Comment from steevie

Excellent

well done, Carol

this is a fine entry for the contest on feelings
you captured the mood of sadness with expertise'

very descritive words and pulled togther tightly by well rhymed words

great write

steve

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009

Steve...

Thanks for reading and for enjoying my poem. I greatly appreciate your review. Thanks again - Carol

Comment from tati

Excellent

First, a thought of sadness
Of lost moments we once shared.
Soon followed by the anger,
Distraught, that life's unfair.

Next will come the hopelessness,
The inability to care,
The thought of senseless living
Without your love to share.

Dear Carol,

The above lines caught my attention immediately. Beautifully written stages of emotions: sadness, anger, hopelessness, thought of senseless living ... Amazing. Thank you for sharing, and good luck in the contest. Your friend, tati (July 06, 2009)

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2009

Tati..

How wonderful to hear from you...

I am glad that you enjoyed the poem. Grief has so many sides to it. Thanks for reading and commenting. I am glad you enjoyed it. Your friend, Carol

reply by tati on 05-Jul-2009

You're welcome, Carol. It's my pleasure to read and review your writings. Warm wishes, tati.

Comment from Readywriter52

Excellent

It is hard to lose someone you love. The emotion can bounce between anger the love one has left you and sorrow that they are gone. The best way to deal with loss is to thing of the positive things they did in life.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2009

Readywriter...

I agree wholeheartedly. Some days are more difficult than others, but we must go on until we meet again.

Thanks for the review. Carol

Comment from Amfunny

Excellent

WOW. This was awesome. It is strong and powerful in its words and emotion. An excellent piece of writing. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing this one. Good luck in the contest. This is really good.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2009

Amfunny...

Thanks so much for your generous reply. I appreciate your kind words and knowing that you enjoyed something I wrote.

Thanks again Carol

Comment from Belinda

Excellent

A nice a vivid poem of hope, disappointment, loss, ending with (as you say in your author notes) a glimmer of hope. The storm within is described very well. Good luck with the competition!

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2009

Belinda..

Thank you for reading and commenting on the poem. I hoped that the storm within showed through but I couldn't help bu add a touch of hope. Without hope, I don't know where I'd be. Thanks again - Carol

Comment from GABSTBOZ

Excellent

Hi Carol
I can't imagine the words to give , to comfort such a storm " With Each Day" there is little recovery or none. Your blessing is your writing and I wish that it helps "With Each Day"

Smiles of hope
Gabor

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2009

Gabor...

Thanks for your kind and generous reply. I truly appreciate every word. Thanks again - Carol

Comment from RebelRose

Excellent

This is very good and charged with emotion. I could almost feel your pain. The structure and rhymes are good. The lines are smooth. A very well written entry for the contest. Good luck.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2009

RebelRose..

Thanks so much for your kind and generous words. I greatly appreciate them. Thanks again Carol

Comment from pixiemillie

Excellent

The grief and loneliness you have captured in this write, touching. As the day wakens you take those two coffees to that special place, knowing that loved one is gone- -and that is so sad in itself- -the sadness, leading to hoplessness and building to that 'spears of pain that attacks the heart' and the 'thunderous roar of sorrow'.

I'm glad you included the glimmer of hope because each tomorrow will only be less torn by grief.

Well written, well-rhymed quatrains and the rhythm if fine with me- -going for the content and this has grief captured well.

Thank you and good luck in the contest. I see noting that needs attention.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2009

Pixiemillie..

Awesome response and I sincerely appreciate each word. Thanks for understanding the emotions within my ppoem and thanks for the review. Carol

Comment from Jersey Dreamer

Excellent

A very heart felt poem of loss and loneliness, which everyone in their lives will feel,
They say time is a healer,? But there is nothing that can replace the bond of the soul that is lost but there is hope ,Hope that love and happiness will grow again out of the mist of time,
Nice poem of loves lost,
Kind regards
Jersey dreamer,

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2009

Jersey Dreamer...

Thanks for the kind words. I greatly appreciate your review.

Thanks again - Carol

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

lightening bolts should be lightning
ragged breath, shaking hands, body sags with sorrow - that is such an intense expression of raw emotion that the entire poem has led up to - you depict overwhelming sorrow at the loss of a loved one in a most compelling way in this poem of rhyming quatrains, and the quatrains read beautifully out loud. This is effective and touching throughout, Carol, and I love the way you anchor the emotions in concrete images such as the time worn stool and rocking chair. Brooke

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 Comment Written 05-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2009

Brooke...Already jumped right on your suggestion...My fingers wanted to put a few extra letters there. Thanks.

Sorrow has been my friend lately whether I like it or not..but I tried to lace it with a touch of hope with the last line...I'll try again, tomorrow.

Thanks so much for your kind and thoughtful review. Carol