Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

This is such a sorrowful poem - and made so much more effective by focusing on those little possessions of your son, the toy trucks and tiny shoes - the repeated T sounds work so well, and the tone simply draws the reader in to the grief of the speaker. You are in my prayers. Brooke

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009

Brooke...

Thank you...It's been a long time, but his birthday is near.
So sometimes it feels like yesterday. Thanks - Carol

Comment from empire76

Excellent

The sense of loss is clearly seen in your words, though you leave it open to interpretations as to what the loss if. The artwork is a good one too. goes well with the words.

Nothing to change here.

E

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009

E ....

Thanks for your kind words. His birthday is near so I remember.... Carol C

Comment from honeytree

Excellent

Yes when we lose someone close. Their are no tomorrows only memory of

"toy trucks and tiny shoes
all our dreams now tucked away
lonely teardrops fall."

Loving but sad words written.

Honeytree.

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 Comment Written 25-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009

Honeytree...

Thank you for your kind words. Carol

Comment from jmkenpo

Excellent

I am so sorry for your loss. It has to be so hard for parents. I only know a small percentage of that loss, due to miscarriages but it still hurts all the same. My prayers are with you.

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 Comment Written 25-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009

jmkenpo..

Thanks for the ray of sunshine. I appreciate it! Carol