house was not just a hotel." "I like culture and picked a Greek isle with hardly any. " .... so I would at least not have to eat alone.", "This really meant that I had no interest whatsoever. He did not know this of course. These little quips, almost spoken as an 'aside' add flair and interest and offer an insight into your personality.
One suggestion for change:
*"who did not all I might like" - this need tweaking Une, doesn't make sense in English.
You have built the intrigue and the readers is left looking for more information ... and wants to read the next chapter. Well done. I enjoyed the read and the picture is just great.
Warm Regards - :) Lovinia xoxo
Comment Written 15-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. Warmly and take care, Ine. Thanks for the tip.
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Hi Ine
My pleasure, I enjoyed. Nice to see you on the front page also! Hugs - :) Lovinia xoxo
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was I, did not notice. Hugs, Ine
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Oh, how nice! I enjoyed reading this and now I am looking forward to the next part. You brave girl, going off on holiday by yourself! :o)
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2011
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Oh, how nice! I enjoyed reading this and now I am looking forward to the next part. You brave girl, going off on holiday by yourself! :o)
Comment Written 15-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. Warmly and take care, Ine
Comment from Dutchie
Hi Ine. What a surprise.Oh yes I recognize it. My parents were very protective too.You want to experience what life is.Very well written this chapter and I am very curious
how it continues, for it kept my attention til the end. Great job,my friend, I loved it very much. Liefs Fia
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2011
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Hi Ine. What a surprise.Oh yes I recognize it. My parents were very protective too.You want to experience what life is.Very well written this chapter and I am very curious
how it continues, for it kept my attention til the end. Great job,my friend, I loved it very much. Liefs Fia
Comment Written 15-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. Warmly and take care, Ine
