CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from utopian_dream_x
This is one of those poems which makes you think. Very well written. I like the following lines:
"No guide, nor a map
Only a voice that says yes
Lost until found"
I can almost feel the fear inside that person reading those lines. Overall, I found this piece of writing enjoyable to read. Well done!
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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This is one of those poems which makes you think. Very well written. I like the following lines:
"No guide, nor a map
Only a voice that says yes
Lost until found"
I can almost feel the fear inside that person reading those lines. Overall, I found this piece of writing enjoyable to read. Well done!
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Yes, a lot of trepidation to make that first move!!! Especially without a guide or a map (don't we all have those times!). I really appreciate your generous review and kind remarks. Regards.....Sue
Comment from Shane Marquardt
Your poem really made me think. The first thought I had was of the trip to heaven. I'm not sure why I had that impression. Because now I see it as the path through life.
Oh, well. The sign of a good writer is to allow their audience to come to many conclusions. Good work here.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Your poem really made me think. The first thought I had was of the trip to heaven. I'm not sure why I had that impression. Because now I see it as the path through life.
Oh, well. The sign of a good writer is to allow their audience to come to many conclusions. Good work here.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Shane, that IS the great thing about poetry and art. Can mean something else to others. It can most certainly be represented as salvation. I sure appreciate your very kind review and all your comments! Respectfully......Sue
Comment from jmyron
If you are a 60's kid you are probably around my age. I'm 58.
Good poem. Short but to the point. We all have that first step into new/hallowed ground - oftentimes more than once in a lifetime.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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If you are a 60's kid you are probably around my age. I'm 58.
Good poem. Short but to the point. We all have that first step into new/hallowed ground - oftentimes more than once in a lifetime.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Often times more than once, INDEED!!! Yet, we still need to brace ourselves and "go for it" - Ha!! Thank you so much for your very kind review and comments! Regards....Sue
Comment from Curt Mongold
Very nice piece. The only thing that caught me was the ending line of the 2nd stanza. It does not flow with the rest of the work, and I believe it could be a much better reading if a substitution could be found to accomodate the flow of this piece.
Sincerely,
Curt
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Very nice piece. The only thing that caught me was the ending line of the 2nd stanza. It does not flow with the rest of the work, and I believe it could be a much better reading if a substitution could be found to accomodate the flow of this piece.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Curt, someone else mentioned the same thing about that line. Hmmmm....I'm wrestling with it, though. But can't seem to change a word! Ha! But, I really appreciate your critique. And thank you for all your comments. Much appreciated.......Sue
Comment from smokyeye
You are very talented. The only thing is the repetition of "hallowed is the ground" it is not needed because you haven't strayed from original topic
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You are very talented. The only thing is the repetition of "hallowed is the ground" it is not needed because you haven't strayed from original topic
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Smoky, Thank you again for your reviewing my work. I so appreciate your very kind review and remarks. Now that I think about it, my initial "Hallowed is the ground" is my initial discovery that it is fresh ground that I've not been on. And then, in the last stanza, it is repeated for the emphasis of triumph. Do you have any further critique on my thinking there? Any comments are more than welcome if you have the time. Much appreciated.....Sue
Comment from Karen Fay
I had to read this poem a couple of times to understand it, but that's a very good thing. It made me think. Then I read that you are a new "Empty Nester" me too. That's when it made sense. Anyhow, I enjoyed your poem. thank you...Karen
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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I had to read this poem a couple of times to understand it, but that's a very good thing. It made me think. Then I read that you are a new "Empty Nester" me too. That's when it made sense. Anyhow, I enjoyed your poem. thank you...Karen
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Karen, so glad you took the time to read and re-read. Thank you very much for your kind review and comments! Regards, Sue
Comment from fastdigits
A thought provoking writing
about change, going places
in life that you have not ventured
out in, hallowed ground upon
which others will follow.
Well done
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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A thought provoking writing
about change, going places
in life that you have not ventured
out in, hallowed ground upon
which others will follow.
Well done
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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So glad my poem resonated with you. Thank you so much for your very generous review and comments. Regards, Sue
Comment from sara-beth
I like this poem, it's very thought provoking. The idea of walking where no one else has is actually really cool,....I like the last stanza, "Hallowed is that ground, still trampled by me, others will follow willingly, set free!"
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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I like this poem, it's very thought provoking. The idea of walking where no one else has is actually really cool,....I like the last stanza, "Hallowed is that ground, still trampled by me, others will follow willingly, set free!"
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Sara-beth, I am so glad my poem resonated with you. Thank you very much for your kind review and specific comments! My regards...Sue
Comment from bkrighter
This poem interests me. I wonder about 'hallowed is the ground.' I don't dispute it, I just haven't thought before of the arena of a new venture being holy, or the path of the trailblazer being holy. I wonder whether they are always holy, or if it depends upon the venture or upon the intentions of the trailblazer. Intriguing. Thanks for giving me such food for thought.
I wish you the best as you continue to write.
Steve
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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This poem interests me. I wonder about 'hallowed is the ground.' I don't dispute it, I just haven't thought before of the arena of a new venture being holy, or the path of the trailblazer being holy. I wonder whether they are always holy, or if it depends upon the venture or upon the intentions of the trailblazer. Intriguing. Thanks for giving me such food for thought.
I wish you the best as you continue to write.
Steve
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Steve, thank YOU for giving me your 'food for thought' also! Perhaps one can feel that if you are wanting SO bad to walk on that ground and do that "thing" you want to, yet fear...perhaps it can be hallowed because it is has not yet been touched (by that person, at least). Anyway, just thought I'd ramble on about that with a 'perhaps'. I thank you for your generous review and specific comments. So glad you liked it! With regards, Sue
Comment from Scribbelini
Very sage and poignant, this piece flows well.
Hallowed is that ground!
Still trampled by me
Others will follow
Willingly...set free
really love this stanza.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Very sage and poignant, this piece flows well.
Hallowed is that ground!
Still trampled by me
Others will follow
Willingly...set free
really love this stanza.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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I am SO happy you highlighted the stanza you like! And thank you for your most generous review and specific comments. I am humbled by your words....Sue