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Comment from Tweedypie
Hi, jaysquires. What you are saying is that there has to be a mixture of different things to keep the reader's interests. A person that writes a book with chapters after chapters of constant conflict can be just as bad or as boring as a book that has pages and pages of description without any action or dialogue. A book has to have a balance of description, action, dialogue, romance and conflict. If a book is all of one of these, it turns off the reader. A reader can come in and read a chapter after previous chapters of action and conflict, and since they have not read the chapters before, they may find this one lacking in conflict. However, it is only a rest between action and conflict and necessary for the reader who has kept up with the reading. Hope this makes sense. Anyway, I was interested on what you had to say about character and drama. Good article on MICRO-CRITTER AND THE EAVESDROPPER.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2007
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Hi, jaysquires. What you are saying is that there has to be a mixture of different things to keep the reader's interests. A person that writes a book with chapters after chapters of constant conflict can be just as bad or as boring as a book that has pages and pages of description without any action or dialogue. A book has to have a balance of description, action, dialogue, romance and conflict. If a book is all of one of these, it turns off the reader. A reader can come in and read a chapter after previous chapters of action and conflict, and since they have not read the chapters before, they may find this one lacking in conflict. However, it is only a rest between action and conflict and necessary for the reader who has kept up with the reading. Hope this makes sense. Anyway, I was interested on what you had to say about character and drama. Good article on MICRO-CRITTER AND THE EAVESDROPPER.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2007
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2007
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And to think you did it in one paragraph, Tweedypie! Thank you for reading it so closely and summarizing it so completely. Glad to have you as a critter.
Jay
Comment from Adora Bayles
I can't wait! My own passion for writing escalates by the mere act of reading your informative, tongue-in-cheek articles. Did I say that right? Hey, Webster! C'mere a minute! ...as a joke...
Well, it is funny. But taken seriously. I will re-read to reinforce me. Thanks for sharing.
Adora
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2007
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I can't wait! My own passion for writing escalates by the mere act of reading your informative, tongue-in-cheek articles. Did I say that right? Hey, Webster! C'mere a minute! ...as a joke...
Well, it is funny. But taken seriously. I will re-read to reinforce me. Thanks for sharing.
Adora
Comment Written 23-Jan-2007
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2007
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Adora, you are becoming my best promoter. A six! Thank you for the confidence you give me to start work on that next blank page. By the way, when is your next piece coming out. I'm needing an Adora-fix. Bless you....
Jay
Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman
this style of writing is both humourous and informative; seems very creative to me ;-)
well written throughout; good imagery;
A stray ? is found in the para: "You've been a patient critter already. right after "...been so far ...") I'd lose one of the . found there too :-)
love this truth: "...alchemical interaction between the writer and his reader." very nice!
like the "...writer/reader embace." too very creative
lol good bit of humor with "...my words will come out with a Welsh accent." think your article is well written with great elements;
I think Tom should insist everyone read this; I'm going to try and find the time to go back to the beginning chapters
You get the point across in an interesting way and I appreciate that
excellent, well written; if i had 6 stars i'd plant them here but alas, I am bankrupt for the rest of this month;
I appreciate this article; thank you
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2007
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this style of writing is both humourous and informative; seems very creative to me ;-)
well written throughout; good imagery;
A stray ? is found in the para: "You've been a patient critter already. right after "...been so far ...") I'd lose one of the . found there too :-)
love this truth: "...alchemical interaction between the writer and his reader." very nice!
like the "...writer/reader embace." too very creative
lol good bit of humor with "...my words will come out with a Welsh accent." think your article is well written with great elements;
I think Tom should insist everyone read this; I'm going to try and find the time to go back to the beginning chapters
You get the point across in an interesting way and I appreciate that
excellent, well written; if i had 6 stars i'd plant them here but alas, I am bankrupt for the rest of this month;
I appreciate this article; thank you
Comment Written 23-Jan-2007
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2007
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I'm running out of ways to thank you, astrolite, for your thoughful crits. As soon as I finish this I'm going to go back and see if I can find the nit you found. I believe you indicated that it was a "period." That's odd, isn't it. I'll go back and take a look. Thank you for your eagle eye....
Jay
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not odd, errors happen; what i really noticed was the stray ? or I wouldn't have picked up on the extra . lol. At anyrate, you are very welcome :-)
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Astrolite 1, I'm really confused. I went back to that paragraph to edit it, but there was no stray question mark. Sometimes the editnazi substitutes question marks for quotes. I've seen that happen a lot. I wonder if, when I went back under "edit" if it could have corrected itself? At any rate, I couldn't find it. If you find it again, let me know, okay?
Jay
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Jay I went to look, I know the editor is a dang fool and sometimes anything is liable to happen lol; but I couldn't believe that I mentioned something that wasn't there,, (if so, I'm in bigger trouble than I even imagined lol) so here it is: ...")? is how it shows up to me; see below
You've been a patient critter already. May I ask you to be patient once more and forgive me an aside (and some of you are saying in one voice: "That's all it's been so far ....")?
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May I ask you to be patient once more and forgive me an aside (and some of you are saying in one voice: "That's all it's been so far ....")? [Thank you for getting back to me on that. This sentence is one of the most awkward I've written in over 40 years. I almost scrapped the whole sentence -- except it was so doggone cute... The question mark belongs there. It is for the main sentence beginning with "May I ask you" which does require a question mark. But that question doesn't end until after the parenthetical interlude (the cutesy punch line). What's inside the parentheses is a statement. The question mark can't go there. So, it had to go outside it, after the for period ellipses. In any respect, it's awkward ... and I would regret it, if -- as I said -- it wasn't so freaking cute! Thanks again for taking the time on this.
Jay
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ooh okay now i got what you meant,, so here's my suggestion so as to not confusel the already slightly confused lol
YOU WROTE:
You've been a patient critter already. May I ask you to be patient once more and forgive me an aside (and some of you are saying in one voice: "That's all it's been so far ....")?
MY SUGGESTION:
You've been a patient critter already. May I ask you to be patient once more. Forgive me an aside (and some of you are saying in one voice: "That's all it's been so far..." would that work? I think it's a cute sentence too. :-) Tricia
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You're a bloody genius, Tricia .... I took your advice almost to the letter. I added a "please." What I lack in accurate writing, I make up for in politeness. Thanks for your help.
Jay
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lol the only thing I notice when I wrote that, is that I forgot the ? after:
May I ask you to be patient once more. should've been the ? as punctuation not the period lol.
You're welcome; I enjoyed this discourse :-)
Comment from Balladeer
Well, I believe that I now have a much better understanding of the writing and reviewing process. Your piece is quite well researched and brings up some excellent points to ponder. Ponder I shall do and I look forward to reading more work of yours in the future.Be well.
Skyelar Pollack
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2007
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Well, I believe that I now have a much better understanding of the writing and reviewing process. Your piece is quite well researched and brings up some excellent points to ponder. Ponder I shall do and I look forward to reading more work of yours in the future.Be well.
Skyelar Pollack
Comment Written 23-Jan-2007
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2007
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Wow! Thank you, Skyelar, for your thoughtful comments. I look forward to having you back for more of the series. You are appreciated.
Jay
Comment from Raven Vlad
I don't know if I'll become a better writer by reading about what you as a critter look for (I certainly hope I do), but I know it's not doing me any harm. You do a good job of taking a subject that, mishandled, could easily become boring and instead making it entertaining to read about, both by keeping a light tone and by throwing in little gems like bunny sex and story-muffins. I'm definitely going to have to remember that latter one. =)
No SPAG that I noticed, and you've structured this logically and informatively so that the reading flows well and makes sense. Well done; I look forward to the next installment!
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2007
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I don't know if I'll become a better writer by reading about what you as a critter look for (I certainly hope I do), but I know it's not doing me any harm. You do a good job of taking a subject that, mishandled, could easily become boring and instead making it entertaining to read about, both by keeping a light tone and by throwing in little gems like bunny sex and story-muffins. I'm definitely going to have to remember that latter one. =)
No SPAG that I noticed, and you've structured this logically and informatively so that the reading flows well and makes sense. Well done; I look forward to the next installment!
Comment Written 22-Jan-2007
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2007
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Thank you so very much, Ancalime Erendis, for your kind words. I am happy you enjoyed your read. I hope you have taken something out of the chapter to use, though from the well-thought-out crit, and your knowledge of the subject matter, I don't think there was a whole lot to impart. Stay tuned. I'll try to keep you entertained if not adding to your education. Best to you...
Jay
Comment from Lady Waukesha
Well, this is the most useful piece of writing
I have laid eyes on all week. Oh wait, its Monday.
But never mind, its great advice for all of us
writers here on Fanstory.
Thank you so much, this is great.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2007
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Well, this is the most useful piece of writing
I have laid eyes on all week. Oh wait, its Monday.
But never mind, its great advice for all of us
writers here on Fanstory.
Thank you so much, this is great.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2007
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2007
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Marcopolo, you are too funny! I'm glad you found it helpful, if for only a moment. It was kind of you to be so encouraging in your crit. Best to you in your writing.
Jay
Comment from BadBrad
I think this is a great asset to the fanStory community. You make great points and have excellent suggestions. I look forward to going back and reading the previous chapters, and anxiously await the forthcoming ones.
As a new writer, I need all the help I can get. keep these articles coming, and I'll keep reading.
I didn't like that fact that this article seems to do some of the things you mention not to do, such as being a tad wordy and overly descriptive. then again, too much is different for every reader, right?
Thanks for the insights and effort.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2007
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I think this is a great asset to the fanStory community. You make great points and have excellent suggestions. I look forward to going back and reading the previous chapters, and anxiously await the forthcoming ones.
As a new writer, I need all the help I can get. keep these articles coming, and I'll keep reading.
I didn't like that fact that this article seems to do some of the things you mention not to do, such as being a tad wordy and overly descriptive. then again, too much is different for every reader, right?
Thanks for the insights and effort.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2007
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2007
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You am bad Brad! lol. How the guy does talk, eh? Sorry, hope you find the next segment a little less verbose. Best to you...
Jay
Comment from mdeem
Very well done. I enjoyed this very much and I fully intend to go back and catch up on the chapters I've missed thusfar. Thank you for sharing this well written and enjoyable lesson.
Mark
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2007
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Very well done. I enjoyed this very much and I fully intend to go back and catch up on the chapters I've missed thusfar. Thank you for sharing this well written and enjoyable lesson.
Mark
Comment Written 22-Jan-2007
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2007
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Wow! A 6 star! Thank you so much, Mark, for your kindness. I look forward to your seeing the other chapters and, of course, staying aboard for the future ones. The best to you in your writing...
Jay
Comment from Soaring Eagle1
hi jaysquires
that was a fantastic story one that I will remember for awhaile. as far as I could see there weren't any negatives as far as I could tell. great work.
LWW
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2007
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hi jaysquires
that was a fantastic story one that I will remember for awhaile. as far as I could see there weren't any negatives as far as I could tell. great work.
LWW
Comment Written 22-Jan-2007
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2007
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Thank you so much, LWW, for your kind words. I'm glad you found it worthy enough to keep with you a while. Best of luck on your writing.
Comment from sandramarie
I had to think about this piece for a few minutes before deciding what rating to give it, Jay. On the surface, this seems to be a series of witty anecdotes and funny visuals, but, if one pays attention, there is actually a lot of important and valuable information here. I dawned on me that your style of teaching is subtle and entertaining. You get a point across with the reader not even realizing it. I came away from this fully entertained with a clearer picture of the process of reading and writing. Well done.
Take care,
Sandy
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2007
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I had to think about this piece for a few minutes before deciding what rating to give it, Jay. On the surface, this seems to be a series of witty anecdotes and funny visuals, but, if one pays attention, there is actually a lot of important and valuable information here. I dawned on me that your style of teaching is subtle and entertaining. You get a point across with the reader not even realizing it. I came away from this fully entertained with a clearer picture of the process of reading and writing. Well done.
Take care,
Sandy
Comment Written 22-Jan-2007
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2007
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Whoa, Sandy, I couldn't ask for a better endorsement for what I wrote and the way I sincerely hoped its message would be received. Thank you so much for your kindness. I hope you continue on with the series.
Jay