The waves
The ocean waves.62 total reviews
Comment from Jacob1395
I love the sound of the roaring sea. It always makes me feel relaxed whenever I hear it, and you describe the motion of the waves so well in your piece. A well written piece. Good luck in the contest.
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I love the sound of the roaring sea. It always makes me feel relaxed whenever I hear it, and you describe the motion of the waves so well in your piece. A well written piece. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
Comment from estory
I think you captured something of the feel of the rhythm of the waves in the meter and rhyme scheme, and it is romantic in that it articulates this sense of the imperfection of experience; life is ephemeral, the joy we live is short and comes to nothing like the waves on the shore. estory
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I think you captured something of the feel of the rhythm of the waves in the meter and rhyme scheme, and it is romantic in that it articulates this sense of the imperfection of experience; life is ephemeral, the joy we live is short and comes to nothing like the waves on the shore. estory
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
Comment from Wendyanne
Hi Willie. I found your little well written piece of poetry very interesting and thought-provoking. It is so true that once a wave breaks on the shore it no longer exists. Good luck in the contest.
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Hi Willie. I found your little well written piece of poetry very interesting and thought-provoking. It is so true that once a wave breaks on the shore it no longer exists. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
Comment from Yusita
I loved this poem! It's hard to find a poem about the sea (in any shape or form) that I do not like, but this one is one of my favorites, I'd say. "Only to become a wave no more". It's true... once the wave crashes onto the shore, it disappears as if it never existed.
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I loved this poem! It's hard to find a poem about the sea (in any shape or form) that I do not like, but this one is one of my favorites, I'd say. "Only to become a wave no more". It's true... once the wave crashes onto the shore, it disappears as if it never existed.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
Comment from Ginda Simpson
I can't help but relate your poem about the ocean waves to the waves of life that often feel like they are going to take us under. But they don't and they become a wave no more. Nice poem with good rhyming.
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I can't help but relate your poem about the ocean waves to the waves of life that often feel like they are going to take us under. But they don't and they become a wave no more. Nice poem with good rhyming.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
Comment from Sally Law
What a beautiful poem from your talented hand. Happy Birthday, my the way. I see you are celebrating by awarding us with a treasure from the sea. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the roaring sea contest.
Sally XOs
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What a beautiful poem from your talented hand. Happy Birthday, my the way. I see you are celebrating by awarding us with a treasure from the sea. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the roaring sea contest.
Sally XOs
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
Comment from Dawn Munro
There is a kind of melancholy to this beautiful verse, my friend -- indeed, a wave reaching the shore 'is no more', and so it is with life on earth, with all living things.
Beautifully done.
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There is a kind of melancholy to this beautiful verse, my friend -- indeed, a wave reaching the shore 'is no more', and so it is with life on earth, with all living things.
Beautifully done.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
Comment from JSD
Well, Happy Birthday! Just read Debi's tribute to you. Your poem is a lovely idea, although I wonder if rather than repeating the same idea at the end you could take it to some metaphorical meaning? Like dreams, or life? Also, fifth line should be 'its', not 'it's'.
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Well, Happy Birthday! Just read Debi's tribute to you. Your poem is a lovely idea, although I wonder if rather than repeating the same idea at the end you could take it to some metaphorical meaning? Like dreams, or life? Also, fifth line should be 'its', not 'it's'.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
Comment from June Sargent
This poem offers much food for thought. The natural cycle of the oceans will continue long after we are gone. Wave upon wave, flowing and ebbing - reminding us that our footprints are not permanent. But I will still try to make my mark...I enjoyed your sentiments.
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This poem offers much food for thought. The natural cycle of the oceans will continue long after we are gone. Wave upon wave, flowing and ebbing - reminding us that our footprints are not permanent. But I will still try to make my mark...I enjoyed your sentiments.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
Comment from Aussie
Good one Willie. I liked your poem because I live near the Pacific Ocean. Sitting and watching the waves come in and lap the shore. Wave after wave takes the other's place. We have a cyclone at the moment and the sea is monstrous, surging on the seafront. Most have evacuated that area. The sea is angry. Blessings, K xx
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Good one Willie. I liked your poem because I live near the Pacific Ocean. Sitting and watching the waves come in and lap the shore. Wave after wave takes the other's place. We have a cyclone at the moment and the sea is monstrous, surging on the seafront. Most have evacuated that area. The sea is angry. Blessings, K xx
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023