CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 147 "Nuclear Family and the Divorce"A collection of poetry
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Comment from boberto
Now, this is a good anology. Interesting choice to describe divorce. Actually, the words fit well for one going through, or who has been through a divorce. It is devastating and for many, the effects are long laqsting. Well done.
boberto
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2008
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Now, this is a good anology. Interesting choice to describe divorce. Actually, the words fit well for one going through, or who has been through a divorce. It is devastating and for many, the effects are long laqsting. Well done.
boberto
Comment Written 22-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2008
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Boberto, thanks for reading my poem. And for your very generous review! I am glad you liked my work. Most sincerely, Sue
Comment from Donovan
A great comparison. On the charts of trauma in a persons life, death of a child and divorce are the top two. I think your comparison is excellent.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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A great comparison. On the charts of trauma in a persons life, death of a child and divorce are the top two. I think your comparison is excellent.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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Indeed, it is a tough road. But, thankfully, there is always the joy of moving on! Thank you so much for your most generous review and all your comments. Best regards, Sue
Comment from mmichelle97219
Except for the odd space after line five I thought this was just perfect. I liked the metaphor and how you expressed so much in such a short poem. Nice job.
Michelle
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Except for the odd space after line five I thought this was just perfect. I liked the metaphor and how you expressed so much in such a short poem. Nice job.
Michelle
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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I get a lot of comments about odd spaces between my lines. I'm going to have to contact the administrator again. Thanks much for bringing that to my attention.
And, thank you very much for your generous review and comments. Very glad you liked it! Most sincerely, Sue
Comment from Jo52800
I love how you blended your poem/emotion with nuclear explosions. The destruction of the nuclear family, etc. Quite well done. I'm not sure I like the part "Its name is Future." I think you can leave it out altogether and get the same thing out of it. Just an opinion. Still a very nicely crafted poem. Good job.
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I love how you blended your poem/emotion with nuclear explosions. The destruction of the nuclear family, etc. Quite well done. I'm not sure I like the part "Its name is Future." I think you can leave it out altogether and get the same thing out of it. Just an opinion. Still a very nicely crafted poem. Good job.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hello 60+ er,
What a clever poem! It's really good. The words you use paint a very clear picture of the subject of divorce and the experience of 'growing past' it. I am sure many people can relate well to this one. A real signature poem.
Thanks.
Whizpurr ^-^
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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Hello 60+ er,
What a clever poem! It's really good. The words you use paint a very clear picture of the subject of divorce and the experience of 'growing past' it. I am sure many people can relate well to this one. A real signature poem.
Thanks.
Whizpurr ^-^
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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Hey whizpurr, thank you so much for your generous review and all your great comments! So glad you liked it. Yes, unfortunately, so many here have mentioned how they can personally relate. But, poetry can help us all transcend many things. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from JoeKarbo
You have compared nuclear holocaust to a divorce, and rightly so.
When a family disbands, the ripples are devastating, and everyone suffers.
Your images are graphic, well written, and memorable.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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You have compared nuclear holocaust to a divorce, and rightly so.
When a family disbands, the ripples are devastating, and everyone suffers.
Your images are graphic, well written, and memorable.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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Joe, thank you so much for your very kind review and all your specific comments. Very much appreciated. Warmest regards, Sue
Comment from Scarlettdreams
Wow this really does have a dramatic flair. Sounds a little crazy to me, but I know that this is a real possibility. Well done. Bravo Bravo
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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Wow this really does have a dramatic flair. Sounds a little crazy to me, but I know that this is a real possibility. Well done. Bravo Bravo
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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Sounds crazy.....and it IS!!! Crazy as hell! Ha! It was years after my divorce that I could actually write this. Only because it takes that amount of time to actually reflect and see where you were. Thank you so much for your most generous review and comments! Warmest regards, Sue
Comment from DragonSkulls
I have to admit when I first read it I wasn't sure of the distace factor. Your author notes explained it well. So now that I see where you're coming from, this is one great piece of work you have penned Sue. "We call it fragile" Great write. /Ron
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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I have to admit when I first read it I wasn't sure of the distace factor. Your author notes explained it well. So now that I see where you're coming from, this is one great piece of work you have penned Sue. "We call it fragile" Great write. /Ron
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2008
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Ron, I'm so glad you read the notes. It's probably not possible to equate those "nuke" words with a divorce without them! Thanks for highlighting that line. It's one of my favorite lines of the poem. Really appreciate your very kind review and all your comments. Most sincerely, Sue
Comment from skye
Your metaphor of ground zero and divorce is absolutely wonderful.
No one realizes the devastation that divorce causes unless affected by it personally.
Children are the most horrific victims. Their lives are never the same, and it continutes to impact their whole life.
Very well done.
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Your metaphor of ground zero and divorce is absolutely wonderful.
No one realizes the devastation that divorce causes unless affected by it personally.
Children are the most horrific victims. Their lives are never the same, and it continutes to impact their whole life.
Very well done.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
Comment from Kingsland
this is a very cleverly written piece of poetic art
you have combined the thoughts of two different things and made them join in harmony so to speak. There is nothing for me to suggest for this well written verse.This was my pleasure to have read and reviewed it... John
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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this is a very cleverly written piece of poetic art
you have combined the thoughts of two different things and made them join in harmony so to speak. There is nothing for me to suggest for this well written verse.This was my pleasure to have read and reviewed it... John
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Hello Kingsland....Thank so so much for your most generous review and comments. So glad you liked it! With warmest regards, Sue