POEMS, SONGS AND NOTES
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Comment from skye
Heartfelt and full of pain, this poem of loss and tragedy.
Sadly, this is the result of war.
Your cinquain is well written.
Good luck in the contest.
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Heartfelt and full of pain, this poem of loss and tragedy.
Sadly, this is the result of war.
Your cinquain is well written.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2010
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Skye
Thanks for the wonderful review..Yes, wars have more causalities than just those on the front lines. Carol
Comment from fictionwriter
This is truly sad. I had a dear friend who lost a child, and it was the most heartbreaking thing to watch someone go through. Great job.
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This is truly sad. I had a dear friend who lost a child, and it was the most heartbreaking thing to watch someone go through. Great job.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2010
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Joy
I wrote in honor of all the mothers who have lost a child in these wars, but the emotions of course will always be personal...You are right! It's a terrible thing that never really ends. Smiles, Carol
Comment from jayesnb
I could not even begin to imagine what the loss of a child would feel like. But I can feel the emotion from these few words. Great job with this. Have a great new year.
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I could not even begin to imagine what the loss of a child would feel like. But I can feel the emotion from these few words. Great job with this. Have a great new year.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2010
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jayesnb
I pray you never have to know...Thank you for the kind review and wishes...Smiling at you, Carol
Comment from missy98writer
Carol,
I love your Cinquain poem "Why." The art work is awesome you've used. What I read from your words in the poem is about a mother mourning the death of a child. The metaphor you used "Sweet warmth to come again" described the wish of a mother wanting her child back. The Title "Why" makes sense. This poem is full of depth and meaning in so few words. I wish I had six to give you. This fantastic poem gets my "freaking awesome" award. I'm blown away. You should write more poetry along with your fantastic short stories.
Melissa.
Here is one of my favorite quotes of Gandhi about death:
"Live as if you were to die tomorrow. Learn as if you were to live forever."
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Carol,
I love your Cinquain poem "Why." The art work is awesome you've used. What I read from your words in the poem is about a mother mourning the death of a child. The metaphor you used "Sweet warmth to come again" described the wish of a mother wanting her child back. The Title "Why" makes sense. This poem is full of depth and meaning in so few words. I wish I had six to give you. This fantastic poem gets my "freaking awesome" award. I'm blown away. You should write more poetry along with your fantastic short stories.
Melissa.
Here is one of my favorite quotes of Gandhi about death:
"Live as if you were to die tomorrow. Learn as if you were to live forever."
Comment Written 01-Jan-2010
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Melissa
I am trying to expand my horizons..force myself to venture out and try to avenues...Poetry scares me. Thank you for the awesome review. Carol
Comment from mbroyles2
Very touching poem.
The artwork was spectacular!
In such few words you delivered a powerful and heart felt sentiment.
Beautiful.
Thanks for letting me read your work.
Michael
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Very touching poem.
The artwork was spectacular!
In such few words you delivered a powerful and heart felt sentiment.
Beautiful.
Thanks for letting me read your work.
Michael
Comment Written 01-Jan-2010
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Michael
Thank you very much. I wrote the poem in honor of the many mothers who have lost their sons and daughters in the war, but the emotions came from the loss of my son and grandson. Thank you so much for reviewing.
Comment from fastdigits
A poem of the times, frought
with poignant feelings that
your words invoke of a child
that goes off to war and the
tears that are left behind.
Well done and good luck
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A poem of the times, frought
with poignant feelings that
your words invoke of a child
that goes off to war and the
tears that are left behind.
Well done and good luck
Comment Written 01-Jan-2010
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fastdigits
Thank you...I am going to try and expand my horizons in 2010..A poet I am not, but I can put my emotions into words, hoping others can relate. Thank you for the review...Carol
Comment from unbridledspirit
Wow..nice imagery. Well written piece. Loved the artwork that you chose. In my mind, the poem speaks about a woman who has lost her military son that was killed in action. If it means something else please let me know but this works for me.
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Wow..nice imagery. Well written piece. Loved the artwork that you chose. In my mind, the poem speaks about a woman who has lost her military son that was killed in action. If it means something else please let me know but this works for me.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2010
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unbridled
I chose the picture to honor all the mothers that have lost their children in the war, but the feelings came from losing my own son and grandson...Thanks for the wonderful review. Carol
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God bless you Carol!
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He has in many other ways....Thank you!
Comment from poetknowit
You've done a good job portraying the ever-present pain a mother has upon losing a child- it never goes away, and time does not heal it, though she finds ways to cope.
I like the imagery of coldness that the mother feels as she drapes herself over the metal coffin.
The picture is heart-rending but appropriate.
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You've done a good job portraying the ever-present pain a mother has upon losing a child- it never goes away, and time does not heal it, though she finds ways to cope.
I like the imagery of coldness that the mother feels as she drapes herself over the metal coffin.
The picture is heart-rending but appropriate.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2010
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Poet
Thank you for reading and understanding the pain that comes with losing a child...I don't believe it will ever go away...
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Very good. This poem flows nicely and the artwork you chose for it speaks volumes as does your poem. Wonderful job. Good luck with the contest.
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Very good. This poem flows nicely and the artwork you chose for it speaks volumes as does your poem. Wonderful job. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2010
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Barbara
Thank you so much...I am going to try and venture into new fields this year..silly nursery rhymes and poetry today...Stimulate this old mind...Smiles, Carol
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You're doing a great job.
Comment from AnnaLinda
Begin Again,
Well, How could you not enter this contest with the question of a lifetime? Your for is right on and this line is hits to the core:
"Forever chilled, a mother cries,"
You have a lovely presentation as well.
Linda
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Begin Again,
Well, How could you not enter this contest with the question of a lifetime? Your for is right on and this line is hits to the core:
"Forever chilled, a mother cries,"
You have a lovely presentation as well.
Linda
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2010
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Linda
I know it is not ours to question, but there are still moments when the heart weakens and cries..Why? Thanks for the wonderful review...Carol
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You are very welcome!