CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from AbigailDavid
Hello, lovely poetic declaration of you and your partner's love -- you are blessed, and the poems say's you know it. Nice!! In an age of broken marriages, (guilty) its good to see one that has endured, and enjoying some free years feeling good about how the kids have grown...family success story, also meeting strict poetic criteria....technical written poetry is something I'm not good at, so well done...well done for the kids to!!! heheheh ^_^
I found no errors, and have nothing to suggest for improving your poem, nicely published to, cheers, abby
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Hello, lovely poetic declaration of you and your partner's love -- you are blessed, and the poems say's you know it. Nice!! In an age of broken marriages, (guilty) its good to see one that has endured, and enjoying some free years feeling good about how the kids have grown...family success story, also meeting strict poetic criteria....technical written poetry is something I'm not good at, so well done...well done for the kids to!!! heheheh ^_^
I found no errors, and have nothing to suggest for improving your poem, nicely published to, cheers, abby
Comment Written 27-Jan-2009
Comment from bent_but_not_broken
this is a really sweet poem. i hope that i can feel that kind of love when im older. not many people share a love that lasts im glad that you were blessed with it.
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this is a really sweet poem. i hope that i can feel that kind of love when im older. not many people share a love that lasts im glad that you were blessed with it.
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Comment Written 27-Jan-2009
Comment from adewpearl
Excellent meter, sonnet structure and rhyme and certainly a romantic theme - what a lovely story of passion's flames still burning strong in a couple who have raised several children. Brooke
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Excellent meter, sonnet structure and rhyme and certainly a romantic theme - what a lovely story of passion's flames still burning strong in a couple who have raised several children. Brooke
Comment Written 27-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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Brooke, why are you here? I thought you were busy writing about your painting! Now, SHOO!! Get busy! LOL!! Thanks much for your lovely review. Always appreciated, Sue :-))
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I said tomorrow!! it's too late to think that hard LOL
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I've been on here today so many hours, I'm embarrassed to say how many....
OKAY, I will. Got on while in bed this morning around 9:00 a.m. It is now 11:25 p.m.
I have hardly stopped. Did responding and reviewing a lot this morning. Then, I wrote my "inner child" and "sonnet" this afternoon. Now, I'm responding again!! LOL!!!!
I can't stop writing, Brooke. It's like I've turned into another person. Like a Mr. Hyde took over. LOL!!! I even think in iambics now! LMAO!!
Whoops....gotta go....there's a "new reply". HA!!!
Comment from LOA7
What a challenge, but I think you've got a winner. I hope to find a love like that, too. It was a great read, and I could actually sense the "beats" as I went along. All the best in the contest.
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What a challenge, but I think you've got a winner. I hope to find a love like that, too. It was a great read, and I could actually sense the "beats" as I went along. All the best in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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LOA7, so happy you enjoyed this sonnet. I do love a good sonnet. Thank you for your lovely review and compliments. With regards, Sue
Comment from EllieKaye
Hi Sixteez,
Nice to see you are still writing here on FS. I remember when you first joined (Don't I sound like an old owman talking to a kid?)
What a sweet poem. It is just full of love. I really loved this refreshing change.from the path I was taking in my reading. (NOt on FS- the newspaper!)
Ellie
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Hi Sixteez,
Nice to see you are still writing here on FS. I remember when you first joined (Don't I sound like an old owman talking to a kid?)
What a sweet poem. It is just full of love. I really loved this refreshing change.from the path I was taking in my reading. (NOt on FS- the newspaper!)
Ellie
Comment Written 27-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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Oh, boy! Every few years, I take a break from the newspaper. Sometimes, that hiatus can last up to a year. Of course, I do read some quick, important highlights on the internet, but that's it. Sometimes you've just got to give the mind a rest from the overload. Hey, the day I joined, I got addicted so bad, I have not had a day without it! LOL!! It's a terrible disease. Ha! Thanks so very much for your very kind review. Hope to see you around more often. :-)) Sue
Comment from RapturedHeart
This is utterly beautifully romantic, SK. How wonderful to see poems about devotion still gently burning, even years after the vows were spoken. Kudos to you.
Very tender and warm. All the best in the contest.
Heather
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This is utterly beautifully romantic, SK. How wonderful to see poems about devotion still gently burning, even years after the vows were spoken. Kudos to you.
Very tender and warm. All the best in the contest.
Heather
Comment Written 27-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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RapturedHeart, Thank you for your very kind review and lovely compliments. I do love an English Sonnet! With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from Jazh
I really enjoyed reading this poem - it flows well, with good rhymes. Just one formatting problem, the line: "A kiss good night"I love you, we declared" - needs some adjustment.
Very nice. Good luck with the contest. :)
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I really enjoyed reading this poem - it flows well, with good rhymes. Just one formatting problem, the line: "A kiss good night"I love you, we declared" - needs some adjustment.
Very nice. Good luck with the contest. :)
Comment Written 27-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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Yeah, I was in there editing when you arrived. You're TOO fast! HA! But, thanks for pointing it out. Thanks much for the review and well-wishes. Going to be some excellent sonnets in there. :-)) Sue
Comment from dportwood
I love a sonnet and many sonnets are about love as this one is. Nicely rhymed and metered and a pleasure to read. Good luck in the contest.
Duane
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I love a sonnet and many sonnets are about love as this one is. Nicely rhymed and metered and a pleasure to read. Good luck in the contest.
Duane
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Comment Written 27-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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Duane, I do love sonnets, also. So glad you enjoyed this one. Thank you for your very kind review and well-wishes for the contest. Always, Sue