How This Critter Crits
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Comment from Delahay
Should I be concerned that the ramblings that you sometimes include in your writing actually make sense to me? But that is beside the point. I don't make a habit of scrolling over something before I read but I guess I do tend to skip over anything that is written in one big clump without much in the way of spacing or dialog to break it up. I don't think I could go for Mr. Adler's idea of reading three times but I can see where the first run through of scanning makes sense.
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Should I be concerned that the ramblings that you sometimes include in your writing actually make sense to me? But that is beside the point. I don't make a habit of scrolling over something before I read but I guess I do tend to skip over anything that is written in one big clump without much in the way of spacing or dialog to break it up. I don't think I could go for Mr. Adler's idea of reading three times but I can see where the first run through of scanning makes sense.
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thanks, Ward. A lot of rambling. Guilty as charged. Humorous, I hope ... and that the humor pulled some readers through the ideas so that some might have stuck to them like lint. There wasn't a whole lot of earth-shattering stuff in the 1800 word post. Couple of chuckles ain't bad.
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Well I, for one, find it humorous. Of course I'm not sure if that can be considered an endorsement or not.
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is yet another fine addition to the series. I too had big dreams when I left the army. I also had 5, 10, 15 and 20 year plans. They have all gone by the wayside too, but I think you are a great writer. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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This is yet another fine addition to the series. I too had big dreams when I left the army. I also had 5, 10, 15 and 20 year plans. They have all gone by the wayside too, but I think you are a great writer. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thank you for your compliment, Tomes. I'm glad you're enjoying the series.
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Indeed I am.
Comment from madhatter1977
Ha! I was formerly a very bad book editor and web editor. I agree with you about font size and spacing. This is a very humorous yet edifying look at what we all try to do on FanStory. It takes time. Not everyone is as intelligent as you! I am very impressed by the erudite way you wind up your readership to make them change their ways. Thanks for your great review of my poem and I look forward to more of your work, Jay! Best wishes, Pete
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Ha! I was formerly a very bad book editor and web editor. I agree with you about font size and spacing. This is a very humorous yet edifying look at what we all try to do on FanStory. It takes time. Not everyone is as intelligent as you! I am very impressed by the erudite way you wind up your readership to make them change their ways. Thanks for your great review of my poem and I look forward to more of your work, Jay! Best wishes, Pete
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thank you, Pete. I appreciate your kind words and the rating. I'm glad it's resonating with you.
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Thanks, Jay! It was a very clever piece. If you have time I've just posted a chapter for "The Incident". I'd be interested to know what help you can offer? Best wishes, Pete :)
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I would love to. I have it pulled up now from your profile page. My question is why it didn't show up on my "new posting" screen? I'm supposed to get all yours in my box.
Comment from Sis Cat
Well, this is excellent. Where to begin? First, your experience mine with posts in script or large fonts, large blocks of descriptions, extra. The central core of your crit is to see things from the reader's point of view. Bring your post back up and see how the reader looks at it, experience it. Also, strive to go through the gauntlet of the crit to create publishable writing. I get a sense that many writings on FS do not want to be published beyond it. I found your essay fun and informative. Your use of bubbling oatmeal imagery again caused me to smile. Thanks.
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Well, this is excellent. Where to begin? First, your experience mine with posts in script or large fonts, large blocks of descriptions, extra. The central core of your crit is to see things from the reader's point of view. Bring your post back up and see how the reader looks at it, experience it. Also, strive to go through the gauntlet of the crit to create publishable writing. I get a sense that many writings on FS do not want to be published beyond it. I found your essay fun and informative. Your use of bubbling oatmeal imagery again caused me to smile. Thanks.
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thank you, Andre, and also for sharing some of your personal insight about critting. We all grow in that way.
Comment from Gloria ....
Dear Jay, Oh, I totally meant cereal killer because I was talking about breakfast. See how I slipped that little bit of misdirection into my review to you here?
OK now on to macro-critting. So you are a pilot? I am totally impressed. Figures though with your immaculate thought process.
You were watching me scroll? Jaaaaay, you cheeky colt. Now I'm blushing.
Uh oh, there's the oatmeal again. That can't be a good sign.
Oh goodness, I edit the crap out of my stuff before I release it. The only thing that troubles me now is the difference in colours between the classic FS and new FS. Ahem.
LMAO you are cracking me up with this post, Jay. A small fist between a scene break?
Of course we all want our work to be published, and we also want the movie deal too, and if THEY want to make dolls and T-shirts too, I'm not opposed to the idea.
An empty box? How cool is that. LOL.
packaging doesn't make up for having nothing inside--whether you're a wife (a husband) or a reader. I couldn't resist. It's not a legit complaint. Think of it like an empty box crit.
Editors don't like Arial? I would've guessed that would be favourite because the type is clean with no gewgaws or doo-dads.
This was a super fun chapter, Jay. I'm saving my six for you for something else. But, having said that, I haven't had this much fun scrolling in yonks.
Gloria
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Dear Jay, Oh, I totally meant cereal killer because I was talking about breakfast. See how I slipped that little bit of misdirection into my review to you here?
OK now on to macro-critting. So you are a pilot? I am totally impressed. Figures though with your immaculate thought process.
You were watching me scroll? Jaaaaay, you cheeky colt. Now I'm blushing.
Uh oh, there's the oatmeal again. That can't be a good sign.
Oh goodness, I edit the crap out of my stuff before I release it. The only thing that troubles me now is the difference in colours between the classic FS and new FS. Ahem.
LMAO you are cracking me up with this post, Jay. A small fist between a scene break?
Of course we all want our work to be published, and we also want the movie deal too, and if THEY want to make dolls and T-shirts too, I'm not opposed to the idea.
An empty box? How cool is that. LOL.
packaging doesn't make up for having nothing inside--whether you're a wife (a husband) or a reader. I couldn't resist. It's not a legit complaint. Think of it like an empty box crit.
Editors don't like Arial? I would've guessed that would be favourite because the type is clean with no gewgaws or doo-dads.
This was a super fun chapter, Jay. I'm saving my six for you for something else. But, having said that, I haven't had this much fun scrolling in yonks.
Gloria
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thanks, Gloria. Good! Cereal was right! Wasn't that idea for a costume funny? I think Arial's okay. That's why I used a catch-all for other fonts. I'm glad this entertained you. You and a lot of other Fanstorians are so experienced in your critting, you can read my series for the humor.
Comment from justafan
Guilty!! Guilty as charged :(..You have this ability, this charisma that no matter what you are on about, I am listening and having a blast while doing it! Please "crit" everything I do. I know when you do, I will be a better writer for it! You are a peach!
Always Justafan
Missy
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Guilty!! Guilty as charged :(..You have this ability, this charisma that no matter what you are on about, I am listening and having a blast while doing it! Please "crit" everything I do. I know when you do, I will be a better writer for it! You are a peach!
Always Justafan
Missy
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Yours is such a magnificent compliment, Missy. I believe I did crit one or two of yours, didn't I? If I didn't I'll keep my eye open for your next one. Meanwhile thank you so much for your kindness.
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You certainly have and did a wonderful job at it I might add. I hardly bled at all :) lol. I stole your word though..."crit". It was one of those "The devil made me do it thangs!" I am still smilin from reading Macro-Critting (The Wrap).
Comment from Curly Girly
Well, I enjoyed getting down and dirty-but naked with you, Mr Squires. You raised some good points, and I enjoyed your 'present' analogy. I agree with what you had to say, no faults found--all good!
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Well, I enjoyed getting down and dirty-but naked with you, Mr Squires. You raised some good points, and I enjoyed your 'present' analogy. I agree with what you had to say, no faults found--all good!
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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All good, that's good! Thanks, Nicole for your compliment. I'm pleased you liked it.
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I had a giggle when I read your naughty chapter, because mine's all about doing it for the first time.
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Tell me about it! Oh, wait, you already did, and I liked it--your writing not what happened to our poor innocent girl. Like I said, that was the best example of your writing I've come across.
Comment from cjvaughn
Wow, That was a lot of information.
I liked how you explained things, and I think I need to make some adjustments in my ah.. Critting... or Crittering skills.
I have only been reading twice. Oops... Cj
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2007
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Wow, That was a lot of information.
I liked how you explained things, and I think I need to make some adjustments in my ah.. Critting... or Crittering skills.
I have only been reading twice. Oops... Cj
Comment Written 14-Apr-2007
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2007
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Thank you for your kindness, Cj. Glad to have you aboard. I hope you continue to find this series helpful.
Jay
Comment from suda
Hello Jay,
I was laughing out loud with the cardboard face cuts...geez! But, your point was well taken.
Thanks for sharing. Your conversation-like style still has me zipping through the info at a good pace. Well done.
Susan
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2007
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Hello Jay,
I was laughing out loud with the cardboard face cuts...geez! But, your point was well taken.
Thanks for sharing. Your conversation-like style still has me zipping through the info at a good pace. Well done.
Susan
Comment Written 24-Jan-2007
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2007
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Thank you once again, Susan. I feel so privileged that you are going back to read the previous chapters. Glad to have you as a fan.
Jay
Comment from mamaboots
Hi Jay,
Yes, I am still with you. Good point on all those changing fonts, especially the very small stuff. I know when I encounter 10 point or smaller, I generally skip it. Weird fonts also have a way of making my head hurt. Poetry is different and I can appreciate the different types there, but in prose, I must agree with you. I find it rather ironic that we seem (so far) to crit in the same way. Visual is a big factor for me when deciding whether to crit or not. I did catch a couple of errors in this one:
in Charleston(,) South Carolina.
Am I right it assuming that most writers on FanStory - need to change "it" to "in"
I have read an excerpt of that book you referenced "How to Read a Book" and I must say it was very enlightening. Do you think I will get caught up today? See ya later,
mamaboots
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2007
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Hi Jay,
Yes, I am still with you. Good point on all those changing fonts, especially the very small stuff. I know when I encounter 10 point or smaller, I generally skip it. Weird fonts also have a way of making my head hurt. Poetry is different and I can appreciate the different types there, but in prose, I must agree with you. I find it rather ironic that we seem (so far) to crit in the same way. Visual is a big factor for me when deciding whether to crit or not. I did catch a couple of errors in this one:
in Charleston(,) South Carolina.
Am I right it assuming that most writers on FanStory - need to change "it" to "in"
I have read an excerpt of that book you referenced "How to Read a Book" and I must say it was very enlightening. Do you think I will get caught up today? See ya later,
mamaboots
Comment Written 21-Jan-2007
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2007
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Once again ... thanks for going the extra mile. I'll print out your crit and make those changes -- I hope -- tomorrow. I really appreciate your eagle eye.
Jay