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Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Debi, very good, very cute. I think from time to time we all have a conversation with ourselves, especially when in doubt. Your poem reads and flows well and has good humor within. Of special note:
~ I ~ I am a silent partner; only here in case they fight
(Somebody has to monitor the girls!)
A fun poem. This poem made me smile. Xo. M
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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Hi Debi, very good, very cute. I think from time to time we all have a conversation with ourselves, especially when in doubt. Your poem reads and flows well and has good humor within. Of special note:
~ I ~ I am a silent partner; only here in case they fight
(Somebody has to monitor the girls!)
A fun poem. This poem made me smile. Xo. M
Comment Written 12-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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Hey Margaret! You are so sweet and I appreciate all of your very kind comments for this silly poem. Which is my favorite kind to write and read. So Thank you again my dear friend.
Comment from Lola G
The title and artwork are good and reinforce the overall piece. I expected the central eye to wink at me when I read the first stanza, 'I am silent..... only here if they fight.' I felt that I was in on 'I's' joke now. Hope that makes sense.
The jokes are corny, stupid, and made me groan so long and hard it was wonderful! This is exactly the kind of hokey jokes that the world needs now. I loved, loved, loved this poem.
My only suggestion for improvement is to consider rewriting the first stanza's introductions. Perhaps an explanatory line to set the scene? Like:
One day on a stool I sat
me and myself down to chat
I'm not a poet but I needed to read the first stanza a couple of times to understand the setup. Otherwise, this is a humorous poem that I can relate to.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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The title and artwork are good and reinforce the overall piece. I expected the central eye to wink at me when I read the first stanza, 'I am silent..... only here if they fight.' I felt that I was in on 'I's' joke now. Hope that makes sense.
The jokes are corny, stupid, and made me groan so long and hard it was wonderful! This is exactly the kind of hokey jokes that the world needs now. I loved, loved, loved this poem.
My only suggestion for improvement is to consider rewriting the first stanza's introductions. Perhaps an explanatory line to set the scene? Like:
One day on a stool I sat
me and myself down to chat
I'm not a poet but I needed to read the first stanza a couple of times to understand the setup. Otherwise, this is a humorous poem that I can relate to.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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You are so sweet and I appreciate all of your very kind comments for this silly poem. Which is my favorite kind to write and read. I also love the feedback and suggestions, and I did make a couple changes to make it easier to read. Thanks for that too my dear friend.
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You are so welcome and thank YOU for your sweet message. I think we are two chicks hatched from the same clutch. Ha!
Comment from Mike Grimes
This was great! I loved the soda--pressing one. It reminded me of one I heard:
My dad use to work at the sod factory but he got canned.
Thanks for the laughs, I really enjoyed it!
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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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This was great! I loved the soda--pressing one. It reminded me of one I heard:
My dad use to work at the sod factory but he got canned.
Thanks for the laughs, I really enjoyed it!
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Comment Written 12-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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Hi Mike! You are so sweet and I appreciate all of your very kind comments for this silly poem. Which is my favorite kind to write and read. So Thank you again my dear friend.
Comment from Boogienights
Fantastic! It seems like the two of you enjoy each other. Good thing you're two halfs of a whole. I like your jokes to by the way. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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Fantastic! It seems like the two of you enjoy each other. Good thing you're two halfs of a whole. I like your jokes to by the way. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 12-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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Thank you Sharon. You are so sweet and I appreciate your very kind words for this poem. And your six stars. My keyboard is acting up so forgive all. The stop and starting. Of. Sentences. It happens when I type too fast.
Now I need to tell you. A big. Congratulations Grandma!! Heather told me about how you had become one. Isn't. It everything you always. Dreamed of? It is my favorite thing. In the. World.. i am thrilled. And. As. Time goes by. I look forward to. Your grandma poems, my dear. Friend. Thanks again.
Comment from royowen
I think we all have conversations with ourselves, but perhaps they're no quite so audible, but you know what they say about talking to oneself, like Norman Bates in psycho, now he was nuts, he was answering himself back. Beautifully written Debi, great rhyming, well done. Blessings Roy,
PS. When's your operation, I will pray its success dear girl,
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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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I think we all have conversations with ourselves, but perhaps they're no quite so audible, but you know what they say about talking to oneself, like Norman Bates in psycho, now he was nuts, he was answering himself back. Beautifully written Debi, great rhyming, well done. Blessings Roy,
PS. When's your operation, I will pray its success dear girl,
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Comment Written 12-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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You are my hero Roy, right behind God. Thank you! I know the cataracts will go well and I will accept the answer He gives me as far as the shingles and retinas. But I thank you with all my heart for the prayers. June 14 and 28. And thanks for the sweet review. I am keeping it light hearted this week.
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Bless you dear girl I will pray, God is your healer.